When I Was Ten
entry for the Fabulous Freeversers Club32 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
Yes this took me back. I loved playing hide and seek. Children need to feel safe and their world is their play. Well done. I liked your metaphor. In Christ we are home. He is the shepherd to watch over his flock...one sheep did hide and he seeked her and brought her home.
God bless
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Yes this took me back. I loved playing hide and seek. Children need to feel safe and their world is their play. Well done. I liked your metaphor. In Christ we are home. He is the shepherd to watch over his flock...one sheep did hide and he seeked her and brought her home.
God bless
Comment Written 20-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Thanks for the review. comments and generous rating. Have a great weekend
Joan
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your use of the childhood games as metaphors and your repeats for emphasis. Your "Walls of fear" phrase is quite compelling and VMarguarite's artwork reinforces your mood well. I am glad you were inspired by the Club's prompt. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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I admired your use of the childhood games as metaphors and your repeats for emphasis. Your "Walls of fear" phrase is quite compelling and VMarguarite's artwork reinforces your mood well. I am glad you were inspired by the Club's prompt. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 20-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Thanks for the encouraging comments and high rating.
Joan
Comment from tbacha58
H Joan, i really enjoyed reading this poem, it sounded and felt so nice. What an amazing thing to happen in ones life, is to know that we can never erase sufferings, and we should always be prepared to adapt to our actual Now. Love Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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H Joan, i really enjoyed reading this poem, it sounded and felt so nice. What an amazing thing to happen in ones life, is to know that we can never erase sufferings, and we should always be prepared to adapt to our actual Now. Love Terry xoxo
Comment Written 19-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Glad you enjoyed it so much. I am honored by the six-star rating. Thank you.
Joan
Comment from Boogienights
This poem is great, it's one I happen to agree with. When we were kids the world felt like a safer place, even in Chicago. I feel bad that my children live in an untrusty world. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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This poem is great, it's one I happen to agree with. When we were kids the world felt like a safer place, even in Chicago. I feel bad that my children live in an untrusty world. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thanks for the agreement and the nice review. By the way I grew up in the Northwest suburbs of Chicago and visited downtown Chicago a lot.
dragonpoet
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"When I Was Ten", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's thought-provoking poem was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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"When I Was Ten", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's thought-provoking poem was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thanks for your continued support and encouragement. I appreciate your comments every time.
Joan
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Joan, as always, you're very welcome.
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from kleck140
You poem brings back many memories. I like the way
you bring your words around with an explanation. You are
very deserving of the blue ribbon. Thanks for sharing. EL
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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You poem brings back many memories. I like the way
you bring your words around with an explanation. You are
very deserving of the blue ribbon. Thanks for sharing. EL
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thanks very much for the kind words and generous rating.
dragonpoet
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You are welcome!
Comment from tfawcus
Yes, most effective use of the childhood games to illustrate the way in which our sense of security wanes with age, as more and more things begin to weigh in on our minds. A nostalgic view of childhood innocence and carefree days. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Yes, most effective use of the childhood games to illustrate the way in which our sense of security wanes with age, as more and more things begin to weigh in on our minds. A nostalgic view of childhood innocence and carefree days. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Glad you liked it, Tony. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Dawnya
I recognized each of the children's games easily. The tie between childhood games that made us shriek with the real fears of an adult is well-done. A very thoughtful poem; thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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I recognized each of the children's games easily. The tie between childhood games that made us shriek with the real fears of an adult is well-done. A very thoughtful poem; thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate the comments and all the stars.
dragonpoet
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is great. Depp and probing. I don't usually find this. Obviously, you are very intelligent. I love posts that make me think. Often times I wish life was as simple as when I was a child. When I was young, I wanted to be older, I didn't know it would be like this.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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This is great. Depp and probing. I don't usually find this. Obviously, you are very intelligent. I love posts that make me think. Often times I wish life was as simple as when I was a child. When I was young, I wanted to be older, I didn't know it would be like this.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thanks for the positive comments. We always seem to want what we don't have at the time.
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Comment from PoemsOfDD
Dragonpoet, this is a good poem written in such a way to allow for an easy read and incorporates childhood games that bring back carefree memories. Its content shows the difference between youthful innocence and adult stress and worries in life. Being ten years old back in the day was a good time to remember. Now, in this day and age, life is such a contrast and unfortunate for many. An excellent compilation on the reflections of life at different stages and environments. ~DD
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Dragonpoet, this is a good poem written in such a way to allow for an easy read and incorporates childhood games that bring back carefree memories. Its content shows the difference between youthful innocence and adult stress and worries in life. Being ten years old back in the day was a good time to remember. Now, in this day and age, life is such a contrast and unfortunate for many. An excellent compilation on the reflections of life at different stages and environments. ~DD
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Glad you liked my poem. I appreciate the review.
Joan
