Points of Light
Triolet47 total reviews
Comment from May 1
Wow, your vocabulary choice is simply perfect. It creates such a vivid image in my mind. All in all, this is a wonderfully written poem and I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Wow, your vocabulary choice is simply perfect. It creates such a vivid image in my mind. All in all, this is a wonderfully written poem and I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Hi May 1,
Thank you for the for the wonderful comments and five stars. You say such nice things. I am happy to hear you enjoyed this poem.
Debi
Comment from Phoenix Rising
Wow!I
Read this out loud several times.
Something about reading a poem out loud enhances it.
A most excellent Triolet. Wonderful flow and imagery.
Truly my pleasure to read and review.
Phoenix Rising
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Wow!I
Read this out loud several times.
Something about reading a poem out loud enhances it.
A most excellent Triolet. Wonderful flow and imagery.
Truly my pleasure to read and review.
Phoenix Rising
Comment Written 19-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2019
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Thank you for going back into the file to read this poem, and for giving such gracious comments about it. I agree about reading poetry aloud. I do it all the time.
Debi
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed the mood you created in this triolet. I could visualize the growing darkness and contrasting "points of light". I admired your subtle use of personification and your pure rhymes. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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I enjoyed the mood you created in this triolet. I could visualize the growing darkness and contrasting "points of light". I admired your subtle use of personification and your pure rhymes. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Hi Joan,
Thank you for the wonderful six stars and the encouraging comments! It is particularly appreciated since this poem is not currently listed on the active list. I appreciate your generosity and encouragement.
Debi
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And I appreciate your well-crafted poem and warmhearted response. More cheers- Joan
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Subtle personification of shadows, stars, and constellations, with such phrases as "stake their claim." The photo itself is funny, I guess a writing prompt? Nice job on the triolet form. I think I have only written one, so I have no idea what to improve on.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Subtle personification of shadows, stars, and constellations, with such phrases as "stake their claim." The photo itself is funny, I guess a writing prompt? Nice job on the triolet form. I think I have only written one, so I have no idea what to improve on.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thank you for going back into my profile for this one. You are right, it was a writing prompt. It was certainly a unique and fun picture.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, w.j.debi, :)
How are you? I'm sorry this is soooo late. I was taking a hiatus from reviewing. A little depression settled in but now it is under control. It was about Flower Power and not feeling supported by people that said they would be there. :) It's letting it go that is full of feelings.
Love your new profile picture of the unicorn.
Take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Hello, w.j.debi, :)
How are you? I'm sorry this is soooo late. I was taking a hiatus from reviewing. A little depression settled in but now it is under control. It was about Flower Power and not feeling supported by people that said they would be there. :) It's letting it go that is full of feelings.
Love your new profile picture of the unicorn.
Take care,
Nome
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Hi Rasmine,
No problem on the timing. It has to be depressing to work on something for so long and then lose the support. Our characters become like our children and it is hard to let them go. Hang in there. You are a talented writer so keep writing.
I felt it was about time I put a picture in place and was looking for a picture of a fairy or an elf when I came across this picture of the unicorn and the tiny fairy on its neck. The unicorn looks so much like my own horse (except she is black) that I fell in love with it.
Comment from kiwijenny
As shadows seek to veil the night
intrepid sparks ignite their flame.
Soft points of light shall glow more bright
as shadows seek to veil the night.
Perfect imagery..perfect picture for it...I love the intrepid sparks
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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As shadows seek to veil the night
intrepid sparks ignite their flame.
Soft points of light shall glow more bright
as shadows seek to veil the night.
Perfect imagery..perfect picture for it...I love the intrepid sparks
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review and for pointing out what you liked, kiwijenny.
Debi
Comment from Possummagic
An interesting choice of imagery. I loved your poem and it rhymed perfectly. I enjoyed the words you used in you poem. I mean there are millions of words we could choose and not everyone gets it right! Nice work. PM
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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An interesting choice of imagery. I loved your poem and it rhymed perfectly. I enjoyed the words you used in you poem. I mean there are millions of words we could choose and not everyone gets it right! Nice work. PM
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review. I am happy you liked it.
Debi
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You?re welcome.PM
Comment from Spitfire
Top notch triolet. Thoughts fit well with the picture. You present a problem and give concrete examples of what will beat those shadows. The alliteration of a whispered 's' sound show what a skilled poet you are.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Top notch triolet. Thoughts fit well with the picture. You present a problem and give concrete examples of what will beat those shadows. The alliteration of a whispered 's' sound show what a skilled poet you are.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Thank you for the insightful review and thoughtful analysis, Shari. I appreciate it. Debi
Comment from Raul1
Excellent poem! There are no mistakes in this poem. It is perfect. This particular poem is interesting. It talks about shadows and how the candle is lit and cast deep shadows in the night. Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Excellent poem! There are no mistakes in this poem. It is perfect. This particular poem is interesting. It talks about shadows and how the candle is lit and cast deep shadows in the night. Well done!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Raul,
I appreciate the kind comments and your insights on the topic.
Debi
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You're welcome.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Debi;
=>This is a lovely triolet poem that I really enjoyed and does take specific
characteristics on this style to create such a lovely piece of poetry and you
have done so, so righteously!
=>Debi, did a wonderful job utilizing this Ekphrastic(both expressing each other
words and picture) piece of poetry to match your words with this elegant
picture that I would find particularly difficult to write words for which you seem
to have done it so well.
=>Some very small spags.=>
=>(V1,L1)"... night" (comma)
=>(V1,L3)"...more bright"(comma)
=>Thank you for posting, Debi, and take care and have a good one especially
because He loves you dearly.
Alx
;.~)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Cheers, Debi;
=>This is a lovely triolet poem that I really enjoyed and does take specific
characteristics on this style to create such a lovely piece of poetry and you
have done so, so righteously!
=>Debi, did a wonderful job utilizing this Ekphrastic(both expressing each other
words and picture) piece of poetry to match your words with this elegant
picture that I would find particularly difficult to write words for which you seem
to have done it so well.
=>Some very small spags.=>
=>(V1,L1)"... night" (comma)
=>(V1,L3)"...more bright"(comma)
=>Thank you for posting, Debi, and take care and have a good one especially
because He loves you dearly.
Alx
;.~)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hi Alex,
Thank you for the encouraging comments. I'll take a look at the punctuation.
Debi
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Is very welcome, Debi, and take care and always have a good one especially when you deserve it.
Alx
;.~)
