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Melting Pot Meltdown?

So many concerns for our Democracy at this time.

3 total reviews 
Comment from Insignificant Weed
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Here we see the opinion of the silent majority. This needs to be out on Facebook and it should have over 3 million views. This entry is deserving of four stars for the ideas expressed. A few grammatical errors are somewhat distracting. Although this is strictly my opinion, the last line indicates that "America is still great' is not quite accurate. We have slipped considerably in the world's eye. Our veterans would be shocked at the divisions that are all around us,
In this line: "along the way we have forgot" - you are using the present perfect tense, so you need to use the past participle "forgotten" - it should read "we have forgotten." Same in this line: "We've make grave errors in our land" - you are using the present perfect tense - it should read - "We've made"

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
    Thank you for your very technical review. I will try to adjust if time allows! I appreciate your time so very much and I do agree we have slipped in the world view, but I still believe in the greatness of our country. I have the need to do so. I have grandchildren! :)
    Wendy
Comment from ElegantButler
Excellent
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Why is it that we can reboot a movie but not our government?

My mother was an immigrant. She was an Australian war bride back in World War II. Back then they initiated a little program called "The War Brides Act" to quicken the naturalization of foreign women who had married American soldiers.

You are very right that there is beauty in diversity. All the different shades of skin tones, eye colors, hair colors... a rich pallet painting a wonderful tapestry.

Too bad it takes poets and artists to see the true beauty of it all.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
    Thank you for your beautiful review. So much appreciated!
    Wendy
Comment from Mark Valentine
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is a well written poem, but the six is for your clear, unwavering, voice for justice. Make America Great AGAIN? As you point out, we were doing pretty well already. As you also point out, our current treatment of families seeking a better life harkens back to the most shameful chapters in our history; slavery, the Trail of Tears.

Your short line ("I'm saddened") at the end of the second stanza says voices the feelings of many.

The saddest part is that so many cheer him on. And many of these would call themselves "Christian" - I fear we've rendered that term meaningless at this point.


 Comment Written 30-Jun-2018


reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
    THANK YOU for the wonderful review. I am humbled and highly appreciative.
    Wendy