The Only Future
fabulous free verse club post26 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
A wonderful presentation. With the artwork adding mystery to what you will say. I love your hopeful message, and how you want the future to be. I love how each stanza covers a different topic. #1-Safety. #2-Clean waterways. #3- Everyone housed and clothed, and everyone shares. #4-Talks about futuristic desires. #5-I love the best, where you bring it all home to say, "The only future I want is the one in which hope is found with every roll of the die." This is a beautiful sentiment and one I wholly agree with. This is well written and very enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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A wonderful presentation. With the artwork adding mystery to what you will say. I love your hopeful message, and how you want the future to be. I love how each stanza covers a different topic. #1-Safety. #2-Clean waterways. #3- Everyone housed and clothed, and everyone shares. #4-Talks about futuristic desires. #5-I love the best, where you bring it all home to say, "The only future I want is the one in which hope is found with every roll of the die." This is a beautiful sentiment and one I wholly agree with. This is well written and very enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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I appreciate your thorough review and am honored by such positive comments. Thanks a lot, Jesse.
Joan
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Hello Joan
It's nice to be appreciated for a thorough review.
You're welcome.
Jesse
Comment from Ann Marie Anglin
I couldn't agree more! Were we only able to follow through, as a race, with our potential and get rid of the greed and pettiness that keeps the disenfranchised down. I fear the rich are too protective of their wealth to ever think about genuine charity, kindness, and compassion. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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I couldn't agree more! Were we only able to follow through, as a race, with our potential and get rid of the greed and pettiness that keeps the disenfranchised down. I fear the rich are too protective of their wealth to ever think about genuine charity, kindness, and compassion. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the kind words. There must be a few compassionate rich people around/
dragonpoet
Comment from tfawcus
You describe a future that should be so easy to obtain, were it not for the dark side of human nature. Many of the things that we take for granted are only dreams for many people. Yet, so long as hope lives, then dreams can be made true. As you say towards the end:
"The only future I want
Is the one in which hope is found "
Me, too!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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You describe a future that should be so easy to obtain, were it not for the dark side of human nature. Many of the things that we take for granted are only dreams for many people. Yet, so long as hope lives, then dreams can be made true. As you say towards the end:
"The only future I want
Is the one in which hope is found "
Me, too!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thanks for your thoughts and generous review and rating.
Joan
Comment from Artasylum
I love this one... The only future I want is as you said is that every time the die are tossed everyone wins and there are no losses... Thanks for this wonderful read... I enjoyed it very much. yours, diana
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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I love this one... The only future I want is as you said is that every time the die are tossed everyone wins and there are no losses... Thanks for this wonderful read... I enjoyed it very much. yours, diana
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thanks for reading. I appreciate the kind words.
Joaon
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you were inspired by the Club's prompt and the artwork to create this free verse. Your repeats were effective for emphasis, and I salute the future that you envision with hopefulness and peace for all! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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I am glad you were inspired by the Club's prompt and the artwork to create this free verse. Your repeats were effective for emphasis, and I salute the future that you envision with hopefulness and peace for all! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging remarks and generous rating. Both are much appreciated.
Joan
Comment from mally mack
This is a beautiful sentiment and many of us feel the same way. It is unfortunate that more don't seem to want to spread the same messages of making changes for the better before it's too late. I like that you were able to keep this in prose form, and still deliver a clear and concise message.
Best Wishes to you
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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This is a beautiful sentiment and many of us feel the same way. It is unfortunate that more don't seem to want to spread the same messages of making changes for the better before it's too late. I like that you were able to keep this in prose form, and still deliver a clear and concise message.
Best Wishes to you
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Mally, for your kind words and high rating.
Joan
Comment from Ricky1024
This 'Club Piece' was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures were perfect.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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This 'Club Piece' was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures were perfect.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I appreciate you comments and high rating.
Joan
Comment from kiwijenny
I only want a future where children can be children...love is the currency..
but I think blue water...safety...too is wonderful
But a flying car in downtown traffic...has its appeal
God bless...great poem
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I only want a future where children can be children...love is the currency..
but I think blue water...safety...too is wonderful
But a flying car in downtown traffic...has its appeal
God bless...great poem
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thank you, Jenny, for your time and comments. I appreciate all the stars too.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
If only we could wipe our poverty in the world and for everyone to live well and fulfilled, but the mix of 'haves' and have nots' has been prevalent through the centuries and I can't see it changing but your poem gives us hope, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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If only we could wipe our poverty in the world and for everyone to live well and fulfilled, but the mix of 'haves' and have nots' has been prevalent through the centuries and I can't see it changing but your poem gives us hope, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I appreciated your continued support, Dolly. Thanks
Joan
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well crafted poem paints the illusion of an ideal world. Unfortunately, there are not enough other people who desire the same. Cars that park themselves are, according to many experts, on the horizon. Found no errors in this Free Verse.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Well crafted poem paints the illusion of an ideal world. Unfortunately, there are not enough other people who desire the same. Cars that park themselves are, according to many experts, on the horizon. Found no errors in this Free Verse.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the kind comments and generous rating.
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