The Cat's out of the Bag
Meeting the right people is not easy.21 total reviews
Comment from Julie Goodswen
Sounds like a very rough ride. We all have our issues and you have conveyed yours really well. Some conditions are scary to outsiders and their overactive imaginations soar!
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Sounds like a very rough ride. We all have our issues and you have conveyed yours really well. Some conditions are scary to outsiders and their overactive imaginations soar!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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Thanks for seeing as a rough ride. I like the way you said that, Julie.
Phillip
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow complete and very well done. YOu put a lot of emotion on this and let us into a world that some of us have never been in. Very nicely written and imformative
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Wow complete and very well done. YOu put a lot of emotion on this and let us into a world that some of us have never been in. Very nicely written and imformative
Comment Written 13-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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Thanks, Barb.
Phillip
Comment from meeshu
this is a very fascinating look inside the affliction and the struggle to control one's own thoughts and the emotions so closely tied. an excellent essay, PBO.........meeshu
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this is a very fascinating look inside the affliction and the struggle to control one's own thoughts and the emotions so closely tied. an excellent essay, PBO.........meeshu
Comment Written 13-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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Thanks, for reading, Meeshu.
Phillip
Comment from robyn corum
Phillip,
This is a troubling piece. I have a lot of issues that I have to deal with, too. Besides a couple of minor health problems, I deal with some pretty major mental issues -- I know. That probably doesn't shock you too much, huh? *smile* I have bi polar disorder, and have been in some realllly bad places before, if you know what I mean??
People who have always had their right head cannot imagine what it's like to lose it. It's a horrible scary thing and I wouldn't wish it on an enemy. But I do understand what you mean by the haters. I finally got to a point where I had to cut some people out of my life. I figured out -- FINALLY -- that if you have TOXIC people who continually bring you down and never lift you up, then at some point, you MUST set them aside, for sanity's sake. It's a hard choice and it caused a LOT of extra problems in our family, but - there you go.
I thought this was a smart piece, and I thought it might go a long way to help others - who don't have to deal with this nonsense -- understand what it's like. And, ALWAYS with understanding comes COMPASSION. And that would be fabulous. YES???? YES. *smile*
But - you know me. I'm also going to point out some stuff. I always have to have my opinion. Of course, it's always cool that you can ignore it. hahaha!!!
Notes:
1.) Haters take pleasure in (this) attribute to secure a dominant spot in the
2.) Haters study you before they make a move on you
--> this concept is terrifying!
3.) If you've got a vulnerability such as mine, the Haters will Google your issue and stalk your way of life. This statement is the classic symptom of a person with schizophrenia, " losing touch" with reality.
--> I didn't quite understand this part. Is this two different statements or are you saying that a person with schizophrenia will say that haters will Google their issues and stalk their way of life...?
4.) The Haters use imagination using this attribute. ('use' x 2)
--> The Haters (play on the) imagination using this attribute.
5.) I'll just tell you what developed and exclude my experiences.
--> confused, because you then give a scenario and use the pronoun 'I' - so is this a personal experience or not?
6.) I visited the green room several times.
--> are we supposed to know what this means, sweetie?
--> maybe explain what a green room is for those of us who aren't familiar?
7.) with comfortable cushioned chairs to absorb the ladies fat asses which
--> uh uh. How does this have anything to do with your story? tsk tsk
8.) While I lounged on the sofa(,) relaxed(,) and prepare(d) to strengthen my connection to the tight(-knitted) clique in the
9.) The Friend sputtered in a husky grumble(,) "Oh, we('ve) met many times."
10.) I collected what want for knowledge (?)
--> I don't quite understand this sentence
11.) by remaining calm (and) then repeated (her) statement as a question(:) "We met many times(?)"
12.) She replied, "Yes(,)" as an air of superiority
13.) Up to this stage, I'd considered I('d) gained ground with the Developing
14.) Courteousness and respect(ful), I'd illustrated on each occasion we chatted.
15.) As God is my witness, I'd (been) repulsed at the (attempted allurement) of the Friend.
16.) I got up and left.
--> HUZZAH! Showing the man you truly are. Great job!
I hope you won't be discouraged by the number of comments that I've made. You know very well what a nit-picker I am, and this piece is very important. I could have let a lot of these go, but decided not to. I hope you will understand. AND I hope you won't be upset with me.
Please let me know if you decide to edit. I really think you did a super job on this and I'm SO GLAD to see you writing. That MAKES ME HAPPY! Thank you!
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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Phillip,
This is a troubling piece. I have a lot of issues that I have to deal with, too. Besides a couple of minor health problems, I deal with some pretty major mental issues -- I know. That probably doesn't shock you too much, huh? *smile* I have bi polar disorder, and have been in some realllly bad places before, if you know what I mean??
People who have always had their right head cannot imagine what it's like to lose it. It's a horrible scary thing and I wouldn't wish it on an enemy. But I do understand what you mean by the haters. I finally got to a point where I had to cut some people out of my life. I figured out -- FINALLY -- that if you have TOXIC people who continually bring you down and never lift you up, then at some point, you MUST set them aside, for sanity's sake. It's a hard choice and it caused a LOT of extra problems in our family, but - there you go.
I thought this was a smart piece, and I thought it might go a long way to help others - who don't have to deal with this nonsense -- understand what it's like. And, ALWAYS with understanding comes COMPASSION. And that would be fabulous. YES???? YES. *smile*
But - you know me. I'm also going to point out some stuff. I always have to have my opinion. Of course, it's always cool that you can ignore it. hahaha!!!
Notes:
1.) Haters take pleasure in (this) attribute to secure a dominant spot in the
2.) Haters study you before they make a move on you
--> this concept is terrifying!
3.) If you've got a vulnerability such as mine, the Haters will Google your issue and stalk your way of life. This statement is the classic symptom of a person with schizophrenia, " losing touch" with reality.
--> I didn't quite understand this part. Is this two different statements or are you saying that a person with schizophrenia will say that haters will Google their issues and stalk their way of life...?
4.) The Haters use imagination using this attribute. ('use' x 2)
--> The Haters (play on the) imagination using this attribute.
5.) I'll just tell you what developed and exclude my experiences.
--> confused, because you then give a scenario and use the pronoun 'I' - so is this a personal experience or not?
6.) I visited the green room several times.
--> are we supposed to know what this means, sweetie?
--> maybe explain what a green room is for those of us who aren't familiar?
7.) with comfortable cushioned chairs to absorb the ladies fat asses which
--> uh uh. How does this have anything to do with your story? tsk tsk
8.) While I lounged on the sofa(,) relaxed(,) and prepare(d) to strengthen my connection to the tight(-knitted) clique in the
9.) The Friend sputtered in a husky grumble(,) "Oh, we('ve) met many times."
10.) I collected what want for knowledge (?)
--> I don't quite understand this sentence
11.) by remaining calm (and) then repeated (her) statement as a question(:) "We met many times(?)"
12.) She replied, "Yes(,)" as an air of superiority
13.) Up to this stage, I'd considered I('d) gained ground with the Developing
14.) Courteousness and respect(ful), I'd illustrated on each occasion we chatted.
15.) As God is my witness, I'd (been) repulsed at the (attempted allurement) of the Friend.
16.) I got up and left.
--> HUZZAH! Showing the man you truly are. Great job!
I hope you won't be discouraged by the number of comments that I've made. You know very well what a nit-picker I am, and this piece is very important. I could have let a lot of these go, but decided not to. I hope you will understand. AND I hope you won't be upset with me.
Please let me know if you decide to edit. I really think you did a super job on this and I'm SO GLAD to see you writing. That MAKES ME HAPPY! Thank you!
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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Robyn, I wish I can use that important L word to tell you how I feel toward you for showing me this much attention. You've made me the happiest person in the world. I really would be cuckoo if I did not appreciate the comments, your admission of bipolar, and the corrections pointed out. I know I did not put enough time on the piece to make the reading clearer and understandable. I rushed to post this piece because I was eager to purge my identity. You pointing out the trouble spots helped. Please, Robyn, never fear to tell me what you think. I have never had any ill feeling toward you and don't think I can. My respect for you has not diminished in any way, shape or form. You are the one who helps me keep my pieces honest. But, I really need to learn to put more time into my pieces.
Phillip
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Whew!!
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Me, too.
Phillip
Comment from lyenochka
I really liked how you wrote this, Phillip. You brought us into your mind and feelings. I like how you named the people as Developing Relationship and Friend which keeps a boundary around them as not quite people who have the intimacy or trust in your inner circle. And of course, I like your term, "Haters" as there are always people like that. Still, one thing I keep reminding myself over and over when I have negative feelings about anyone, is that my struggle isn't with the "flesh and blood" person but with the spiritual force that influences them to become a "Hater" and I think that person could very well become a "Loving One" under God's influence. Just my thoughts. But enjoyed your sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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I really liked how you wrote this, Phillip. You brought us into your mind and feelings. I like how you named the people as Developing Relationship and Friend which keeps a boundary around them as not quite people who have the intimacy or trust in your inner circle. And of course, I like your term, "Haters" as there are always people like that. Still, one thing I keep reminding myself over and over when I have negative feelings about anyone, is that my struggle isn't with the "flesh and blood" person but with the spiritual force that influences them to become a "Hater" and I think that person could very well become a "Loving One" under God's influence. Just my thoughts. But enjoyed your sharing!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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Lyenochka, you've made me happy with your words. The piece is badly written because I rushed to post it. I really appreciate your comments. You are proving to be an unforgettable friend.
Phillip
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I do the same thing. I rush to post and then the first reviewers find the errors. That's why we're learning here.
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This is a great place to learn.
Phillip
Comment from apky
You did the right thing to simply get up and go, my friend. With Haters as you call them, there's no point going into long arguments to try and clarify things. The more energy you waste into explanations the more irritating the situations gets. It would only go from the proverbial bad to worse.
Excellent piece, Phillip. You're doing great with improving your writing.
It stunned me after what she said.
Suggestions:
- What she said stunned me.
I was stunned at what she said.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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You did the right thing to simply get up and go, my friend. With Haters as you call them, there's no point going into long arguments to try and clarify things. The more energy you waste into explanations the more irritating the situations gets. It would only go from the proverbial bad to worse.
Excellent piece, Phillip. You're doing great with improving your writing.
It stunned me after what she said.
Suggestions:
- What she said stunned me.
I was stunned at what she said.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018
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Aki, you always make me feel good. I feel you are the most knowledgeable and experienced person here. I am made better relating to you. And thanks for the correction. I really need to think more subject-verb when I write.
Phillip
Comment from Curly Girly
Sadly, this is true:
Haters endure whether you are normal or cuckoo.
Typo:
" losing touch"
"losing touch" / space
flat screen tv.
flat screen TV.
and ready to strengthen
and GET ready to strengthen
or:
PREPARE to strengthen
I'm the one with the Cadillac."
... and you still got up and left. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Sadly, this is true:
Haters endure whether you are normal or cuckoo.
Typo:
" losing touch"
"losing touch" / space
flat screen tv.
flat screen TV.
and ready to strengthen
and GET ready to strengthen
or:
PREPARE to strengthen
I'm the one with the Cadillac."
... and you still got up and left. Brilliant!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Hey . . . Nicole. It's great to get first-rate, straight to the point help. And by the way, you are the most Brilliant person I know. Thanks for the encouragement.
Phillip
Comment from Artasylum
I know from schizophrenia... My mother had a psychotic break when I was about 9 and she was a diagnosed, paranoid schizophrenic. It was a tragic life for my Mom and I grew up very fast. Be at Peace... thanks so much for posting. yours, diana
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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I know from schizophrenia... My mother had a psychotic break when I was about 9 and she was a diagnosed, paranoid schizophrenic. It was a tragic life for my Mom and I grew up very fast. Be at Peace... thanks so much for posting. yours, diana
Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Thanks, for reading, Diana.
Phillip
Comment from Cybertron1986
It's a different, but acceptable style of writing. It may not be accepted as much, but I did enjoy it due to the relative nature of your subject matter.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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It's a different, but acceptable style of writing. It may not be accepted as much, but I did enjoy it due to the relative nature of your subject matter.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Thanks, for reading, Cybertron 1986.
Phillip
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
"Absorb the ladies fat asses" haha, this was a solid read and the story was informative, captivating, and just enjoyable, hats off to the writer and thanks for sharing my friend
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"Absorb the ladies fat asses" haha, this was a solid read and the story was informative, captivating, and just enjoyable, hats off to the writer and thanks for sharing my friend
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Thanks, for reading, Phillip.
Phillip
