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Comment from Anne B Francis
This was a real tear jerker it hits right to the heart I am so sorry for your loss
and pray you are healing a little more.
Anne
I tried a nominate but had my 6 sorry
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This was a real tear jerker it hits right to the heart I am so sorry for your loss
and pray you are healing a little more.
Anne
I tried a nominate but had my 6 sorry
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This been going on 16 years and not only after the loss of my son Jason.
(When we donated Jay's Organs on April 1st 2003)
But unfortunately only eight months later...
The loss of my wife Carolyn Ann Richmond Harbach Smrkovsky.
Who committed suicide.
...
Of course, I've written so much on this and many more subjects...
As it comes out very, very, easy.
And it's been so much time it doesn't do any harm to me.
...
Yes, I've healed to a degree that any man can heal from losing Two people that I loved so much. I do have remaining daughters and grandchildren to fall back on plus.
And, of course, we always can journal in our writings and thoughts.
Thanks Ann for your wonderful review and your 6 stars.
God bless you.
Dr. Ricky 1024
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Ricky time is a great healer but memories like that remain I often wonder why sad things stick in our hearts so much and joyful things tend to be forgotten, guess not forgotten in that way but we have not been hurt and it's that that causes the pain.
Anne x
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Ricky,
Your wonderful sharing is so completely heart touching. You wrote is such a way that one journeys with you as you experience and express the deep emotions of heartbreak and hope, of sorrow... and trust... and comfort. I'm so happy I read this writing and learned of the blessings that came to others through your son's donated organs. May the awareness of God's presence and his angels be with you as you live each moment of every day. Warmest regards, Aggie
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi Ricky,
Your wonderful sharing is so completely heart touching. You wrote is such a way that one journeys with you as you experience and express the deep emotions of heartbreak and hope, of sorrow... and trust... and comfort. I'm so happy I read this writing and learned of the blessings that came to others through your son's donated organs. May the awareness of God's presence and his angels be with you as you live each moment of every day. Warmest regards, Aggie
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thanks Aggie.
Your an Angel.
Dr. Ricky...
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS 6******for you, dear Ricky, friend. You presented this writing about suffering and pain; but, you, also, told about how your son donated his organs to the Gift of Life, so other people could live and survive. Well-presented, Ricky!
liberty justice, your friend!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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SIX STARS 6******for you, dear Ricky, friend. You presented this writing about suffering and pain; but, you, also, told about how your son donated his organs to the Gift of Life, so other people could live and survive. Well-presented, Ricky!
liberty justice, your friend!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Your My Angel and Jason is now...
Your Angel.
Ricky...
Comment from Lady Jane
"Dear(,) Donor Family, - commas needed
(")Yes(,) Nurse?" -commas needed
"Of Course Doctor(,) Williams.(") - missing end quote and comma needed
"The procedure (typically used to relieve the skull pressure on a patient suffering as your son is) would not be effective in this case." - I am a nurse and this is how I would say it, but totally a suggestion, not requirement by any means.
(")Seventeen hours, later... no quotation marks or comma needed
States The Grim Reaper of Death. - (I would italicize this line)
T(h)e - H needs to be lower case
States Heavenly Father. - (no quotation marks needed. I would also italicize this one)
"Yes(,) Lara?' - comma needed
"We want to Dona...
Donate, Lara." - remove quotes before donate and place after Lara
Look(,) Carolyn,... - comma needed
we just received a (letter) - I think you meant letter, not later on this line
"Look(,) Dear? - comma needed
Another letter from 'The Gift of Life!'
This time it is from a man named 'Bill." - remove quotes after Dear?, before Another and This as it's one complete message being spoken.
I've stopped with the above section where edits are concerned. I did read it through. The remainder needs quotation mark edits. When one person is speaking, the entire thought, whether carried over two or three or four lines begins with one set and ends with the final set of quotation marks. You only need one set, not a set for multiple lines. Does that make sense? I tried to show you an example above with the last edit.
This was a hard subject to pen no doubt. If you clean it up, it will make a fine article. Keep writing and let me know when you make edits and/or revisions and I'll come back to re-review. Let me know if you'd like further edit help on the rest of the write. I'm glad I happened upon this tribute to your son. Write on. You're doing well.
Janelle
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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"Dear(,) Donor Family, - commas needed
(")Yes(,) Nurse?" -commas needed
"Of Course Doctor(,) Williams.(") - missing end quote and comma needed
"The procedure (typically used to relieve the skull pressure on a patient suffering as your son is) would not be effective in this case." - I am a nurse and this is how I would say it, but totally a suggestion, not requirement by any means.
(")Seventeen hours, later... no quotation marks or comma needed
States The Grim Reaper of Death. - (I would italicize this line)
T(h)e - H needs to be lower case
States Heavenly Father. - (no quotation marks needed. I would also italicize this one)
"Yes(,) Lara?' - comma needed
"We want to Dona...
Donate, Lara." - remove quotes before donate and place after Lara
Look(,) Carolyn,... - comma needed
we just received a (letter) - I think you meant letter, not later on this line
"Look(,) Dear? - comma needed
Another letter from 'The Gift of Life!'
This time it is from a man named 'Bill." - remove quotes after Dear?, before Another and This as it's one complete message being spoken.
I've stopped with the above section where edits are concerned. I did read it through. The remainder needs quotation mark edits. When one person is speaking, the entire thought, whether carried over two or three or four lines begins with one set and ends with the final set of quotation marks. You only need one set, not a set for multiple lines. Does that make sense? I tried to show you an example above with the last edit.
This was a hard subject to pen no doubt. If you clean it up, it will make a fine article. Keep writing and let me know when you make edits and/or revisions and I'll come back to re-review. Let me know if you'd like further edit help on the rest of the write. I'm glad I happened upon this tribute to your son. Write on. You're doing well.
Janelle
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
Dear
Reviewer,
it has received it's necessary reviews much higher as the content is important.
the Grammar secondary.
Perhaps you need to reread it?
Thanks,
Dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Michael Steinert
This is such a moving piece. I am so sorry for your loss but so proud of your son for being an organ donor. The gift of of life is a great one. God bless you and you family and I hope that this poem brings necessary awareness
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is such a moving piece. I am so sorry for your loss but so proud of your son for being an organ donor. The gift of of life is a great one. God bless you and you family and I hope that this poem brings necessary awareness
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
Thanks Michael.
This speaks for itself.
Dr. Ricky1024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
So very few words but with so very far reaching and profound applications that one could actually spend hours coming up with all the scenarios and play-on-words to which this could actually apply! :) :)
Thank you for sharing today, sir! :) :)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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So very few words but with so very far reaching and profound applications that one could actually spend hours coming up with all the scenarios and play-on-words to which this could actually apply! :) :)
Thank you for sharing today, sir! :) :)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Very Kind Words from a beautiful Poet.
Ricky...
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks man being a divine creation, rightly states that within the abundance of the human heart comes a blessing,, but whither is blessing, poet's son Jason dies before time; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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This speaks man being a divine creation, rightly states that within the abundance of the human heart comes a blessing,, but whither is blessing, poet's son Jason dies before time; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Thanks again Al for reading and reviewing this.
Dr. Ricky 1024.
