Win or Lose
Flash Fiction 150 words7 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Now that is one horrid grand-child, if ever I've experienced one...lol
poor old granny. Good piece, well written and fun.
GMG
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Hi there,
Now that is one horrid grand-child, if ever I've experienced one...lol
poor old granny. Good piece, well written and fun.
GMG
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your kind words on my writing.
Comment from humpwhistle
A story well-told. But, if it's the highest payout in history, I rather think there's plenty to go around, to share. I think a lesser prize might create more tension, more of a moral dilemma. Might be a more credible story. 150 words would give you plenty of room. Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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A story well-told. But, if it's the highest payout in history, I rather think there's plenty to go around, to share. I think a lesser prize might create more tension, more of a moral dilemma. Might be a more credible story. 150 words would give you plenty of room. Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the thought.
Comment from Gloria ....
Uh oh, I guess a little win of the lottery can be a little bit too tempting for some. A good bit of misdirection and the final line does provide a surprise. Will she do the right thing or not? I'm pretty sure Gran would know.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Uh oh, I guess a little win of the lottery can be a little bit too tempting for some. A good bit of misdirection and the final line does provide a surprise. Will she do the right thing or not? I'm pretty sure Gran would know.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from kahpot
The temptation is a wonderous yet terrible feeling that hides in us all, this is an excellent story, and very well written, best wishes for your ompetition****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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The temptation is a wonderous yet terrible feeling that hides in us all, this is an excellent story, and very well written, best wishes for your ompetition****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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I'm happy you consider my story well-written. Thank you.
Comment from Raul1
Interesting story. I think that his grandmother already knows that he is rich now. No grammatical mistakes and very good that you tried to stay at one tense in the story. Overall is Excellent!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Interesting story. I think that his grandmother already knows that he is rich now. No grammatical mistakes and very good that you tried to stay at one tense in the story. Overall is Excellent!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the feeling of winning and losing when you found Gran's lottery ticket number was the winning number in the morning newspaper, you excited to think; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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This speaks the feeling of winning and losing when you found Gran's lottery ticket number was the winning number in the morning newspaper, you excited to think; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from kiwijenny
He he he ...I guess you won the gran prize...
Oh no share it with your grandmother...you know she will share with you
Well penned twist at the end
God bless
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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He he he ...I guess you won the gran prize...
Oh no share it with your grandmother...you know she will share with you
Well penned twist at the end
God bless
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
