Africa
See Notes: A world beyond my wildest imagination.68 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Airport bound ... a melancholy farewell ... this is the end,
Thomas Wolfe is right ... "You can never go home again."...WOW....This is such an amazing write I had to give it a six. It took me on a journey! Amazing and I learned so much from the poem and your notes. Good luck with this great entry in the competition kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Airport bound ... a melancholy farewell ... this is the end,
Thomas Wolfe is right ... "You can never go home again."...WOW....This is such an amazing write I had to give it a six. It took me on a journey! Amazing and I learned so much from the poem and your notes. Good luck with this great entry in the competition kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much for the constellation you bestowed on Africa... I'm honored and grateful for such a thoughtful review. Yours, Dianaxo
Comment from Kathleen S.
Very enjoyable to read, your poem provokes imagery and your story of your trip to Africa. I can see the culture and nature and the life cycle in progress. I am not quite sure if you enjoyed your trip or not? It's thought provoking and makes you wonder... I have questions. :)
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Very enjoyable to read, your poem provokes imagery and your story of your trip to Africa. I can see the culture and nature and the life cycle in progress. I am not quite sure if you enjoyed your trip or not? It's thought provoking and makes you wonder... I have questions. :)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Kathleen... It was an indescribable event... I tried but couldn't even come close to what the true feeling of being there was like... Thanks for the thoughtful review. I think my last couplet sums it up... I loved it. yours, diana
Comment from Y. M. Roger
An awesome write, ma'am -- so vivid, so intense yet your very own feelings ebb through here and there (not just at the end). :) :) :) I thoroughly enjoyed your prose from beginning to end!! :) :)
And for the nerd wanderings (if you'll pardon the tangent)....I wonder if there is no gene for color-blindness in the Maasai tribe....as red-green is the most common form and the color 'red' to a color blind male looks 'brown' or even 'colorless'.....that includes all the different hues on that red part of the spectrum...will never forget the time we slowed down on a drive through the woods on vacation to admire a HUMONGOUS azalea bush covered in gorgeous red/magenta/pink flowers (so many it was hard to even find leaves!) and my middle son (who is color blind) looked back and forth between our "ooooing" and "aahhhhing" faces and the bush and very perplexedly exclaimed, "What!? It's just a dead bush!!" :) :)
Thanx for sharing your travels with us -- I look forward to more inspired works! :) ) Yvette
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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An awesome write, ma'am -- so vivid, so intense yet your very own feelings ebb through here and there (not just at the end). :) :) :) I thoroughly enjoyed your prose from beginning to end!! :) :)
And for the nerd wanderings (if you'll pardon the tangent)....I wonder if there is no gene for color-blindness in the Maasai tribe....as red-green is the most common form and the color 'red' to a color blind male looks 'brown' or even 'colorless'.....that includes all the different hues on that red part of the spectrum...will never forget the time we slowed down on a drive through the woods on vacation to admire a HUMONGOUS azalea bush covered in gorgeous red/magenta/pink flowers (so many it was hard to even find leaves!) and my middle son (who is color blind) looked back and forth between our "ooooing" and "aahhhhing" faces and the bush and very perplexedly exclaimed, "What!? It's just a dead bush!!" :) :)
Thanx for sharing your travels with us -- I look forward to more inspired works! :) ) Yvette
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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What you said kiddo... thanks for seeing it exactly through my eyes. yours, diana
Comment from Boogienights
I love this story poem, it was so descriptive I felt as if I were there. Did you really go there..that would be amazing! I think it would be somewhat scary with all the wild animals. Thanks for this interesting story.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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I love this story poem, it was so descriptive I felt as if I were there. Did you really go there..that would be amazing! I think it would be somewhat scary with all the wild animals. Thanks for this interesting story.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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I did Boogienights... It was really the best moments of my life. yours, diana
Comment from kiwijenny
This was beautiful. It made me want to go to Africa
Beautiful...I heard the rhythm of an exotic land in your poem
Well penned ...you can never be the same once you travel...it takes your heart a little
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This was beautiful. It made me want to go to Africa
Beautiful...I heard the rhythm of an exotic land in your poem
Well penned ...you can never be the same once you travel...it takes your heart a little
God bless
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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So true kiwijenny... In my mind I never did go home again... yours, diana
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Diana,
This was a beautiful poem, full of information and lovely imagery. Have you gone on a safari? I'm jealous! My husband went on one when his ship stopped in Africa back in the mid-eighties and those pictures are gorgeous.
Thank you for sharing your beautiful musings with us,
~patty~
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi, Diana,
This was a beautiful poem, full of information and lovely imagery. Have you gone on a safari? I'm jealous! My husband went on one when his ship stopped in Africa back in the mid-eighties and those pictures are gorgeous.
Thank you for sharing your beautiful musings with us,
~patty~
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey Patty... I was the highlight of my life... indescribable really... it was magic... Thanks so much for the constellation you bestowed on Africa... I'm honored and grateful for such a thoughtful review kiddo. Yours, Dianaxo
Comment from phill doran
Hello Diane
So much to capture the imagination, and though you are light with your brush strokes your sketch is very, very descriptive. You are right, it can feel ethereal, but it must also be remembered that it is still there, even now when you read this, still there and still happening and it is neither brutal nor kind, but balanced.
What stuck me when travelling inland was that you pass settlements and cows, then after a while cows mixed with the odd giraffe or zebra, then further on zebra and perhaps wildebeest and ultimately you come up to your first predator - and you can't recall passing through a fence of any kind.
I have spent long periods in the bush but I have yet to see a kill - only the recent remains, so you were very fortunate in that respect - I say 'fortunate', many people would rather not see it, perhaps.
Vermilion is a lovely word and the Masai have a very 'other world' feel about them, well that was my impression.
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of writing - a quick narrative of an aspect of a gigantic continent of many diverse peoples, terrains and experiences.
Again, this is so enjoyable and it resounds with your enthusiasm.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hello Diane
So much to capture the imagination, and though you are light with your brush strokes your sketch is very, very descriptive. You are right, it can feel ethereal, but it must also be remembered that it is still there, even now when you read this, still there and still happening and it is neither brutal nor kind, but balanced.
What stuck me when travelling inland was that you pass settlements and cows, then after a while cows mixed with the odd giraffe or zebra, then further on zebra and perhaps wildebeest and ultimately you come up to your first predator - and you can't recall passing through a fence of any kind.
I have spent long periods in the bush but I have yet to see a kill - only the recent remains, so you were very fortunate in that respect - I say 'fortunate', many people would rather not see it, perhaps.
Vermilion is a lovely word and the Masai have a very 'other world' feel about them, well that was my impression.
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece of writing - a quick narrative of an aspect of a gigantic continent of many diverse peoples, terrains and experiences.
Again, this is so enjoyable and it resounds with your enthusiasm.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thanks Phil... I agree the comforting thing to me is that the sun still rises every day on that beautiful land and does so without me in it... I saw one kill... one (the warthog) maimed and the hippo was already dead because cats where 4 deep waiting to fee... paitently I might add... Jalili was a great guide and as you probably know every time we passed another jeep word would spread where the action was. Thanks for your wonderful review. yours, diana
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Africa", is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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"Africa", is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much for the constellation you bestowed on Africa... I'm honored and grateful for such a thoughtful review. Yours, Dianaxo
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"Africa" definitely deserved the constellation.
Take care, God, bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Dean Kuch
Thanks so much for the animal species/genus lesson, Diane.
I did not know you were from Africa originally (based on the quote by Thomas Wolfe you've included in the last line of your poem). It must be beautiful there but hot as hell!
Africa is a place I've always wanted to visit but probably never will.
Good rhythm and rhyme all throughout your Share a Story in a Poem Contest entry.
Beast (oops!) Best of luck to you in the final judging.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much for the animal species/genus lesson, Diane.
I did not know you were from Africa originally (based on the quote by Thomas Wolfe you've included in the last line of your poem). It must be beautiful there but hot as hell!
Africa is a place I've always wanted to visit but probably never will.
Good rhythm and rhyme all throughout your Share a Story in a Poem Contest entry.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Yes I know I told you to school and teacher! I wonder if that leopard is the one that wanted to eat me... As always Dean... thanks!!!!
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Could be--ya never know.
You're welcome, my dear.
Comment from bob cullen
Your words and descriptions brought a vivid picture to my mind, but not even this picture can do justice to the scenes you witnessed. I've always wanted to do an African wild life reserve holiday. I can't think of any better holiday. Sadly though, I feel this poem may be the closest I ever make to Africa. And for that I thank you
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Your words and descriptions brought a vivid picture to my mind, but not even this picture can do justice to the scenes you witnessed. I've always wanted to do an African wild life reserve holiday. I can't think of any better holiday. Sadly though, I feel this poem may be the closest I ever make to Africa. And for that I thank you
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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That makes me sad... I should have translated it even better to you. thanks kiddo. yours, diana
