Writing To The Senses, Part 1: Sight
Incorporating sight into your story11 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
TY, Brett, :)
Hello. These are helping people to write better. But don't be surprised if some people don't bother even reading it. There are a few who think there writing has no error. Okay, I used to be one of these and still am to some extent. :P
Hey, take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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TY, Brett, :)
Hello. These are helping people to write better. But don't be surprised if some people don't bother even reading it. There are a few who think there writing has no error. Okay, I used to be one of these and still am to some extent. :P
Hey, take care,
Nome
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Much appreciated.
Comment from country ranch writer
great work in your writing this for us as a guide to go by looking forward to the rest. I try to make my readers feel like they are there.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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great work in your writing this for us as a guide to go by looking forward to the rest. I try to make my readers feel like they are there.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review.
Comment from judiverse
Some good points in this. You provide some good examples of how to add to the visuals in a story. It's important that people not use these visual appeals just for the sake of providing color. They should contribute something to the story, and you indicate how they can relate to the writing. A pink table doesn't add much in itself--it's what it contributes to the story. I notice in TV shows I watch that if a particular item--such as a picture--gets attention at the beginning, it should play a part in later developments. Great project you've started. judi
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Some good points in this. You provide some good examples of how to add to the visuals in a story. It's important that people not use these visual appeals just for the sake of providing color. They should contribute something to the story, and you indicate how they can relate to the writing. A pink table doesn't add much in itself--it's what it contributes to the story. I notice in TV shows I watch that if a particular item--such as a picture--gets attention at the beginning, it should play a part in later developments. Great project you've started. judi
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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As always, appreciate the comments and the review.
Comment from Ricky1024
Worthy of my 'Six' Brett.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were excellent.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024 and have a blessed day!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Worthy of my 'Six' Brett.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were excellent.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024 and have a blessed day!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Much appreciated.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Great advise. I don't know if I do these things or not! Good grief, now I have to write and think?! It's just tooo much. Maybe I'll make my specialty 3 word poems. =] Thanks for trying to help the less fortunate. =} Rox
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Great advise. I don't know if I do these things or not! Good grief, now I have to write and think?! It's just tooo much. Maybe I'll make my specialty 3 word poems. =] Thanks for trying to help the less fortunate. =} Rox
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks, as always.
Comment from Sankey
Thanks Bro these are good. Are you aware that Ginger cats are only Male? Related female is only Tortoise shell. Curious, huh. I appreciate your help. I do a lot of looking at things that others might think is corny. I have started writing my book of Rambles.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks Bro these are good. Are you aware that Ginger cats are only Male? Related female is only Tortoise shell. Curious, huh. I appreciate your help. I do a lot of looking at things that others might think is corny. I have started writing my book of Rambles.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Much appreciated.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Your essay is full of good advice. Well written, informative.
Well done and thank you for sharing this educational piece with us.
As a new writer I always appreciate good advice like this.
Sharon
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Your essay is full of good advice. Well written, informative.
Well done and thank you for sharing this educational piece with us.
As a new writer I always appreciate good advice like this.
Sharon
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written piece on how to draw the reader into what we are writing about so that they can see what we see in a certain scenario we are writing about.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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A very well-written piece on how to draw the reader into what we are writing about so that they can see what we see in a certain scenario we are writing about.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Much appreciated.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Brett,
You make many valid points in your writing about incorporating the sense of sight into one's story. I read this with great interest & wasn't disappointed. I understand what you are sharing with authors. Thank you for the info.
In this sentence, is it telling not showing?
Example: Tom removed the stool that supported the table and repaired it.
[U=You are telling what is being done, right But I imagine the rest of the paragraph would do the showing.]
Thank you for your time helping writers. Jan
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Brett,
You make many valid points in your writing about incorporating the sense of sight into one's story. I read this with great interest & wasn't disappointed. I understand what you are sharing with authors. Thank you for the info.
In this sentence, is it telling not showing?
Example: Tom removed the stool that supported the table and repaired it.
[U=You are telling what is being done, right But I imagine the rest of the paragraph would do the showing.]
Thank you for your time helping writers. Jan
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks for the insightful comments and the review.
Comment from RodG
Brett, I think a FanStory writers will appreciate this series of articles. How to make one a better DESCRIPTIVE writer? As you pointed out, the first rule of writing is SHOW, DON'T TELL. You also explained the importance of OBSERVING and choosing details. But your article would benefit from examples to illustrate how all this is employed in a lengthy passage of prose like a paragraph of a short story. Don't be reluctant to use passages from your own works. Rod
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Brett, I think a FanStory writers will appreciate this series of articles. How to make one a better DESCRIPTIVE writer? As you pointed out, the first rule of writing is SHOW, DON'T TELL. You also explained the importance of OBSERVING and choosing details. But your article would benefit from examples to illustrate how all this is employed in a lengthy passage of prose like a paragraph of a short story. Don't be reluctant to use passages from your own works. Rod
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2018
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this piece. Appreciate your comments and the review.
