When I Was Ten
entry for the Fabulous Freeversers Club32 total reviews
Comment from Ogden
Actually, Joan, I didn't get the metaphors, but was interested in trying to discern the poem's meaning. Then, when I read your notes, it all became clear.
I'm glad it all worked out, after all those years.
Warm wishes,
Don
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Actually, Joan, I didn't get the metaphors, but was interested in trying to discern the poem's meaning. Then, when I read your notes, it all became clear.
I'm glad it all worked out, after all those years.
Warm wishes,
Don
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thanks for reading and review. I am glad my notes helped you understand
the poem
Joan
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You're very welcome, Joan.
Don
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem about the time we were ten, the world has changed so much since we were ten it is completely unrecognizable and our little grandchildren have no idea about walking without fear in the streets.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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A very well-written free verse poem about the time we were ten, the world has changed so much since we were ten it is completely unrecognizable and our little grandchildren have no idea about walking without fear in the streets.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thanks for the review. It is sad that there is so much fear now.
Joan
Comment from miajaffri
I recognized the games. It's true what you have said in your poem. We didn't fear. We played our game of hide and seek and laughed while we ran. We didn't know about walls dividing and when we ran for Red Rover we secretly knew which arms would let us run through free. Wish the kids today could run and play like we did.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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I recognized the games. It's true what you have said in your poem. We didn't fear. We played our game of hide and seek and laughed while we ran. We didn't know about walls dividing and when we ran for Red Rover we secretly knew which arms would let us run through free. Wish the kids today could run and play like we did.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thanks for your time and comments. I am glad you liked the poem.
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Comment from ciliverde
The story you tell here is the opposite of mine - I was very shy and fearful as a child, but have no problems with that now (so many years later).
I like your line 'Until everywhere is home'. That is appealing and thought provoking. Well done,
Carol
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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The story you tell here is the opposite of mine - I was very shy and fearful as a child, but have no problems with that now (so many years later).
I like your line 'Until everywhere is home'. That is appealing and thought provoking. Well done,
Carol
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Carol for the encouraging words and high rating.
Joan
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem for the club entry "When I was Ten Years Old event. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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This is a very well written poem for the club entry "When I was Ten Years Old event. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks. Have a good weekend.
Joan
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I hope you do as well Joan! Blessings, Teri
Comment from kahpot
Excellent and I think you have used the games ( which I used to play) very well, I particularly like " when home used to be safe" and " only afraid of one it" very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Excellent and I think you have used the games ( which I used to play) very well, I particularly like " when home used to be safe" and " only afraid of one it" very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Enjoy your weekend.
jp
Comment from zlp22
Great poem about a style of life that we can no longer have. We are making children fear the outside world and keeping them inside is not giving them a full life.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Great poem about a style of life that we can no longer have. We are making children fear the outside world and keeping them inside is not giving them a full life.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. The five star rating is much appreciated
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Comment from mally mack
Very solemn and reflctive tone here. I started thinking before I read about what was happening when I was 10. My parents were getting divorced, my father was a menace and life completely changed. There were many "its" I had to be cautious of.
Funny, not all childhoods are equal - just as our choices moving into adulthood differ.
I enjoyed this short piece. Very relatable regardless of circumstances.
Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Very solemn and reflctive tone here. I started thinking before I read about what was happening when I was 10. My parents were getting divorced, my father was a menace and life completely changed. There were many "its" I had to be cautious of.
Funny, not all childhoods are equal - just as our choices moving into adulthood differ.
I enjoyed this short piece. Very relatable regardless of circumstances.
Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Glad you liked it. Thanks for your time and comments.
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Comment from estory
I think you did a good job of capturing the innocence of childhood in this poem, and making a plea for a return to that innocence in the social life of today. Nice image in that breaking through walls metaphor. That's it in a nutshell. Good word play built up a great rhythm and also kept the poem focused on theme. nice musical elements to go along with the philosophy. estory
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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I think you did a good job of capturing the innocence of childhood in this poem, and making a plea for a return to that innocence in the social life of today. Nice image in that breaking through walls metaphor. That's it in a nutshell. Good word play built up a great rhythm and also kept the poem focused on theme. nice musical elements to go along with the philosophy. estory
Comment Written 01-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the words of encouragement and all the stars.
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Comment from LIJ Red
I distract easily...I paused in mid-review to hear The Kingston Trio sing Ally Ally Oxen Free...which dates me, for sure. 'tis a fine poem that leads to memory lane...
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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I distract easily...I paused in mid-review to hear The Kingston Trio sing Ally Ally Oxen Free...which dates me, for sure. 'tis a fine poem that leads to memory lane...
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Thanks for reading and writing. My mom loved the Kingston Trio.. I might have to find that song.
Joan
