Diving Into Alligators
10 years old and free58 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Yikes. I can't image swimming where there are alligators.
If this is true, I'm thinking you might not be so keen now?
Well written, nicely rhymed.
Well done.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Yikes. I can't image swimming where there are alligators.
If this is true, I'm thinking you might not be so keen now?
Well written, nicely rhymed.
Well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Hey Sharon,
So happy to have you here and thanks for the lovely thoughtful review. Yours, diana
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
I love the simplistic language of this poem as though it has been written by your child self which it obviously has been told from her perspective. It is very true that we feel no fear when we are young and you captured that sense of invincibility in this poem. I can remember similar experiences and moments of freedom as a child and your poem reminded me of those so thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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I love the simplistic language of this poem as though it has been written by your child self which it obviously has been told from her perspective. It is very true that we feel no fear when we are young and you captured that sense of invincibility in this poem. I can remember similar experiences and moments of freedom as a child and your poem reminded me of those so thank you.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Hey Haley,
So happy to have you here and thanks for the lovely thoughtful review. Yours, diana
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You're very welcome. I have loved writing and found solace in it for such a long time and it's really inspiring to read other people's work as well because it helps you to feel connected to others and you realise how much you can relate to others experiences. I'm happy to be here. Hayley.
Comment from Insignificant Weed
This captures the freedom of childhood which knows no bounds to the "fear factor." I can certainly relate to dangerous situations when I was a child - had no clue about the danger. On one hand, it was a good feeling to have; on the other hand, risks taken may end that freedom. This is worthy of five stars for the unique portrayal of childhood. These lines typify that sentiment: "Naive and full of life / My blank brain attracted strife" Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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This captures the freedom of childhood which knows no bounds to the "fear factor." I can certainly relate to dangerous situations when I was a child - had no clue about the danger. On one hand, it was a good feeling to have; on the other hand, risks taken may end that freedom. This is worthy of five stars for the unique portrayal of childhood. These lines typify that sentiment: "Naive and full of life / My blank brain attracted strife" Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Hey Insignificant Weed,
So happy to have you here and thanks for the lovely thoughtful review. Yours, diana
Comment from peculiar2011
I really enjoyed the poem. The picture is perfect! I liked the rhyming scheme, falls off the tongue. The sequence of event was perfectly timed for the last line. Great poem. We have all been there, "no fear in the young"
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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I really enjoyed the poem. The picture is perfect! I liked the rhyming scheme, falls off the tongue. The sequence of event was perfectly timed for the last line. Great poem. We have all been there, "no fear in the young"
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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OMG... Peculiar,
I'm Honored. Humbled. Beside myself. Thanks so much for your stellar/plus-one review... off to dive into more alligators (the grown up kind!)
Comment from yespabee
Loved the flow and rythm. It is catchy and witty one. Imagery is created in the reader's mind. 'Gator' fits well. "Mermaid bound"...good usage of words!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Loved the flow and rythm. It is catchy and witty one. Imagery is created in the reader's mind. 'Gator' fits well. "Mermaid bound"...good usage of words!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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thanks yespabee... yours, diana
Comment from victor 66
A very nice poem this is. The interesting thing for me, is it reminds me of a childhood fear if you will. My mother, when she put me to bed as a little tike, would tell me I better not get out of bed or the rats under the bed would get me. I remember once I awoke and found my arm dangling over the side of the bed. Puling l my arm back, I still can hear myself saying, Whoo, that was close. I wouldn't call it a bad memory, just a stark memory. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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A very nice poem this is. The interesting thing for me, is it reminds me of a childhood fear if you will. My mother, when she put me to bed as a little tike, would tell me I better not get out of bed or the rats under the bed would get me. I remember once I awoke and found my arm dangling over the side of the bed. Puling l my arm back, I still can hear myself saying, Whoo, that was close. I wouldn't call it a bad memory, just a stark memory. Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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victor 66,
So happy to have you here and thanks for the lovely thoughtful review. Yours, diana
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You are most welcome, Diana. It seems when we get older, the more memories we have.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello diana!
Oh goodness!
How delightfully rich in imagery and imagination. Looked like me as a 10 year old ...but in a one piece suit, don'tcha know! Such a splendid rendering for summer and the imaginative world of children. Pure joy!
Thank you for today's smile!
diane
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Hello diana!
Oh goodness!
How delightfully rich in imagery and imagination. Looked like me as a 10 year old ...but in a one piece suit, don'tcha know! Such a splendid rendering for summer and the imaginative world of children. Pure joy!
Thank you for today's smile!
diane
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018
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Hey Mrs KT,
I'm Honored. Humbled. Beside myself. Thanks so much for your stellar/plus-one review... off to dive into more alligators (the grown up kind!)
Comment from fm wright
To be the age again when fear was not a factor-that is what this poem brings to mind. Thank you for bringing back childhood memories and thoughts. Too bad we have to grow out of some things even though some fear is good for us.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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To be the age again when fear was not a factor-that is what this poem brings to mind. Thank you for bringing back childhood memories and thoughts. Too bad we have to grow out of some things even though some fear is good for us.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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fm wright,
So happy to have you here and thanks for the lovely thoughtful review. Yours, diana
Comment from Dean Kuch
Geesh, you were really old when your "Fear Clock" first tocked, Di.
Alligators, huh?
I was six and had just seen the film, Blood & Black Lace at the drive-in with my parents.
The killer in that film holds a woman's face against a stove, horribly burning and murdering her.
After I'd fallen asleep, I heard rustling (or so I thought) coming from beside my bed.
There on the floor below me lay the woman, burnt and screaming!
I awoke immediately, covered in sweat.
But I never cried out, not once. I was too scared to!
Good poem, thanks for sharing this poetic tail....e-r-r-r, heh-heh... tale with us.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Geesh, you were really old when your "Fear Clock" first tocked, Di.
Alligators, huh?
I was six and had just seen the film, Blood & Black Lace at the drive-in with my parents.
The killer in that film holds a woman's face against a stove, horribly burning and murdering her.
After I'd fallen asleep, I heard rustling (or so I thought) coming from beside my bed.
There on the floor below me lay the woman, burnt and screaming!
I awoke immediately, covered in sweat.
But I never cried out, not once. I was too scared to!
Good poem, thanks for sharing this poetic tail....e-r-r-r, heh-heh... tale with us.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Sorry kiddo for the delay... It's a little early for my birthday... But, I'm thrilled with my present... I have a soaking tub and he's not too big... not to small... (you got it)... He's just right. Thanks kiddo. yours, diana
Comment from tfawcus
The day we stop taking risks is the day when we really start to die. The incapacities of age can only really be overcome if we retain a faith in our personal invincibility.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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The day we stop taking risks is the day when we really start to die. The incapacities of age can only really be overcome if we retain a faith in our personal invincibility.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Hey Tfawcus,
So happy to have you here and thanks for the lovely thoughtful review. Yours, diana
