Hey, That's No Way to Say Goodbye!
See Note: A friend of 15 years chose euthanasia over cancer53 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
A very impressive poem. The rhyme and flow worked out well for you. Sorry about your friend. In a way I can understand his decision to go for euthanasia if he was in that much pain. It sounded as if the prognosis had definitely been confirmed. You really make the situation vivid with the dinner conversation going on. I can feel your reaction when he breaks the news of his decision. He sounds like quite the classy guy. judi
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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A very impressive poem. The rhyme and flow worked out well for you. Sorry about your friend. In a way I can understand his decision to go for euthanasia if he was in that much pain. It sounded as if the prognosis had definitely been confirmed. You really make the situation vivid with the dinner conversation going on. I can feel your reaction when he breaks the news of his decision. He sounds like quite the classy guy. judi
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey judiverse... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
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You're very welcome. This must have been a sad experience for you. judi
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It was judi... whatever my life has been... it has never been dull. thanks so much yours, diana
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from victor 66
Yes, I understand the attraction, the interest, the appreciation and affection you had for Ivan. A close friend, many years ago, decided to call it a day. His close friends never really knew why. But he is still missed and he could never be replaced. Ivan left you with feelings and a rationale for his decision. In that respect you are lucky. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Yes, I understand the attraction, the interest, the appreciation and affection you had for Ivan. A close friend, many years ago, decided to call it a day. His close friends never really knew why. But he is still missed and he could never be replaced. Ivan left you with feelings and a rationale for his decision. In that respect you are lucky. Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey victor 66... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
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I think anyone who has lost a dear friend could relate to your poem. You are most welcome, Diana.
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
Wow. Ivan sounds like an incredibly brave, humbling and inspiring man and I love the way that you honour him so beautifully in this poem. I'm sure this was a devastating time for you, and probably a difficult poem to write but I'm sure you've found just as I have, that writing about these things can be very cathartic and therapeutic and helps us to process them. I love the format that you chose and I think the quotes that you used e.g 'hey, d'you want an espresso?' really give a voice to both you and Ivan. They make us see you both as just normal people like you and I rather than fanciful characters which helps us to relate to you more and connect with the story. Lovely work and a great way to honour an important friend. Hayley x
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Wow. Ivan sounds like an incredibly brave, humbling and inspiring man and I love the way that you honour him so beautifully in this poem. I'm sure this was a devastating time for you, and probably a difficult poem to write but I'm sure you've found just as I have, that writing about these things can be very cathartic and therapeutic and helps us to process them. I love the format that you chose and I think the quotes that you used e.g 'hey, d'you want an espresso?' really give a voice to both you and Ivan. They make us see you both as just normal people like you and I rather than fanciful characters which helps us to relate to you more and connect with the story. Lovely work and a great way to honour an important friend. Hayley x
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey Haley... What a time in my life this was... so true... his vision of the world is world class and as you say we are just normal and I saw him through normal eyes. Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
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You're very welcome. I am so glad that you shared your story with us through your poem and that we got a taste of what a wonderful human being your friend was. Hayley x
Comment from F. Wehr3
Powerful poem, Diana. I thought you told the story well and made a fitting tribute. Going out on our own terms, isn't that what we all want? I'm not sure how much feedback you want since this is such a personal experience, but I copied down two punctuation suggestions.
Delights await me, I shrug, "ooh what a treat!"--I'd recommend placing a period After shrug and capitalizing Ooh.
Diana! "I'm returning to Budapest.--I'd suggest Placing the speech marks before Diana.
I hope you're at peace with his decision. Thanks for sharing.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Powerful poem, Diana. I thought you told the story well and made a fitting tribute. Going out on our own terms, isn't that what we all want? I'm not sure how much feedback you want since this is such a personal experience, but I copied down two punctuation suggestions.
Delights await me, I shrug, "ooh what a treat!"--I'd recommend placing a period After shrug and capitalizing Ooh.
Diana! "I'm returning to Budapest.--I'd suggest Placing the speech marks before Diana.
I hope you're at peace with his decision. Thanks for sharing.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey Russell... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from Janet Foor
A heartfelt piece Diana. Certainly a difficult situation from all sides. Interesting that last night I watched an episode of "Bull" who is a trial scientist and the case was about assisted death of a young girl who was dying of a horrible brain tumor. It was heartbreaking as well.
well done story in a poem on a most difficult subject.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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A heartfelt piece Diana. Certainly a difficult situation from all sides. Interesting that last night I watched an episode of "Bull" who is a trial scientist and the case was about assisted death of a young girl who was dying of a horrible brain tumor. It was heartbreaking as well.
well done story in a poem on a most difficult subject.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey Jmf... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from persevere
So moved was I by the first time I read your account of that final goodbye, I had to peruse it once more. I am reminded of my late husband who realised his end was near and wanted me to guarantee that his time would come. He was calm and philosophical. I have travelled the cancer route but I think mental illness must be far more challenging.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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So moved was I by the first time I read your account of that final goodbye, I had to peruse it once more. I am reminded of my late husband who realised his end was near and wanted me to guarantee that his time would come. He was calm and philosophical. I have travelled the cancer route but I think mental illness must be far more challenging.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey persevere... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from Robbie Yates
Incredible poem. You must miss your brave and brilliant friend - but it sounds like he left the world the way he lived - consciously. This really tore at my heart strings. Beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Incredible poem. You must miss your brave and brilliant friend - but it sounds like he left the world the way he lived - consciously. This really tore at my heart strings. Beautiful poem.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey Robbie... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from diamondbogle
This is really good. Very well put together and thought out. It flowed nicely and had imagery and emotion. I really enjoyed reading this. Overall really well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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This is really good. Very well put together and thought out. It flowed nicely and had imagery and emotion. I really enjoyed reading this. Overall really well done.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey diamond boggle... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from Urial
Hi Artasylum,
This is a great story poem. The meter was very good. The first and fourth lines rhyme, some times slanted very well. This poem has 15 stanzas which nowadays is an epic poem. It definitely has a lot of emotion within it. Awesome of you to help the Paranoid schizophrenic people. My sister has the same diagnose and she has disappeared. We cannot find her. Hey, Thank Leonard Cohen for the title.
Peace be with you,
Urial
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hi Artasylum,
This is a great story poem. The meter was very good. The first and fourth lines rhyme, some times slanted very well. This poem has 15 stanzas which nowadays is an epic poem. It definitely has a lot of emotion within it. Awesome of you to help the Paranoid schizophrenic people. My sister has the same diagnose and she has disappeared. We cannot find her. Hey, Thank Leonard Cohen for the title.
Peace be with you,
Urial
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey Urial... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
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Hi Diana,
Please don't be humbled, you are a true poet. The Leonard Cohen is title is a song of his. He is gone but was a great poetic song writer. It you haven't heard him yet you may enjoys him mellow songs and a glass of wine with.
Sincerely,
Urial
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Thanks so much... I will check him out!!!! yours, di
Comment from Emily George
It must have been hard to write and you wrote it beautifully. I guess your friend went out on his own terms. I can't imagine a life where you are totally in pain, physically or mentally so I find myself feeling only compassion for a life ended. I feel the poet has also recognised the pain of those left behind in this work.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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It must have been hard to write and you wrote it beautifully. I guess your friend went out on his own terms. I can't imagine a life where you are totally in pain, physically or mentally so I find myself feeling only compassion for a life ended. I feel the poet has also recognised the pain of those left behind in this work.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018
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Hey Emily... Thanks so much for such a thoughtful, thorough review and you just left me speechless with your stellar review. thanks so much and I'm humbled. Yours, diana
