The Scorpion
A scorpion stings a little girl13 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Pam, tears my sweet friend....that is awful you got stung...and even more awful it is the only time your mother showed she cared...I am so sorry...a sad story told...but very well written sweet girl...and your picture....EEEEEKKKKK...love your poem...Love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Hi Pam, tears my sweet friend....that is awful you got stung...and even more awful it is the only time your mother showed she cared...I am so sorry...a sad story told...but very well written sweet girl...and your picture....EEEEEKKKKK...love your poem...Love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Hugs Linda. Thank you for your wonderful review
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you are so very welcome ...always...xxoo love
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Pam is this really a true to your own life story. Was your mother really so abusive and never showed you love until that time when you almost died. WOW! if so then after reading this writing and becoming familliar with you through your writings. I'd venture to say that you're writings are perfected out of your pain from your childhood. Just speculating. But whatever drives you to write in the style that you right it is a good motivation be it painful or not
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Pam is this really a true to your own life story. Was your mother really so abusive and never showed you love until that time when you almost died. WOW! if so then after reading this writing and becoming familliar with you through your writings. I'd venture to say that you're writings are perfected out of your pain from your childhood. Just speculating. But whatever drives you to write in the style that you right it is a good motivation be it painful or not
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Yes it is true Mary. Only time in my childhood that I felt love from my mom. I have a white scar from the scorpion that itches if anything touches it so I can?t wear my wedding band. Thanks for the great review
Comment from Air Spirit
Wow --- this is quite a story --- the scorpion sting is certainly traumatizing, but your mother / dad's treatment of you is horrific... You shared a great deal about yourself in this poem, and I am glad you felt comfortable enough to get this all out on paper --- I find writing to be very cathartic. My impression of you is that you keep yourself somewhat emotionally distant from people... and knowing this about you, explains why... I come from an emotionally abusive family as well -- and received very little love and affection from my mom... it hurts, and it takes it's toll -- but therapy, writing, God and time aid in healing... Your opening sentence of "...I saw my mom the other day
my fear of her's still holding sway..." says so much in such few words...
This is a poem that many people will be able to relate to -- especially women... for we have a tendency to withdraw inward, and to feel guilty -- but your voice is strong, steady and consistent in your writing.. and though I don't know you on a personal level, I feel intuitively that although you are guarded, you are a strong woman, and have much to offer the world... thank you for sharing this story, and poetic confessional -- it was beautiful, touching, and so meaningful....
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Wow --- this is quite a story --- the scorpion sting is certainly traumatizing, but your mother / dad's treatment of you is horrific... You shared a great deal about yourself in this poem, and I am glad you felt comfortable enough to get this all out on paper --- I find writing to be very cathartic. My impression of you is that you keep yourself somewhat emotionally distant from people... and knowing this about you, explains why... I come from an emotionally abusive family as well -- and received very little love and affection from my mom... it hurts, and it takes it's toll -- but therapy, writing, God and time aid in healing... Your opening sentence of "...I saw my mom the other day
my fear of her's still holding sway..." says so much in such few words...
This is a poem that many people will be able to relate to -- especially women... for we have a tendency to withdraw inward, and to feel guilty -- but your voice is strong, steady and consistent in your writing.. and though I don't know you on a personal level, I feel intuitively that although you are guarded, you are a strong woman, and have much to offer the world... thank you for sharing this story, and poetic confessional -- it was beautiful, touching, and so meaningful....
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Thank you Cynthia. You give such awesome reviews. Mine are hit or miss. Yes I am distant with people. Don?t know if I can trust them. You are very perceptive to have detected that. Thank you for the great review
Comment from royowen
The funny thing is, I think parents love their kids, it's just that there needs are manifold, and they take precedence over the child's, my mum was more concerned with her own needs than us kids. But Ces't la vi. You've had an incredible life, and you're still here. Beautfully written, in your usual immaculate form and metered rhym, you're a top writer already Pam, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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The funny thing is, I think parents love their kids, it's just that there needs are manifold, and they take precedence over the child's, my mum was more concerned with her own needs than us kids. But Ces't la vi. You've had an incredible life, and you're still here. Beautfully written, in your usual immaculate form and metered rhym, you're a top writer already Pam, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Thank you Roy. Your words please me since you are such a good poet. Is it OK to be pleased or is that pride. I think bad pride is when you feel superior. That kind of pride. What do you think? Thank you for a nice review
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No, that pride's fine, a job well done is what we were created for. Take pride in your gift, just don't glory in it, I'm so glad I have a gift to share. No, but be humble, grateful for it, not superior. God has been good to you, shown you favour.
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I try to be humble and treat all writers with respect. I never give less than five stars and always have something good to say and try to help. That is all I can do. Thank you for your counsel
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You have a good heart dear girl, you have never appeared anything else.
Comment from Gloria ....
Aw, hugs to you Pam. Some people just didn't know how to express empathy for others, especially when they're abusive. By the sounds of things your mother had a change of heart in later life.
A terrific poem and completely uniquely you. My land that scorpion is scary looking.
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Aw, hugs to you Pam. Some people just didn't know how to express empathy for others, especially when they're abusive. By the sounds of things your mother had a change of heart in later life.
A terrific poem and completely uniquely you. My land that scorpion is scary looking.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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No my mom did not change. I counted the day I got bit by the scorpion as one of the best days in my childhood. In that moment my mom loved and cared about me. I was so surprised. Thanks for the great review
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sad and heartfelt poem. It is sad indeed that a parent has no tenderness to their own children, it was a real surprise to see she cared enough to seek help. Many times the parent doesn't know how to love their children because they grew up that way too.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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A very well-written sad and heartfelt poem. It is sad indeed that a parent has no tenderness to their own children, it was a real surprise to see she cared enough to seek help. Many times the parent doesn't know how to love their children because they grew up that way too.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Yes Sandra. She hated her mother. We never saw her but once
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unbelievable story Pam, how terrible to be bitten by a scorpion as a child! You are lucky to be alive and the delay in getting medical attention alone could have killed you! How terrible to have uncaring parents, but parents had a different attitude back then, mine were the same, hard as nails. A shocking poem with a happy ending, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Unbelievable story Pam, how terrible to be bitten by a scorpion as a child! You are lucky to be alive and the delay in getting medical attention alone could have killed you! How terrible to have uncaring parents, but parents had a different attitude back then, mine were the same, hard as nails. A shocking poem with a happy ending, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Thank you Dolly for a heartfelt review
Comment from jenintorre
Well Pam I think this is your'e best poem yet and definately six star worthy Your'e mother sounds like a horror. I can relate to that. All the best Jen.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Well Pam I think this is your'e best poem yet and definately six star worthy Your'e mother sounds like a horror. I can relate to that. All the best Jen.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Wow Jen. This is unexpected. Nice surprise. Thank you for all the stars and for a nice review.
Comment from Lady Jane
my fear of her's still holding sway (maybe just use 'her')
I'm lucky I am still alive (I'm lucky to be still alive)
Wow, I am glad you're still alive, but sorry you were abused :( NO LIKEY! And, the fact she used your injury to garner sympathy, well...you don't want my opinion on that. You are a stellar being. Well rhymed, metered, and concisely written poem. Keep writing. It suits you! Keep em coming! And, thanks so much for all your support. You are an amazing person despite the negativity of youth.
Janelle
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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my fear of her's still holding sway (maybe just use 'her')
I'm lucky I am still alive (I'm lucky to be still alive)
Wow, I am glad you're still alive, but sorry you were abused :( NO LIKEY! And, the fact she used your injury to garner sympathy, well...you don't want my opinion on that. You are a stellar being. Well rhymed, metered, and concisely written poem. Keep writing. It suits you! Keep em coming! And, thanks so much for all your support. You are an amazing person despite the negativity of youth.
Janelle
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Hi Janelle. Your second suggestion changesthe meter. Thank you for the suggestions and for your nice review
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Ugh. It should have read, I?m lucky to still be alive... sorry.
Comment from kahpot
What a terrible thing to go through all on your own, being afraid of your parents must have been very difficult as you would have know one to turn too, this is an excellent and very brave work very well wrirren****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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What a terrible thing to go through all on your own, being afraid of your parents must have been very difficult as you would have know one to turn too, this is an excellent and very brave work very well wrirren****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Thank you kahpot. Funny that it is one of my fondest childhood memories. My mother cared. Only time I can remember. Thanks for the nice review
