Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Phillip. This is an excellent positive poem of encouragement and fortitude. Well written. The first four lines are particularly good and resonate with me. Marilyn

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2018

Ahhh. Thanks for reading, BeasPeas.

Phillip

Comment from Unspoken94

Excellent

I work with the emotion of fear quite often as a therapist.
I am sitting here reading and re-reading your poem and I am
so impressed with the way you approach this issue. This is
artfully written.

bill Stephenson

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Oh. Thank you, Bill. I appreciate the compliment. Thanks for reading.

Phillip

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A philosophical write and we should make choices wisely and not be afraid of our own shadow. I think we are tested on a daily basis and how we perform can often make changes for the better, your words are food for thought, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018

Thanks for reading, Dolly.

Phillip

Comment from Ogden

Excellent

I admit, I am afraid I don't understand your theory of overcoming fear. (I'm also afraid you probably meant 'mettle.')

I really like your illustration. It lured me into your poem.

Don (aka Ogden)

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018

Thanks for the correction and reading, Ogden.

Phillip

reply by Ogden on 24-Jun-2018

Don't mention it, Phillip.
Don

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018

That error went on without anyone noticing or saying anything about it. That was a big one.

Phillip

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem. Good job with the rhymes & smooth flow of lines. I like the first line that states '. . first day of my life.' It makes me believe that something has caused you to see a need for change & you will not know if you do not take that chance. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018

Thanks for reading, Jan.

Phillip

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Yes, it's always like that, isn't it? When an opportunity we welcome appears, sometimes we fear and second guess ourselves. Good way to say it, Phillip!

"On a count of its nature, it's my biggest test." (On account)

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018

Thanks for reading, Lyenochka.

Phillip

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. Everything we do we have a choice to do it with confidence and trust or with doubt and fear. When we choose the latter we can be sure to fail.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018

Thanks for reading, Sandra.

Phillip

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Phillip,

This is very true. It seems that the worst advice comes from deep within ourselves. We always want to sabotage any new ideas; we hate change.

Keep the positive attitude and keep the new outlook.

~patty~

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018

Ha! I don't know about the positive attitude always, Patty. It all depends on who I'm talking to when my attitude is positive or negative. I've learned to weed out certain people. They don't give good or strong alternative views in exchange for me. I just want to do what's right without failing to be honest with myself. I read and review and try to contribute my perspective when I write. Sometimes I can't write because my view might not fit with the established voice on this site. Fitting in where I can is my goal. I realistically don't expect to win the top prize. Getting better is a premium for me.

Phillip

Comment from apky

Excellent

Your creative abilities continue to soar, Phillip. No other word for it.

Have a great weekend. My suggestions and comments are blow.


On a count( I think you mean "On account" here, Phillip) of its nature, it's my biggest test.

When one's metal(mettle- unless you wanted to use the word metal for some poetic reason) tested, it creates scary thoughts.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018

Thanks, Aki. I really appreciate your corrections.

Phillip

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hi PBOMAR1115, I always feel like I'm shouting at someone when I have to write in all capitals, LOL. It's nice to meet you in this cleverly written poem, I really enjoyed your ending, where the voice could end up being your own if you fear to make a choice. It is important what sort of choices we make, especially young people, as a whole lot of bad choices when you're young can end up making a very toxic person/people when you are older. I saw no errors and would recommend this work to other readers for review, cheers, Ana.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018

Wow. I appreciate those encouraging words, Anastasia.

Phillip