Love in the Dunes
A secret place for us6 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh, do I sense an underlying tone of sensuality here, Anonymous Poet?
Perhaps a roll in the hay--or elephant grass as the case were?
Good syllabic construction, composed true to 5-7-5 standards.
While this is more haiku in nature (no pun intended) than comedic, as 5-7-5 poetry most generally is, I still wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Why No 5-7-5?
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Oh, do I sense an underlying tone of sensuality here, Anonymous Poet?
Perhaps a roll in the hay--or elephant grass as the case were?
Good syllabic construction, composed true to 5-7-5 standards.
While this is more haiku in nature (no pun intended) than comedic, as 5-7-5 poetry most generally is, I still wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Why No 5-7-5?
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Thanks for your read and comments. Yes there is more than an underlying tone of long ago.
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from Lady Jane
What a stunning picture. I read through this short write twice. Love the imagery and the stunning writing. Nothing I see needs correction. Good luck in the contest.
janelle
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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What a stunning picture. I read through this short write twice. Love the imagery and the stunning writing. Nothing I see needs correction. Good luck in the contest.
janelle
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thanks for your read and feedback. Much appreciated.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with outstanding imagery of the shore scene
and the secret passion
Excellent art work to match
Well done
Good luck in the voting
RS
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with outstanding imagery of the shore scene
and the secret passion
Excellent art work to match
Well done
Good luck in the voting
RS
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thanks for your read and feedback. Much appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
No shame in a little loving among the shore grasses! Your passionate poem is a beautiful interlude. Good luck with the contest, an enjoyable write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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No shame in a little loving among the shore grasses! Your passionate poem is a beautiful interlude. Good luck with the contest, an enjoyable write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thanks much for the read and the comments.
Comment from donette1914
So beautiful and the words were amazing. I love the artwork. I hope for the best in the contest
Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read your well penned work by donette1914 July 16 2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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So beautiful and the words were amazing. I love the artwork. I hope for the best in the contest
Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read your well penned work by donette1914 July 16 2018
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you much for your read and your encouraging review.
Comment from kiwijenny
I like the internal rhyme...tabooed interlude...
I grew up on the beach ..and so many times as a kid I'd run into these interludes...
The heat the wind blown grasses seem to give the mistaken illusion of privacy
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I like the internal rhyme...tabooed interlude...
I grew up on the beach ..and so many times as a kid I'd run into these interludes...
The heat the wind blown grasses seem to give the mistaken illusion of privacy
God bless
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much for the read. Must have been loads of fun living near the beach. Thanks also for the blessing.
