Comment from meeshu

Excellent

a very uplifting and positive poem. a wish list that can be attained and not just dreamed. not easy to do but I believe it is possible with some focus. great write, Joan................meeshu

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018

I hope you are right. Thanks for the review.

Joan

Comment from Brigitte Elko

Excellent

This is an excellent free verse poem with a poignant wish. I want the same though it will never come to pass in my lifetime, a peaceful, contented, and safe world. Well written and a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings,
Brigitte

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018

Thanks for the comments. I appreciate the review and generous rating.

Joan

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Joan. This is a good entry for your club contest. I like your vision of the world. Thank you for sharing

Here it is a bit awkward

"Are housed and clothed
And is forgotten,
Everyone shares". Do you mean "All I'd forgotten"?

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018

Thanks for the nice review and the editing help. I made the change.

Joan

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

An excellent hope for the future, and I much enjoy how other than the practicalities such as food, housing and health a car that might park itself isn't too much to ask for.

A fine free verse and entry to the club. Much enjoyed.

Gloria

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018

Thanks for the kind comments and all the stars, Gloria.

Joan

Comment from MSJVClarke

Excellent

This is an excellent poem. It expresses your hope for the future and the simplicity of our true needs. I like your free verse style and the first person form; it strengthens the message of your topic which serves your title well.

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 Comment Written 15-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018

Thank you for the concise review and generous rating.

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Comment from Rose King1

Excellent

Me too. Your poem was beautifully written. It's honest and sincere and something that everyone should want. It reminds of the myth about Pandora's Box (The only future I want is the one in which hope is found). As a Christian it reminds of the Garden of Eden. But you and I both know that future will probably never exist in this realm and in our time. Although it did not rhyme it certainly has a rhythm. I really enjoyed it thank you for sharing. Well done.

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 Comment Written 15-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018

Thanks. I am glad you found the rhythm in the poem. Thank you for kind words and high rating.

Joan