Robert takes Jake to the vet
Twenty seventh in the Robert's Adventures series8 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, please pass the following along to Katie Cary: :) :) :)
Great job on your writing, ma'am!! You have a great grasp on the aabb rhyme scheme and I suggest you find a good illustrator because this would make an AWESOME children's book! :) I think your original name choice for your main character is just as unique as it is fun -- you did a great job on that as well! Just be sure to keep writing and doing lots of book reading as well and I can see you really going far, young lady!! :) :) Thank you for sharing such a wonderfully penned work with all of us today! :)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Well, please pass the following along to Katie Cary: :) :) :)
Great job on your writing, ma'am!! You have a great grasp on the aabb rhyme scheme and I suggest you find a good illustrator because this would make an AWESOME children's book! :) I think your original name choice for your main character is just as unique as it is fun -- you did a great job on that as well! Just be sure to keep writing and doing lots of book reading as well and I can see you really going far, young lady!! :) :) Thank you for sharing such a wonderfully penned work with all of us today! :)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Thank you for this kind review, I really appreciate your opinion.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Boogienights. I always enjoy your Robert poems Your meter is smoother than hers. But she still did a great job. Animals are great. I know you plan to introduce a sibling for Robert. Can't wait to see what happens. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hi Boogienights. I always enjoy your Robert poems Your meter is smoother than hers. But she still did a great job. Animals are great. I know you plan to introduce a sibling for Robert. Can't wait to see what happens. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Thank you for this great review, it's much appreciated.
Comment from AprilViolet
I love this poem and love seeing what Robert is up to! The way you wrote about him here makes him seem like a very real little boy! Love the way this poem was written and can't wait to see what Robert gets into next!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I love this poem and love seeing what Robert is up to! The way you wrote about him here makes him seem like a very real little boy! Love the way this poem was written and can't wait to see what Robert gets into next!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I always appreciate hearing from fellow writers.
Comment from Sugarray77
Wonderful. I must say, we all enjoy reading about Robert Marcus Fredrick Dune and this trip to the vet is exceptionally written and fun. Great job and keep it coming.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Wonderful. I must say, we all enjoy reading about Robert Marcus Fredrick Dune and this trip to the vet is exceptionally written and fun. Great job and keep it coming.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much, you made our day!
Comment from Lady Jane
This is a very fun subject and cute write. Your daughter has writing in her blood I can tell. Just like her momma. My only suggestion is to possibly work on the meter of the poem. Various stanzas have differing meter which caused the flow to feel a bit choppy. The rhyme was good and I love the presentation and theory behind the poem. I'd love to help her work on this one if you'd like. This one I bet was fun for her to pen. Tell her to keep up the good work. Blessings,
Janelle
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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This is a very fun subject and cute write. Your daughter has writing in her blood I can tell. Just like her momma. My only suggestion is to possibly work on the meter of the poem. Various stanzas have differing meter which caused the flow to feel a bit choppy. The rhyme was good and I love the presentation and theory behind the poem. I'd love to help her work on this one if you'd like. This one I bet was fun for her to pen. Tell her to keep up the good work. Blessings,
Janelle
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, it's always appreciated.
Comment from Rose King1
Not sure how old Katie Cary is but she did a great job. I would not have edited I would have allowed her to draw her own praise as it was. It was creative and imaginative and well versed. The alliteration had was rhythmic and easy to follow. I don't have children but I certainly would be delighted to share this poem if I did.
Thanks Katie and please let her know she is very talented.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Not sure how old Katie Cary is but she did a great job. I would not have edited I would have allowed her to draw her own praise as it was. It was creative and imaginative and well versed. The alliteration had was rhythmic and easy to follow. I don't have children but I certainly would be delighted to share this poem if I did.
Thanks Katie and please let her know she is very talented.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Thank you, she will be so pleased to hear that. Thanks for taking time to read and review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a delightfully rhymed write with some great descriptions and fun times with robert at the vets to have his puppy checked out, mans best friend is his dog, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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This is a delightfully rhymed write with some great descriptions and fun times with robert at the vets to have his puppy checked out, mans best friend is his dog, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you, I always love hearing from you and value your opinions.
Comment from Sara Elizabeth
Good poem! would be a great poem to share with a kid who needs to be taught responsibility with a pet. Could definitely see my niece enjoying this and hopefully learning from this.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Good poem! would be a great poem to share with a kid who needs to be taught responsibility with a pet. Could definitely see my niece enjoying this and hopefully learning from this.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you for taking time to read and review.
