Night lady
Sad and desperate9 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
Yikes! Excellent Ten Word Poem tells an interesting story using very few words. Perfect choice of artwork, color and font for maximum surprising and amusing impact. I see nothing to correct. Great job!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Yikes! Excellent Ten Word Poem tells an interesting story using very few words. Perfect choice of artwork, color and font for maximum surprising and amusing impact. I see nothing to correct. Great job!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Many thanks
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You're welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
This ten-word poem, Night Lady, uses thirteen syllables and three lines to bring us down to the city streets and the women who make connections where love is often costly in many ways.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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This ten-word poem, Night Lady, uses thirteen syllables and three lines to bring us down to the city streets and the women who make connections where love is often costly in many ways.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2018
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Many tnanks
Comment from Debbie Pope
Excellent entry for this contest. You manage to tell a story. There's an intro, conclusion,plot, and a little characterization. Amazing to me. I find that clever. Good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Excellent entry for this contest. You manage to tell a story. There's an intro, conclusion,plot, and a little characterization. Amazing to me. I find that clever. Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh, oh. This sounds as bad as internet dating. An appropriate short poem for the times. Illustrated appropriately for your theme. Good luck in the contest with this interesting piece. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Oh, oh. This sounds as bad as internet dating. An appropriate short poem for the times. Illustrated appropriately for your theme. Good luck in the contest with this interesting piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Angela Hayes
Good read, educational, interesting, well presented, creative use of words, a lot of people can relate to this going out at night and making strange friends, being a family type of person i choose to know a person very well to connect in any way, so personally never been in this situation, i can only imagine what it could be like,
one should protect personal feelings and keep it professional when it comes to strangers.
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Good read, educational, interesting, well presented, creative use of words, a lot of people can relate to this going out at night and making strange friends, being a family type of person i choose to know a person very well to connect in any way, so personally never been in this situation, i can only imagine what it could be like,
one should protect personal feelings and keep it professional when it comes to strangers.
Good Luck!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Many than,s for your comments
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:)
Comment from estory
I think you captured this moment in this brief little portrait, but I don't know if its really poetry. Poetry is the art of making music with language, there has to be some musical elements and I don't hear it in this piece. Line 2 has some alliteration in it but it doesn't relate musically to the other lines and it reads more like a sentence chopped into pieces. I know this is a contest in a tight space, and there is only so much you can do with it; but you have to make the elements work to bring it off estory
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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I think you captured this moment in this brief little portrait, but I don't know if its really poetry. Poetry is the art of making music with language, there has to be some musical elements and I don't hear it in this piece. Line 2 has some alliteration in it but it doesn't relate musically to the other lines and it reads more like a sentence chopped into pieces. I know this is a contest in a tight space, and there is only so much you can do with it; but you have to make the elements work to bring it off estory
Comment Written 13-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Thanks for your comments
Comment from meeshu
a mysterious dark lady roaming the streets, so ominous and scary (if you look at the picture). this is very well done, I wish you well in the contest..
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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a mysterious dark lady roaming the streets, so ominous and scary (if you look at the picture). this is very well done, I wish you well in the contest..
Comment Written 13-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Many yhanks Meeshu
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately the elderly looking for love are very vulnerable, many lose their money, their dignity and their self respect and sometimes their life, very say words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Unfortunately the elderly looking for love are very vulnerable, many lose their money, their dignity and their self respect and sometimes their life, very say words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Dolly
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Goodm job, Mystery Author, in only 10 words as required. Your words nd picture pair nicely. Your poem is true of anyone roaming the streets. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Goodm job, Mystery Author, in only 10 words as required. Your words nd picture pair nicely. Your poem is true of anyone roaming the streets. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 13-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Many thanks Jan.
