Creation Day
Imagine yourself witnessing the creation of the universe.30 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this and love the message of this. You've painted a beautiful picture of creation and of the King and Lord of all speaking and bringing forth existence. I really enjoyed reading this well written poem. Well done RodG!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I like this and love the message of this. You've painted a beautiful picture of creation and of the King and Lord of all speaking and bringing forth existence. I really enjoyed reading this well written poem. Well done RodG!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I am so delighted you love the message of "Creation Day," Jeffrey. Many thanks for your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from lyenochka
Beautiful thing to imagine in well wrought verses, Rod!
I like all the way you described that very first thing God created - Light. And you show that His presence and breath was also that light.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Beautiful thing to imagine in well wrought verses, Rod!
I like all the way you described that very first thing God created - Light. And you show that His presence and breath was also that light.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I am delighted you enjoyed "Creation Day" so much, lyenochka. Thank you for sharing. Rod
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Peaceful and comforting words that flowed easily and Drew me in.emotional and uplifting a very soulful and beautiful poem.i really enjoyed your work and this is a great entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Peaceful and comforting words that flowed easily and Drew me in.emotional and uplifting a very soulful and beautiful poem.i really enjoyed your work and this is a great entry for the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I am thrilled that you not only enjoyed "Creation Day," Blue Hendrix, but also found it peaceful and comforting. Rod
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Your welcome
Comment from BeasPeas
A wonderful job with this poem, Rod. I wish you much luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll need it. Your piece is imaginative with unique references, especially stanzas three and four. A joy to read. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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A wonderful job with this poem, Rod. I wish you much luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll need it. Your piece is imaginative with unique references, especially stanzas three and four. A joy to read. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Hi Marilyn. I am pleased you enjoyed reading "Creation Day." Many thanks for your encouraging review. Rod
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about where the imagination can take us. It would have been the greatest experience to be there when God created the earth from a void to something as beautiful as the earth we know today.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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A very well-written poem about where the imagination can take us. It would have been the greatest experience to be there when God created the earth from a void to something as beautiful as the earth we know today.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I am delighted I could PUT YOU THERE as a witness to Creation Day, Sandra. Thank you so much for sharing my poem. Rod
Comment from kiwijenny
Whoah this is AMAZING. Thanks for taking me there. I see His palms..I hear Him exclaim
Stunning and breathtaking poem
What you did with In the beginning, God created the heavens and the earth. - Genesis 1:1
Is stellar...actually that would be a few verses down
God bless and thanks
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Whoah this is AMAZING. Thanks for taking me there. I see His palms..I hear Him exclaim
Stunning and breathtaking poem
What you did with In the beginning, God created the heavens and the earth. - Genesis 1:1
Is stellar...actually that would be a few verses down
God bless and thanks
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Ah, kiwijenny, I am very touched by your enthusiastic response to "Creation Day." I am especially pleased I could put your there. Rod
Comment from Insignificant Weed
What a brilliant rendition of creation! You made the "black hole" come alive. In comparison with some of the other poetry I have read today, this is outstanding. I am appalled at the lack of punctuation knowledge and find some of the entries to be mediocre. I can't believe that FanStory is taking all the reviews at face value. But THIS! Thank you for a an exceptional rendering of an event that is shrouded in mystery yet affects us every day.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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What a brilliant rendition of creation! You made the "black hole" come alive. In comparison with some of the other poetry I have read today, this is outstanding. I am appalled at the lack of punctuation knowledge and find some of the entries to be mediocre. I can't believe that FanStory is taking all the reviews at face value. But THIS! Thank you for a an exceptional rendering of an event that is shrouded in mystery yet affects us every day.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you so much for your enthusiastic response to "Creation Day," and I am delighted it stands above most of the other entries in your opinion. I also appreciate that six-star bonus. Rod
Comment from Deirdre Anne Gialamas
Dear Rob,
I enjoyed reading your poem of creation from your perspective.
Verse three and four worked particularly well and language used
throughout the poem was clear, simple, which helped to promote
further your imagining of the birth of the world.
The rhyming is pleasing and the rhythm smooth.
Good luck with contest if still on.
Warmest wishes,
Deirdre Anne
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Dear Rob,
I enjoyed reading your poem of creation from your perspective.
Verse three and four worked particularly well and language used
throughout the poem was clear, simple, which helped to promote
further your imagining of the birth of the world.
The rhyming is pleasing and the rhythm smooth.
Good luck with contest if still on.
Warmest wishes,
Deirdre Anne
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you so much, Deirdre Anne, for your kind response to "Creation Day." I do try to use language that will appeal to readers of all ages. Since you are a newcomer to FanStory, feel free to check out my Portfolio for other examples of my work. Rod
Comment from pome lover
very good!
I love your choice of words, your phrases.
Had to smile at "He lobbed the sun." That created a fascinating picture in my mind.
Your poem is charmingly and beautifully developed, with the perfect accompanying picture.
This is a great entry in the contest, Rod. I wish us both luck. :)
pome lover
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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very good!
I love your choice of words, your phrases.
Had to smile at "He lobbed the sun." That created a fascinating picture in my mind.
Your poem is charmingly and beautifully developed, with the perfect accompanying picture.
This is a great entry in the contest, Rod. I wish us both luck. :)
pome lover
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Ah, what pleases a poet more than hearing a reviewer say "I love your choice of words, your phrases." You have made my day, pome lover. May we both do well in the contest. Rod
Comment from B. Bates
This is an epic rewriting for the first of the seven days. Every other version I heard of this story was more general than this. Hearing about the dawn of time was one thing but witnessing it is another story. You should write six more of these to decide the rest of the first week.
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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This is an epic rewriting for the first of the seven days. Every other version I heard of this story was more general than this. Hearing about the dawn of time was one thing but witnessing it is another story. You should write six more of these to decide the rest of the first week.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I truly had fun putting myself there when I wrote this poem. I am delighted you enjoyed "Creation Day" so much. I will indeed consider writing about the other six days. Rod.
