Sadness
The loss of my daughter has left me grieving daily.38 total reviews
Comment from DALLAS01
So terribly sorry for your loss. Your poem is like thunder riding accross the page. The reader feels that drum beat. Good luck in the contest. A strong contender.
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So terribly sorry for your loss. Your poem is like thunder riding accross the page. The reader feels that drum beat. Good luck in the contest. A strong contender.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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This was difficult to write but I find it helpful to put feelings into words. Sharing keeps her memory alive. Thank you for reading and the kind comments.
Have a good weekend.
Mystery writer
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I don't know how to overcome something like that. There are no words I know to offer other than she's always with you. I hope you can see her in the sunshine so you can start to appreciate the sunshine because everyday doens't have to gloomy. (It's okay to have gloomy days though) But I do hope you feel her in the sunshine and know it's okay to smile.
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I don't know how to overcome something like that. There are no words I know to offer other than she's always with you. I hope you can see her in the sunshine so you can start to appreciate the sunshine because everyday doens't have to gloomy. (It's okay to have gloomy days though) But I do hope you feel her in the sunshine and know it's okay to smile.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2018
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This was difficult to write but I find it helpful to put feelings into words. Sharing keeps her memory alive. Thank you for reading and the kind comments.
Have a good weekend.
Mystery writer
Comment from ElegantButler
No parent should ever have to bury their child.
I feel terrible for your loss. So many will tell you to think about the good times. But that's a two edged sword. Sometimes they bring a tearful smile while other times they hurt the heart when you think that you will not be able to make more of them.
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No parent should ever have to bury their child.
I feel terrible for your loss. So many will tell you to think about the good times. But that's a two edged sword. Sometimes they bring a tearful smile while other times they hurt the heart when you think that you will not be able to make more of them.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2018
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This was difficult to write but I find it helpful to put feelings into words. Sharing keeps her memory alive. Thank you for reading and the kind comments.
Have a good weekend.
Mystery writer
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt and sad poem about the loss of a child no matter the age it is a very hard blow for a parent to.lose a child through death. It is a sadness we cannot easily overcome.
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A very well-written heartfelt and sad poem about the loss of a child no matter the age it is a very hard blow for a parent to.lose a child through death. It is a sadness we cannot easily overcome.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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This was difficult to write but I find it helpful to put feelings into words. Sharing keeps her memory alive. Thank you for reading and the kind comments.
Have a good weekend.
Mystery writer
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Sadness, attempts to discard that burden of regret, second-guessing, and unconsolable loss in order to rise up and walk on. Press on.
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This poem, Sadness, attempts to discard that burden of regret, second-guessing, and unconsolable loss in order to rise up and walk on. Press on.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
have a good weekend.
MW
Comment from Deirdre Anne Gialamas
Dear Author,
This poem was very well written and conveys very effectively the hold that grief can have on one. The repetition of ,'sadness' over and over really echoes the stubbornness of this most debilitating, yet necessary, emotion following great
tragedy.
I've just now read your, 'author's notes' and see you have suffered an unimaginable
loss. Yet the healthiest way is to work right through it; if only you could, 'ditch it.!'
Elisabeth Kubler Ross, a famous thanathologist, said there are three stages to grieving; DABDA; everyone does it in their own way, time etc. Let no one ever tell you, 'It's time now to stop.' You might like to look up her books.
Wish you strength and hope to get though this time.
Warmest wishes,
Deirdre Anne
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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Dear Author,
This poem was very well written and conveys very effectively the hold that grief can have on one. The repetition of ,'sadness' over and over really echoes the stubbornness of this most debilitating, yet necessary, emotion following great
tragedy.
I've just now read your, 'author's notes' and see you have suffered an unimaginable
loss. Yet the healthiest way is to work right through it; if only you could, 'ditch it.!'
Elisabeth Kubler Ross, a famous thanathologist, said there are three stages to grieving; DABDA; everyone does it in their own way, time etc. Let no one ever tell you, 'It's time now to stop.' You might like to look up her books.
Wish you strength and hope to get though this time.
Warmest wishes,
Deirdre Anne
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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I am grateful for this in depth reading of this poem. Your recommendation is well taken and I will definitely look up these books.
Thank you so much.
Mystery Writer
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You are so welcome. I almost took a class given by Kubler Ross when I lived in NYC but missed it. She has written some very helpful stuff on grieving. It's a terrible experience, but it does have a beginning and an end.
Best,
Deirdre Anne
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
WOW! What a powerful message you expressed in a great, poetic way, Mystery Author. I really like the way you formatted your lines. The repeated line 'ditch it' adds emphasis to the words right before it in each use. The art choice is a perfect pairing with your well-chosen words. Your notes are heart-breaking. I will pray for you & your family. Take care. I know your faith will see you through. Best wishes in the contest & your recovery. I know you will never forget your precious daughter. Jan
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WOW! What a powerful message you expressed in a great, poetic way, Mystery Author. I really like the way you formatted your lines. The repeated line 'ditch it' adds emphasis to the words right before it in each use. The art choice is a perfect pairing with your well-chosen words. Your notes are heart-breaking. I will pray for you & your family. Take care. I know your faith will see you through. Best wishes in the contest & your recovery. I know you will never forget your precious daughter. Jan
Comment Written 29-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this awesome six star. Your comments and positive reaction but most of all prayers are appreciated.
Blessings,
MW
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful poem and I very much like the form it is written in, is there a name for this? great artwork to enhance the words of your wonderful poem, very well written and good luck in your competition****kahpot
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What a wonderful poem and I very much like the form it is written in, is there a name for this? great artwork to enhance the words of your wonderful poem, very well written and good luck in your competition****kahpot
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2018
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I think it is my version of free style, lol. I am glad that you liked it. Writing is helping me vent and sharing is aiding the process of my healing. Thank you for the read and this very nice review.
Have a good weekend.
Brigitte
