Stand By Me
For my daughter, a beloved daughter33 total reviews
Comment from Robbie Yates
Jaybird, this is beautiful. I love your use of internal rhyme - in phrases such as "main Maine friend" and "feel sad, feel mad and all alone." I'm glad your daughter helps bring you strength - as I'm sure you've done for her. Great poem.
Jaybird, this is beautiful. I love your use of internal rhyme - in phrases such as "main Maine friend" and "feel sad, feel mad and all alone." I'm glad your daughter helps bring you strength - as I'm sure you've done for her. Great poem.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
Comment from meeshu
this is a wonderful sonnet, true to form and smooth in language and meter. a bit of a surprise at the end, doesn't hurt either. nice piece, Jaybird.................meeshu
this is a wonderful sonnet, true to form and smooth in language and meter. a bit of a surprise at the end, doesn't hurt either. nice piece, Jaybird.................meeshu
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
Comment from kahpot
hello, what a heartbreaking read ( again after notes) though very endearing to and for your daughter, this is very well written with emotion from the heart, an excellent poem, very well done****kahpot
hello, what a heartbreaking read ( again after notes) though very endearing to and for your daughter, this is very well written with emotion from the heart, an excellent poem, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I really like the sweet message of this. We can find strength in times of need in some unexpected places. We sometimes think that we have to be the source of strength all of the time. We then discover that we aren't superman and we lean on someone else's strength in the moment, diffusing our kryptonite. I enjoyed reading this Jaybird! Well done!
I really like the sweet message of this. We can find strength in times of need in some unexpected places. We sometimes think that we have to be the source of strength all of the time. We then discover that we aren't superman and we lean on someone else's strength in the moment, diffusing our kryptonite. I enjoyed reading this Jaybird! Well done!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
Comment from donette1914
this was so beautiful and so heart felt of love you have for your daughter and my heart truly goes out to you for your loss
thank you for sharing this well penned work donette1914 july 15 2018
this was so beautiful and so heart felt of love you have for your daughter and my heart truly goes out to you for your loss
thank you for sharing this well penned work donette1914 july 15 2018
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
where wind, where snow and rain blow(s) cold. I think if you remove the S at the end of blow it will flow and sound better. Such a beautiful penning for your daughter and what an inspiration she must be. Well done. Only the one edit I would suggest. Thanks for sharing.
Janelle
where wind, where snow and rain blow(s) cold. I think if you remove the S at the end of blow it will flow and sound better. Such a beautiful penning for your daughter and what an inspiration she must be. Well done. Only the one edit I would suggest. Thanks for sharing.
Janelle
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great tribute to your daughter, Jaybird. Your lines flow smoothly with great rhymes. But it is your message that stands above. What a sweet & caring daughter with a heart of gold she is. Thanks for sharing. Jan
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This is a great tribute to your daughter, Jaybird. Your lines flow smoothly with great rhymes. But it is your message that stands above. What a sweet & caring daughter with a heart of gold she is. Thanks for sharing. Jan
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Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
Comment from D. K. Mamula
First, let me express my sincere condolences on the loss of your wife.
This is an absolutely beautiful tribute to your loving daughter. Having the support of our loved ones in times of deep sorrow is so very important. No matter how strong we are, we all need someone to lean on. I'm so glad to know your daughter was there for you.
Well-written with deep emotion. Good rhyming, structure and flow. Love the 'main Maine' reference in the opening line. I see no need to change anything here. Well done! God Bless!
First, let me express my sincere condolences on the loss of your wife.
This is an absolutely beautiful tribute to your loving daughter. Having the support of our loved ones in times of deep sorrow is so very important. No matter how strong we are, we all need someone to lean on. I'm so glad to know your daughter was there for you.
Well-written with deep emotion. Good rhyming, structure and flow. Love the 'main Maine' reference in the opening line. I see no need to change anything here. Well done! God Bless!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
Comment from kiwijenny
She stood by me when things were bad.
My thanks to her.-She calls me Dad.
This is such a sweet tribute. I have a daughter like that.
Well penned
God bless
She stood by me when things were bad.
My thanks to her.-She calls me Dad.
This is such a sweet tribute. I have a daughter like that.
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- such a lovely tribute to your daughter and beautifully phrase testimony as to what she means to you! :) :) Your chosen rhyme scheme is soothing and unhindered and your rhymes themselves are spot on! :) In the last line, you need to choose a period or a hyphen, but not both. If you go with the hyphen, be sure to NOT capitalize the "s" in "she".
Wonderfully done and thank you for sharing!
Wow -- such a lovely tribute to your daughter and beautifully phrase testimony as to what she means to you! :) :) Your chosen rhyme scheme is soothing and unhindered and your rhymes themselves are spot on! :) In the last line, you need to choose a period or a hyphen, but not both. If you go with the hyphen, be sure to NOT capitalize the "s" in "she".
Wonderfully done and thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018