Points of Light
Triolet47 total reviews
Comment from estory
I thought this poem one of the better on the site today. Nice musical elements, nice images. We have some nice echoing effects in the rhymes and the meter is nicely stitched. Good contrast between those shadows and the sparks of stars and candles. A nice metaphor for the light and darkness in life. estory
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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I thought this poem one of the better on the site today. Nice musical elements, nice images. We have some nice echoing effects in the rhymes and the meter is nicely stitched. Good contrast between those shadows and the sparks of stars and candles. A nice metaphor for the light and darkness in life. estory
Comment Written 21-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Thank for the very encouraging and uplifting review. I appreciate the analysis of writing. You make me smile. Thank you.
Debi
Comment from Bill Schott
This triolet, Points of Light, has the right format and brings illumination to us to see the things which are sometimes hidden by extended neglect or purposeful concealment.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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This triolet, Points of Light, has the right format and brings illumination to us to see the things which are sometimes hidden by extended neglect or purposeful concealment.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Bill Schott,
Thank you for the wonderful review and your insights.
Debi
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello W. J. Debi,
Such a well-crafted and moving poetic offering. The visual and emotive imagery encapsulated in your offering is beautiful. "As shadows seek to veil the night" has a dream-like quality about it...but can also be interpreted on a number of levels.Thank you for sharing! Excquisite rendering!
diane
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hello W. J. Debi,
Such a well-crafted and moving poetic offering. The visual and emotive imagery encapsulated in your offering is beautiful. "As shadows seek to veil the night" has a dream-like quality about it...but can also be interpreted on a number of levels.Thank you for sharing! Excquisite rendering!
diane
Comment Written 21-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Diane,
Thank you for the six stars and the wonderful comments. I appreciate the comments about "As shows seek to veil the night" being dreamlike. You make my day. THANK YOU!
Debi
Comment from lyenochka
Very nice quatrains that match (no pun intended) the picture. I like how you bookended the poem with the two repeating couplets. It gives me a feeling of "lights" both on earth and in the sky doing their best the make the world a better place.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Very nice quatrains that match (no pun intended) the picture. I like how you bookended the poem with the two repeating couplets. It gives me a feeling of "lights" both on earth and in the sky doing their best the make the world a better place.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Lyenochka,
I appreciate the uplifting review and your kind comments.
Debi
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent poem, WJ. Your metre is terrific, nice poetic use of literary devices and your response to the picture this challenge superb.
I must enjoyed. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Excellent poem, WJ. Your metre is terrific, nice poetic use of literary devices and your response to the picture this challenge superb.
I must enjoyed. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Thank you, Gloria, for the glowing review. It brightened my day.
Debi
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very good form in this trilolet submission for the Picture This photo challenge group, w.j. debi.
As triolet poems are known for you've got the second line of the first stanza as the ending line in the second. The first line of S-1 repeats as line 3 in S-2.
As for the message it conveys, where light will always overcome shadows, I suppose that's true...for some.
Nicely penned.
~Dean
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Very good form in this trilolet submission for the Picture This photo challenge group, w.j. debi.
As triolet poems are known for you've got the second line of the first stanza as the ending line in the second. The first line of S-1 repeats as line 3 in S-2.
As for the message it conveys, where light will always overcome shadows, I suppose that's true...for some.
Nicely penned.
~Dean
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Dean,
I appreciate the optimistic interpretation. Funny, when I was writing it I was thinking how hard we struggle against the shadows, but how often they win and block out the light. That it comes across that light wins...well, that is nice.
Thanks for the analysis of the form and the encouraging comments. Always appreciated from such a talented writer as you.
Debi
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You are more than welcome, Debi.
Peace,
~Dean
Comment from meeshu
this is so full of really outstanding, smooth language I love the images and the mysticism of this write. very nicely penned, Debi
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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this is so full of really outstanding, smooth language I love the images and the mysticism of this write. very nicely penned, Debi
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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HI Meeshu,
Thank you for the kind comments and encouragement. I appreciate the support.
Debi
Comment from Yemima Kebede1
Great job! I like the rhyme scheme. Thank you for sharing this poem. I wish I could come up with a rhyme scheme easily. Keep up the great work and I hope you have a great day!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Great job! I like the rhyme scheme. Thank you for sharing this poem. I wish I could come up with a rhyme scheme easily. Keep up the great work and I hope you have a great day!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review! Debi
Comment from Janet Foor
"Points of Light" is an excellent triolet poem for the 'Pix This Challenge group' Debi.
Very nice repeating line.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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"Points of Light" is an excellent triolet poem for the 'Pix This Challenge group' Debi.
Very nice repeating line.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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HI Janet,
Thank you for the kind comments and for stopping by to read and review.
Debi
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm sorry to be out of sixes as this is a six star poem. I can see the picture come to life as the little matchsticks try to keep the flame going when the dark shadows threaten to, "veil the night". I love the image your poem evokes, and I love your interpretation of this picture. I'm so in aww of you being able to write in the triolet form. I find it a difficult poetry form and avoid it myself. You are awesome!
Joy xx
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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I'm sorry to be out of sixes as this is a six star poem. I can see the picture come to life as the little matchsticks try to keep the flame going when the dark shadows threaten to, "veil the night". I love the image your poem evokes, and I love your interpretation of this picture. I'm so in aww of you being able to write in the triolet form. I find it a difficult poetry form and avoid it myself. You are awesome!
Joy xx
Comment Written 20-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Hi Joy,
Thank you for the virtual six and the very kind comments. I've only ever had one poem nominated for poem of the month so I will not hold my breath, but I do appreciate the sentiment. I am honored. Hey, sorry for the delay in responding. I have posted mostly prose lately and a dollar gets me twelve to fifteen reviews for prose. I'd forgotten that poems get a lot more and I posted two at once. I have met a lot a new people, but it has taken more time than I figured to get all the responses and reciprocal reviewing done. Thanks for your patience. Hey, I am loving your cowboy poetry series. Go Calgary!
Debi
