My Path Is True ~ Chapter~1
A Gabriel Hope story.5 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
I,love. the Godly influence
I must say it was a little long...maybe if you cut it into two installments.
I love Gabe.. well penned I love the mercy
God bless
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
I,love. the Godly influence
I must say it was a little long...maybe if you cut it into two installments.
I love Gabe.. well penned I love the mercy
God bless
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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This is my second Gabe book and I hope to promote more of stories this time. I'll try cutting the second story in two parts, I'm just about done with and got it on file. Many thanks for the awesome review and kind words. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Lady Jane
scanning the horizon on the ladder(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one... I see the corn is off to a good start and soybeans are up in the fields
surrounding the church.
No fingerprints or footprints to speak of(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one... They (wore) ski-masks so there's no way to identify anyone.
"We ran patrols every five minutes(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one...
I had a sheriff in the backyards of both houses.
I don't have to wonder who it is(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one
...The stench of brimstone fills the air.
...the good work you've done in West Tennessee(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one ... I personally want to thank you."
Other than these few minor edits, I think your prose is well written, maintains steady flow, and the dialogue was executed perfectly. Nice piece of prose :) Write ON! Janelle
Janelle
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
scanning the horizon on the ladder(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one... I see the corn is off to a good start and soybeans are up in the fields
surrounding the church.
No fingerprints or footprints to speak of(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one... They (wore) ski-masks so there's no way to identify anyone.
"We ran patrols every five minutes(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one...
I had a sheriff in the backyards of both houses.
I don't have to wonder who it is(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one
...The stench of brimstone fills the air.
...the good work you've done in West Tennessee(.) end the sentence here and begin a new one ... I personally want to thank you."
Other than these few minor edits, I think your prose is well written, maintains steady flow, and the dialogue was executed perfectly. Nice piece of prose :) Write ON! Janelle
Janelle
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for the awesome review and for your help with this story, it's deeply appreciated. This is my second Gabe book and I hope to promote more of the stories. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Mike. I enjoyed reading this interesting story, well written with good dialogue, scene setting and descriptions throughout. My one suggestion would be to break this up into more than one chapter somehow as this is a very lengthy read. I think you may get more attention to your story (reviews) if shorter segments. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
Hi Mike. I enjoyed reading this interesting story, well written with good dialogue, scene setting and descriptions throughout. My one suggestion would be to break this up into more than one chapter somehow as this is a very lengthy read. I think you may get more attention to your story (reviews) if shorter segments. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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This is my second Gabe book and I'm going to promote more of the stories this time. I'll try cutting the next one in two parts. Many thanks for the awesome review and kind words. I'll be by to read.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hi Mike, this is a well written first chapter and congratulations on beginning your novel, I understand what a huge step that is. And the editing process that lies ahead. I found this entertaining. You have a good turn of phrase and your technical writing is good and brings the reader into the story. I have no suggestions for improvement and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
Hi Mike, this is a well written first chapter and congratulations on beginning your novel, I understand what a huge step that is. And the editing process that lies ahead. I found this entertaining. You have a good turn of phrase and your technical writing is good and brings the reader into the story. I have no suggestions for improvement and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for the awesome review, I love to write these "Gabe" stories. There a blast to write and research, I'm trying to put more scripture in this book. Thanks again!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I love your stories Mike. Gabe is my favorite super hero. Something may have to be [done] about you, my friend. (add the word done.) I have been waiting for another story from you. This was a good one. Yes the devil loves to corrupt our youth and ruin their lives. We need more people like Gabe and you. LOL Nancy
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
I love your stories Mike. Gabe is my favorite super hero. Something may have to be [done] about you, my friend. (add the word done.) I have been waiting for another story from you. This was a good one. Yes the devil loves to corrupt our youth and ruin their lives. We need more people like Gabe and you. LOL Nancy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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We need a super-hero with a Christian point of view. Most of the super-heroes of today are one step away from being a villain with no morals. I've already planned the next two stories and hope to start on them soon, Many thanks for all of your love and support.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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I am happy to hear there are more in the making. God bless you Mike. Nancy