Deep In the Buried Heart
A Sonnet68 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Tony. This is a very nicely composed poem and I think that as we age, we find ourselves in a releasing stage of life. Your piece has a couple of meanings, I think, but the one that resonates with me is the actual release of sentimental 3-D objects that are bogging me down. This is a terrific stanza:
"Though late, I've learnt to fossick and discard
these falsely valued baubles from life's hoard,
and, now I've started, find that it's not hard
to free myself from dross that I have stored."
The ending couple is equally meaningful for me.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Hi Tony. This is a very nicely composed poem and I think that as we age, we find ourselves in a releasing stage of life. Your piece has a couple of meanings, I think, but the one that resonates with me is the actual release of sentimental 3-D objects that are bogging me down. This is a terrific stanza:
"Though late, I've learnt to fossick and discard
these falsely valued baubles from life's hoard,
and, now I've started, find that it's not hard
to free myself from dross that I have stored."
The ending couple is equally meaningful for me.
Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, Marilyn. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a lovely Sonnet, my friend. Possessions we hold on to through the years are the greatest treasures. And some need to be sold on eBay, lol. Nicely done.
~Kerry
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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This is a lovely Sonnet, my friend. Possessions we hold on to through the years are the greatest treasures. And some need to be sold on eBay, lol. Nicely done.
~Kerry
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, Kerry. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
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My pleasure, Tony.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Tony, this sounds like me my sweet friend...
mine was when my husband passed...and I had to go through all our stuff...from attic to basement...things I didn't even remember I had...things that were his mothers...I love your poem you...and love the picture...so very well written...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Hi Tony, this sounds like me my sweet friend...
mine was when my husband passed...and I had to go through all our stuff...from attic to basement...things I didn't even remember I had...things that were his mothers...I love your poem you...and love the picture...so very well written...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, Linda. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
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your sooooo welcome Tony...I can understand why...Best wishes to you as well...love xxoo
Comment from Gloria ....
Beautifully written sonnet, Tony. I must admit I've enjoyed ridding myself of all the unnecessary baggage on the last move, but that has just given me opportunity to collect a lot more.
I think the volta in the second stanza works fine, and if you have done so even without precedent I think you'd still be good to go.
A fine sonnet in every way.
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Beautifully written sonnet, Tony. I must admit I've enjoyed ridding myself of all the unnecessary baggage on the last move, but that has just given me opportunity to collect a lot more.
I think the volta in the second stanza works fine, and if you have done so even without precedent I think you'd still be good to go.
A fine sonnet in every way.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words and six shining stars, Gloria. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Notes on form: The volta in this is placed in the second stanza, which is comparatively rare, but not without precedent, and I have deliberately started the sonnet with a trochaic inversion for emphasis. Otherwise it is mainly written in iambic pentameter...I know poetic forms but I go by the way the poem sounds rather than it's actual rules and like poets who are free and change it up if they feel like it. A wonderful poem like this needs no explanation. Wonderful work many kind regards and well done Meia x
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Notes on form: The volta in this is placed in the second stanza, which is comparatively rare, but not without precedent, and I have deliberately started the sonnet with a trochaic inversion for emphasis. Otherwise it is mainly written in iambic pentameter...I know poetic forms but I go by the way the poem sounds rather than it's actual rules and like poets who are free and change it up if they feel like it. A wonderful poem like this needs no explanation. Wonderful work many kind regards and well done Meia x
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, Meia. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from June Sargent
Spring cleaning is a good way to bring back sweet memories . And sometimes we need to let go of some of these vestiges of the past. But the more important ones aren't buried in the attic, but are lovingly stored on our hearts. Lovely sonnet, Tony.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Spring cleaning is a good way to bring back sweet memories . And sometimes we need to let go of some of these vestiges of the past. But the more important ones aren't buried in the attic, but are lovingly stored on our hearts. Lovely sonnet, Tony.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, June. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Tony!
Your words resonate deeply with me, and you have expressed them very well in this sonnet. I am of a certain age where I, too, own so many possessions that I fear when I die my children will just toss most of it away...And yet, when I come across certain "this and thats," the memories come rushing by, and although I know I should "spring-clean," I dare not...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Hello Tony!
Your words resonate deeply with me, and you have expressed them very well in this sonnet. I am of a certain age where I, too, own so many possessions that I fear when I die my children will just toss most of it away...And yet, when I come across certain "this and thats," the memories come rushing by, and although I know I should "spring-clean," I dare not...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, Diane. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Tootie
I really enjoyed this sonnet and can relate to it well. I'm doing a little spring cleaning lately myself (even though it's summer). The artwork and presentation are perfect and the sonnet flows and is written so well. Wishing you the best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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I really enjoyed this sonnet and can relate to it well. I'm doing a little spring cleaning lately myself (even though it's summer). The artwork and presentation are perfect and the sonnet flows and is written so well. Wishing you the best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, Cathy. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent work. Anyone who has a storage area with long gathered items will relate to this. The sentiment in the poem flows like a brook, somewhat magical. My favorite line;"... lie tattered vestiges of days like sighs..." I'm fairly new to poetry so much of your notes I will need to research the meanings. Love what I learn from this site. Hugh
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Excellent work. Anyone who has a storage area with long gathered items will relate to this. The sentiment in the poem flows like a brook, somewhat magical. My favorite line;"... lie tattered vestiges of days like sighs..." I'm fairly new to poetry so much of your notes I will need to research the meanings. Love what I learn from this site. Hugh
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words, Hugh. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
I've been reviewing for some time and have never given a six but you perfectly captured where I have been lately in terms purging clutter from life. Your word choice and simple flow, not overly burned in words, reflecting the sentiment of the piece, found a place in me this evening. Thank you so much. The last lines really captured it, in so many ways. Thanks again.
"A good spring-clean is all it takes, it seems,
to rediscover long forgotten dreams."
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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I've been reviewing for some time and have never given a six but you perfectly captured where I have been lately in terms purging clutter from life. Your word choice and simple flow, not overly burned in words, reflecting the sentiment of the piece, found a place in me this evening. Thank you so much. The last lines really captured it, in so many ways. Thanks again.
"A good spring-clean is all it takes, it seems,
to rediscover long forgotten dreams."
Comment Written 22-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your kind words and six shining stars, Lighthouse Keeper. I am honoured that you should have seen fit to bestow them. Much appreciated. It seems that there are quite a few who can identify with this one! Best wishes, Tony
