Our Bullets ... VOTES
Your voice only counts in one place.9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This political 5-7-5, Our Bullets...Votes, has the proper seventeen-syllable format and brings us to the reasonable solution to our political problems: Vote them out of office. If you still believe that we aren't just fooling ourselves believing this is still a democratic society.
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This political 5-7-5, Our Bullets...Votes, has the proper seventeen-syllable format and brings us to the reasonable solution to our political problems: Vote them out of office. If you still believe that we aren't just fooling ourselves believing this is still a democratic society.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
Comment from Ogden
This is a compelling call to action, attractively presented, and complemented by an appropriate illustration. However, the author's own political preference is held close to his vest.
Don (Ogden)
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This is a compelling call to action, attractively presented, and complemented by an appropriate illustration. However, the author's own political preference is held close to his vest.
Don (Ogden)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
Comment from Donka Kristeva
I am not sure of the main message in this poem. There is a seeming contradiction between the 2-nd and 3-rd line. Maybe it is because I don't understand the political background.
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I am not sure of the main message in this poem. There is a seeming contradiction between the 2-nd and 3-rd line. Maybe it is because I don't understand the political background.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
Comment from RodG
I like the urgency of the Speaker's words. Ican see him leading a protest march. But what exactly is he shouting against? That pronoun THIS is too vague in its reference and too all-encompsssing.
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I like the urgency of the Speaker's words. Ican see him leading a protest march. But what exactly is he shouting against? That pronoun THIS is too vague in its reference and too all-encompsssing.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Contestant;
-is a reading apartment thinking about it over time I felt this poem generalizes effect when you use the word we was I'm not part of that we and so were more than half of the world, since trumped of dues by 3 million popular votes.
-Another individual for because I disagree with you because your poem is very good but I think it lacks overall appeal.
-Good luck in the context and take care and have a good.
AK
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Cheers, Contestant;
-is a reading apartment thinking about it over time I felt this poem generalizes effect when you use the word we was I'm not part of that we and so were more than half of the world, since trumped of dues by 3 million popular votes.
-Another individual for because I disagree with you because your poem is very good but I think it lacks overall appeal.
-Good luck in the context and take care and have a good.
AK
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Political 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Your message is clear and tells a strong truth.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Political 5-7-5 writing prompt.
Your message is clear and tells a strong truth.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks voters have their bullets, they vote and elect their chosen or favourite candidates, so they can do it rightly per their beliefs for effect of their voting rights; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks voters have their bullets, they vote and elect their chosen or favourite candidates, so they can do it rightly per their beliefs for effect of their voting rights; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written political 5-7-5 poem. The majority of voters are not always well-educated and fall very quickly for the false promises of free education, housing, etc.
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A very well-written political 5-7-5 poem. The majority of voters are not always well-educated and fall very quickly for the false promises of free education, housing, etc.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
Comment from rama devi
Totally agree. Good political post with an urgent prompting to vote...to take responsibility. Well presented. I think your punctuation and spacing choices serve the poem to great effect. Fine presentation too. Bravo and good luck.
Oh, and great metaphor in the title!
Warmly, rd
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Totally agree. Good political post with an urgent prompting to vote...to take responsibility. Well presented. I think your punctuation and spacing choices serve the poem to great effect. Fine presentation too. Bravo and good luck.
Oh, and great metaphor in the title!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
