Comment from Mustang Patty

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Hi, Phillip,

Your writing continues to develop as you strive to take on bigger and more complex stories. The main theme of your story seems to be the abuse one takes after others discover you suffer from a mental illness.

After you've set this story aside for a bit, I would suggest you do a good edit because the story has a great deal to say.

My big suggestion to folks is to read the piece out loud after your first draft. You will find this first read through will help you identify glaring errors. You will hear missing words, the incorrect form of words, and often you will see your own spelling errors.

My second suggestion is to consult a style guide. These guides will help you clean up your sentence structure, and address grammatical issues you may have problems with. My favorite book is Elements of Style 2017. It is easy to read and broken down into chapters dealing with each issue.

I do hope you find my suggestions helpful.

~patty~

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018

Thanks for reading, Patty.

Phillip