Resurrection
Overcoming adversity is a marvelous thing...13 total reviews
Comment from Cogitator
I interpret this as work from a mature voice. I would consider changing "Is what I am now" to "Is what I am today, so the concept of your turning towards futures rather than past travails, remains tied in time frames. I will read more of your submissions. John
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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I interpret this as work from a mature voice. I would consider changing "Is what I am now" to "Is what I am today, so the concept of your turning towards futures rather than past travails, remains tied in time frames. I will read more of your submissions. John
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Hello Cogitator,
Thank you so much for your insightful review and kind suggestion on my work. This is an old poem from years ago, so will contemplate a change to it, but says pretty much what I meant to say.
Very much appreciate your taking the time to read and offer a reboot.
Best wishes,
Senyai
Comment from Joan E.
What a striking image and presentation! I admired your wordplay with the tenses and your introspection. Best wishes in the 5 Line Poetry Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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What a striking image and presentation! I admired your wordplay with the tenses and your introspection. Best wishes in the 5 Line Poetry Contest- Joan
Comment Written 08-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Joan, for your kind words and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from friartuck
I love poems that use the different parts of speech for contrast and emphasis! You did it well with this very nice five-liner! I see nothing to change at all - good luck in the contest with it!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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I love poems that use the different parts of speech for contrast and emphasis! You did it well with this very nice five-liner! I see nothing to change at all - good luck in the contest with it!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Friartuck, for your kind words on my work and the well wishes, too!
Comment from Angela Hayes
Good read, educational, interesting, well presented, poem means a lot, good imagee to match, creative writing, creative use of words, wonderful blending colour, elegant and fascinating.
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Good read, educational, interesting, well presented, poem means a lot, good imagee to match, creative writing, creative use of words, wonderful blending colour, elegant and fascinating.
Good Luck!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Angela, for your kinds words on my work. It means so much!
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Resurrection", is short, succinct and very much to the point. This is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Every line of this talented poet's work is a pleasure to both read and review. The artwork with this poem is very appropriate. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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"Resurrection", is short, succinct and very much to the point. This is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Every line of this talented poet's work is a pleasure to both read and review. The artwork with this poem is very appropriate. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Duchess, for your very kind words!
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Senyai, as always, you're very welcome.
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written five-line poem. When we lay down the old things and start over as a renewed soul we leave the past behind that will not play any part in our lives and we build the new us from nothing.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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A very well-written five-line poem. When we lay down the old things and start over as a renewed soul we leave the past behind that will not play any part in our lives and we build the new us from nothing.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your insightful and kind words on my work, Sandra! It is appreciated.
Happy 4th!
Lynn
Comment from phill doran
Hello to you
Very good: a positive message, expressed directly and well within the limits of the form required for and by the contest.
I realise that punctuation is elective and you have eschewed it, but I can't help thinking that a comma or two after 'past' and after 'tense' might add value to the reader's understanding? It makes your past 'tense', for example.
The play on past tense and future perfect is very good and, as I mentioned, the overall positive message is refreshing.
I wish you well in your contest.
cheer
sphill
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Hello to you
Very good: a positive message, expressed directly and well within the limits of the form required for and by the contest.
I realise that punctuation is elective and you have eschewed it, but I can't help thinking that a comma or two after 'past' and after 'tense' might add value to the reader's understanding? It makes your past 'tense', for example.
The play on past tense and future perfect is very good and, as I mentioned, the overall positive message is refreshing.
I wish you well in your contest.
cheer
sphill
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Hi, Phill. Thank you for your suggestions and kind words. I'll consider an edit. Thanks again!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about resurrection that poet thinks now he is hopeful after his mental or emotional injury future is going for a perfect life free; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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This speaks about resurrection that poet thinks now he is hopeful after his mental or emotional injury future is going for a perfect life free; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Alcreator, for you kind words on my work. Much appreciated!
Comment from meeshu
a very hopeful and giving writing here, Senyal. almost a biography in a short poem. it is good you have overcome and are looking at a bright furure..........meeshu
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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a very hopeful and giving writing here, Senyal. almost a biography in a short poem. it is good you have overcome and are looking at a bright furure..........meeshu
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Meeshu. Your words are truly comforting!
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Superb art work, gives flight to the poem. I loved its message of hope-- told with few words but effectively and powerfully. Very appropriate entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Superb art work, gives flight to the poem. I loved its message of hope-- told with few words but effectively and powerfully. Very appropriate entry for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Donka, for your kind words on my work. I appreciate them so very much!
