Suburban prisoner
100 word story8 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story on the theme of 'prisoner', Suburban Prisoner, takes us up out of our comfortable chairs and has us imagine an even better state of affairs. Launching a book, man! Nice.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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This one-hundred-word story on the theme of 'prisoner', Suburban Prisoner, takes us up out of our comfortable chairs and has us imagine an even better state of affairs. Launching a book, man! Nice.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Yes indeed ! how nice it would be -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from BeasPeas
A good 100-word write. I've lived in suburbia and in California, not too far from LA. Not so free in CA either, but the glamour of it is that you think you are and that makes your story all the more perfect. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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A good 100-word write. I've lived in suburbia and in California, not too far from LA. Not so free in CA either, but the glamour of it is that you think you are and that makes your story all the more perfect. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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Thanks for those encouraging words zanya
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the The Prisoner writing prompt.
Your story is well and has a nice twist.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the The Prisoner writing prompt.
Your story is well and has a nice twist.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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THANKS FOR THE ENCOURAGING WORDS ZANYA
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
it's funny how a normal life can seem to turn into a trapped situation on the toss of a dime, isn't it.
Another ping on his 1Phone - should this be IPhone?
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Hi there,
it's funny how a normal life can seem to turn into a trapped situation on the toss of a dime, isn't it.
Another ping on his 1Phone - should this be IPhone?
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Great -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Nanny 6
Sounds like Johnny's thinking the grass is greener on the other side of the fence. LA seems to be more of a prison than suburbia... look at me, you got me thinking.... that's what makes a good story. Good luck in the contest.
Judy
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Sounds like Johnny's thinking the grass is greener on the other side of the fence. LA seems to be more of a prison than suburbia... look at me, you got me thinking.... that's what makes a good story. Good luck in the contest.
Judy
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Great review zanya
Comment from Bridget Myer
I really enjoyed this piece...it made me think one mans dream is another prison.
I think I would prefer the dream- 'lucky, house in suburbia, permanent job'.
Well written, you captured the text speak, the thoughts and the description 'pallid face flushed. He loosened his tie'. His response to thinking his mate was actually achieving.
Well written, You stayed within the constraints of competition exceptionally well engaging the reader exceptionally well
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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I really enjoyed this piece...it made me think one mans dream is another prison.
I think I would prefer the dream- 'lucky, house in suburbia, permanent job'.
Well written, you captured the text speak, the thoughts and the description 'pallid face flushed. He loosened his tie'. His response to thinking his mate was actually achieving.
Well written, You stayed within the constraints of competition exceptionally well engaging the reader exceptionally well
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Great review zanya
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent and interesting story for the contest
with a little different idea of prisoner.
Johnny seems to have a very good life,
surprised he was so easily swayed by Mike's text.
Excellent entry for the contest
Good luck in the voting
RS
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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This is an excellent and interesting story for the contest
with a little different idea of prisoner.
Johnny seems to have a very good life,
surprised he was so easily swayed by Mike's text.
Excellent entry for the contest
Good luck in the voting
RS
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Great review zanya
Comment from Angela Hayes
Short and interesting, matching image community estate setting, good interaction, easy to read, well presented, inspirational, educational, professionally done. Good luck!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Short and interesting, matching image community estate setting, good interaction, easy to read, well presented, inspirational, educational, professionally done. Good luck!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Wow -those words are encouragement indeed and especially when they arrive with 6 twinkling stars !zanya
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third line from bottom, first line > Please check and correct a spelling error..holed up might be hold up" thanks.
