That's Where My Heartaches Begin
A lyrical poem about forbidden love18 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Brett,
I really hate this entry -- 'cause I have a poem in this contest, too. heehee
This is so sweet and soft and full of a wonderful kind of pain. I am not a fan of adultery - though it seems to be widely accepted these days, but I am a fan of your writing. *smile* Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Brett,
I really hate this entry -- 'cause I have a poem in this contest, too. heehee
This is so sweet and soft and full of a wonderful kind of pain. I am not a fan of adultery - though it seems to be widely accepted these days, but I am a fan of your writing. *smile* Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Appreciate your review and wish you well in the contest too.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I looked to see if this was listed under the tragic love contest. It's pretty sad alright.
On a philosophical level, I wish that humans had more self control. That is the true tragedy here. Why do passionate drives have to ruin people's lives? Are we that weak? I think that the answer is yes. They should write poetry or something. Get their minds on higher matters (ha).
Your poem is beautifully written. I like that they meet in the middle of the bridge that just won't burn.
The repeat line is a good example of form following function. It's an example of the narrator's repeated behavior and thought patterns.
Thanks for sharing this thought provoking poem. You certainly sent me philosophizing.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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I looked to see if this was listed under the tragic love contest. It's pretty sad alright.
On a philosophical level, I wish that humans had more self control. That is the true tragedy here. Why do passionate drives have to ruin people's lives? Are we that weak? I think that the answer is yes. They should write poetry or something. Get their minds on higher matters (ha).
Your poem is beautifully written. I like that they meet in the middle of the bridge that just won't burn.
The repeat line is a good example of form following function. It's an example of the narrator's repeated behavior and thought patterns.
Thanks for sharing this thought provoking poem. You certainly sent me philosophizing.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this lyrical poem. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like an infatuation and this kind of love can destroy your self esteem and make you unhappy in the end, especially if it is a secret forbidden love, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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This sounds like an infatuation and this kind of love can destroy your self esteem and make you unhappy in the end, especially if it is a secret forbidden love, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this poem. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from judiverse
This is very musical. Is seems like both parties crossed the line. The narrator doesn't seem able to break away. His refrain is "and that's where my heartaches begin. Sometimes it's hard to break away from an affair, as the narrator has discovered. Excellent refrain and rhyme. The feeling really comes across. It does have the country music flavor. I was a little puzzled by the line down there by its lonesome "I didn't know you weren't free to fall in love with me." Excellent entry for the love poetry contest. judi
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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This is very musical. Is seems like both parties crossed the line. The narrator doesn't seem able to break away. His refrain is "and that's where my heartaches begin. Sometimes it's hard to break away from an affair, as the narrator has discovered. Excellent refrain and rhyme. The feeling really comes across. It does have the country music flavor. I was a little puzzled by the line down there by its lonesome "I didn't know you weren't free to fall in love with me." Excellent entry for the love poetry contest. judi
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Much appreciated.
Comment from Rasmine
Brett!
This is awesome. It sounds like it could be a song. Are you still doing the songwriting club? You know about FanMusic, right? Are you a member there? I'm not just Flower Power was going to have a video but the illustrator didn't follow my stories. We choose Bryan Taylor to do the music. Do you know him? He's an awesome guitarist.
Hey, good luck!!
Nome
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Brett!
This is awesome. It sounds like it could be a song. Are you still doing the songwriting club? You know about FanMusic, right? Are you a member there? I'm not just Flower Power was going to have a video but the illustrator didn't follow my stories. We choose Bryan Taylor to do the music. Do you know him? He's an awesome guitarist.
Hey, good luck!!
Nome
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review and the six stars.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is pretty good. I love the message of this. It sounds like the lyrics of a broken hearted song. Forbidden love I believe truly does hurt. I guess at the time it probably doesn't. It's all of the aftershocks and everyone else affected is where the pain comes from. I like how you presented this well written poem. Well done Brett!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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This is pretty good. I love the message of this. It sounds like the lyrics of a broken hearted song. Forbidden love I believe truly does hurt. I guess at the time it probably doesn't. It's all of the aftershocks and everyone else affected is where the pain comes from. I like how you presented this well written poem. Well done Brett!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review.
Comment from country ranch writer
Some times things just aren't ment to be when there are others involved.it is sad but it is true things just happen and for some unknown reason it is hard to forget
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Some times things just aren't ment to be when there are others involved.it is sad but it is true things just happen and for some unknown reason it is hard to forget
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed this piece.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a 'Love Poem Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were perfect aligned perfectly with Descriptive Measures.
Good luck with this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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This is a 'Love Poem Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were perfect aligned perfectly with Descriptive Measures.
Good luck with this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Appreciate the six stars. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Suppose this is to be expected when one cheats.
Comment from Sankey
Interesting poem, friend. I thought you were the more honourable, bonds of marriage kind of guy. But I can see the sentiment and good construction throughout. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Interesting poem, friend. I thought you were the more honourable, bonds of marriage kind of guy. But I can see the sentiment and good construction throughout. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Yes, in real life I most certainly believe in being a one woman man. Like those cheating songs though. They seem to resonate with most people. Appreciate the comments and the review.
Comment from Pamusart
Yes. It is lyrical Brett. I was thinking It was a song or would be a good song. Are you a musician? You have a really good set of lyrics. I am giving you my last six star rating on one condition. If this becomes a song please send me the link to the video or the video itself. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Yes. It is lyrical Brett. I was thinking It was a song or would be a good song. Are you a musician? You have a really good set of lyrics. I am giving you my last six star rating on one condition. If this becomes a song please send me the link to the video or the video itself. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much for the six stars. Should this lyric become a recorded song, I will most certainly send you the link. As I said, my first love of writing is, and always will be, Country lyrics. Glad you enjoyed them. Appreciate the review.
