Charlatan
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Charlatan - Chapter One"Mercury Morris in the case of the rogue mandroid
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Comment from Ginnygray
A story of Eleanor Morton the murdered victim and Ryan Bloomberg, the man accused of murdering her. The case appeared cut and dry, but was riddled with manipulated evidence. Slanted news stories had seen to that. The man on the phone is being asked to defend this man and apparently he is used to his life of leisure from his earned reputation in the past and is torn about taking on one more case. Well written and suspenseful!
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A story of Eleanor Morton the murdered victim and Ryan Bloomberg, the man accused of murdering her. The case appeared cut and dry, but was riddled with manipulated evidence. Slanted news stories had seen to that. The man on the phone is being asked to defend this man and apparently he is used to his life of leisure from his earned reputation in the past and is torn about taking on one more case. Well written and suspenseful!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Pamusart
Indianapolis, Indiana is mostly Marion County. I do not think that is the Marion County you mean. We lived there in Indianapolis but our county was Hendricks. I look forward to more. I love detective stories. Thank you for sharing
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Indianapolis, Indiana is mostly Marion County. I do not think that is the Marion County you mean. We lived there in Indianapolis but our county was Hendricks. I look forward to more. I love detective stories. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate your review.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Brett, who doesn't love a court drama and this promises to be an interesting one from your writing here. You have good technical skills and your work flows well. Good hook for the reader at the beginning with 'death row'. We love that stuff, LOL The saloon scene is a vivid one, nicely set, and the character's confidence in this trial gives the reader a desire to know more, and the story gains credibility there.
Some excellent writing and thank you for sharing it, Ana.
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Hello Brett, who doesn't love a court drama and this promises to be an interesting one from your writing here. You have good technical skills and your work flows well. Good hook for the reader at the beginning with 'death row'. We love that stuff, LOL The saloon scene is a vivid one, nicely set, and the character's confidence in this trial gives the reader a desire to know more, and the story gains credibility there.
Some excellent writing and thank you for sharing it, Ana.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this. Appreciate your review.
Comment from Sankey
Good story. Hoping this might go somewhere. Absolutely NO SPAGS, mate. Well done and a great picture to go with it. Very descriptive as is your norm. Will see what else I have missed.
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Good story. Hoping this might go somewhere. Absolutely NO SPAGS, mate. Well done and a great picture to go with it. Very descriptive as is your norm. Will see what else I have missed.
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
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Much appreciated, as always.
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent and intriguing story, I love the intro, sometimes too much drinking is never enough and in this story that is certainly true, the way you describe things ( your mate- the brawl) is very well done, very well written****kahpot
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What an excellent and intriguing story, I love the intro, sometimes too much drinking is never enough and in this story that is certainly true, the way you describe things ( your mate- the brawl) is very well done, very well written****kahpot
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review. Much appreciated.
Comment from papa55mike
It must be that time of the month for lawyer stories, this is the third I've read today. This one and Mustang Patties are by far the best! What a great opening for the book. A drunken lawyer that doesn't want this case, but he's going to take it anyway. Best of luck!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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It must be that time of the month for lawyer stories, this is the third I've read today. This one and Mustang Patties are by far the best! What a great opening for the book. A drunken lawyer that doesn't want this case, but he's going to take it anyway. Best of luck!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review.
