The street is my home
No-one chooses to be homeless15 total reviews
Comment from Annika Fiercely
Very sad indeed :((
I especially love the last stanza. 'this is not how it was meant to be'...what a poignant sentiment.
I want to point out one typo - 'passers by' should be one word!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Very sad indeed :((
I especially love the last stanza. 'this is not how it was meant to be'...what a poignant sentiment.
I want to point out one typo - 'passers by' should be one word!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your comments
Comment from kahpot
Excellent and yes except for a chosen few no body wants to be homeless and that is a very sad position in this day, very well written and best wishes for your competition****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Excellent and yes except for a chosen few no body wants to be homeless and that is a very sad position in this day, very well written and best wishes for your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Kahpot.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a terrific entry for the sad story contest. It's so sad to see such misfortune. Most have tales to tell of how it once was... Good luck! -Kerry
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This is a terrific entry for the sad story contest. It's so sad to see such misfortune. Most have tales to tell of how it once was... Good luck! -Kerry
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Kerry
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
This is heartbreaking because I see it every day in New York City. The apathy of the masses is devastating, and you capture that with grace and a huge open heart. Thank you for addressing this so important facet of our society.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This is heartbreaking because I see it every day in New York City. The apathy of the masses is devastating, and you capture that with grace and a huge open heart. Thank you for addressing this so important facet of our society.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Shauna
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt and sad poem. To see someone on the street made us feel sorry for them that their world fell apart and they have nowhere else to go, and it seems noone cares about them our there in the cold.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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A very well-written heartfelt and sad poem. To see someone on the street made us feel sorry for them that their world fell apart and they have nowhere else to go, and it seems noone cares about them our there in the cold.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Sandra
Comment from meeshu
very well written, sad, yes but not sappy. not a new problem but one that has to be addressed now. before it's too late. good luck..
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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very well written, sad, yes but not sappy. not a new problem but one that has to be addressed now. before it's too late. good luck..
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Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thanks for your comments. Not sure what sappy means
Comment from Boogienights
This is very sad and unfortunately true in so many cases. There are so many homeless people it can seem overwhelming, many of them mentally ill. Very well written and a good contest entry. I wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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This is very sad and unfortunately true in so many cases. There are so many homeless people it can seem overwhelming, many of them mentally ill. Very well written and a good contest entry. I wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks. Much appreciated.
Comment from trimple
Hello there, Jenintorre
As the organiser of this 'blind' contest, I get to see who the authors are and thank you for entering.
You have certainly adhered to the rules with this tale of homelessness. I particularly like the fact that you have covered a great deal with little 'wordy' clutter, which, in my opinion, adds gravitas to the situation this homeless feller finds himself in here.
I wish you all the best in the contest.
Kind regards
trimple
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hello there, Jenintorre
As the organiser of this 'blind' contest, I get to see who the authors are and thank you for entering.
You have certainly adhered to the rules with this tale of homelessness. I particularly like the fact that you have covered a great deal with little 'wordy' clutter, which, in my opinion, adds gravitas to the situation this homeless feller finds himself in here.
I wish you all the best in the contest.
Kind regards
trimple
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your comments. Much appreciated
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Comment from Gloria ....
This is a most sad poem indeed. Especially given that some unbidden and tragic event has resulted in homelessness and loss of self-respect.
One small typo
A past best forgotton, (forgotten)
That said, best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is a most sad poem indeed. Especially given that some unbidden and tragic event has resulted in homelessness and loss of self-respect.
One small typo
A past best forgotton, (forgotten)
That said, best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much Gloria for your comments and for spotting the tyoo, I've corrected it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a story of a man, nowadays living homeless, once he had everything, road is his home these days with no family, no mates and no home, no future, street is his home that he never chooses; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This speaks a story of a man, nowadays living homeless, once he had everything, road is his home these days with no family, no mates and no home, no future, street is his home that he never chooses; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your comments.
