Cut Flowers
A Shakespearean Sonnet for the contest59 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You make one feel guilty for loving a little bunch of flowers inside to brighten us up, Tony, almost. A beautifully crafted sonnet and with an unusual topic that suits the form well. I do like your closing couplet, yes, we all need nurturing throughout our lives.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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You make one feel guilty for loving a little bunch of flowers inside to brighten us up, Tony, almost. A beautifully crafted sonnet and with an unusual topic that suits the form well. I do like your closing couplet, yes, we all need nurturing throughout our lives.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Thanks, Valda. Nothing better than a vase of flowers to cheer a home up! I do find it strange though, that we choose to present our loved ones with cut flowers as a symbol of our undying love! LOL
All the best, Tony
Comment from IndianaIrish
An outstanding sonnet, Tony! An unusual topic but perfect for a sonnet. I love a vase of fresh flowers with their beauty and heady s ents that fill the house, but I always feel so guilty for loving them so much, and then watching as they wilt and die. Hanks for sharing this lovely poem, and best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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An outstanding sonnet, Tony! An unusual topic but perfect for a sonnet. I love a vase of fresh flowers with their beauty and heady s ents that fill the house, but I always feel so guilty for loving them so much, and then watching as they wilt and die. Hanks for sharing this lovely poem, and best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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So kind of you to drop by and review after this one's promotion had finished. Thanks very much both for your six stars and good luck wishes. I have to admit that I rather like cut flowers, too. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from aanneee
I must admit, roses especially, I don't want to receive them at all. Someone just gave me a very large bouquet...how lovely of the lady who gave them to me and how I dislike myself for having to throw them away. I have them hooked upside and hanging right now and hope I can save them in some way...but!!! Thank you...Dinah
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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I must admit, roses especially, I don't want to receive them at all. Someone just gave me a very large bouquet...how lovely of the lady who gave them to me and how I dislike myself for having to throw them away. I have them hooked upside and hanging right now and hope I can save them in some way...but!!! Thank you...Dinah
Comment Written 07-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Many thanks, Dinah, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi Tony
Yes, indeed. You have captured my feelings whenever I watch a flower being plucked from its rightful home. We love flowers but not content with admiring them in their wild habitats, we must tame them and bring them along with us for our delight. Same goes for pets methinks! :) R
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Hi Tony
Yes, indeed. You have captured my feelings whenever I watch a flower being plucked from its rightful home. We love flowers but not content with admiring them in their wild habitats, we must tame them and bring them along with us for our delight. Same goes for pets methinks! :) R
Comment Written 07-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Many thanks, Raoul, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Tony,
I truly enjoy your mastery of the sonnet.
This sonnet is just as it is meant to be-perfect.
The poetry flows with a smooth cadence throughout, the meaning is clear,
and there is meaning in every word.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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Hi Tony,
I truly enjoy your mastery of the sonnet.
This sonnet is just as it is meant to be-perfect.
The poetry flows with a smooth cadence throughout, the meaning is clear,
and there is meaning in every word.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 07-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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Very many thanks, Shirley, for your kind words and for the six stars. Much appreciated. Delighted, too, that we are now mutual fans! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, what a cool analogy. Cut flowers and love all mixed together, and I confess I laughed at the poem when I started out:
What murders we commit with secateurs - hahhahaha (it's funny)
to (decapitate) captivate our objects of desire. (heheeheheh)
There was just something comical about seeing something I do all the time and never think about, in a different light. You do know that murderous image is now with me for the rest of my life, and I'll never enjoy cut flowers again??? LOL
A really different sonnet, I enjoyed it very much and think it is very original with great imagery throughout.
Thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Hello, what a cool analogy. Cut flowers and love all mixed together, and I confess I laughed at the poem when I started out:
What murders we commit with secateurs - hahhahaha (it's funny)
to (decapitate) captivate our objects of desire. (heheeheheh)
There was just something comical about seeing something I do all the time and never think about, in a different light. You do know that murderous image is now with me for the rest of my life, and I'll never enjoy cut flowers again??? LOL
A really different sonnet, I enjoyed it very much and think it is very original with great imagery throughout.
Thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Many thanks, Ana, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Hi, Tony, you make me feel so guilty because I always think of that when I've got cut flowers. Shakespearean sonnets are my favourite of all and this one is lovely, too. Only you could write a Shakespearean sonnet about a bouquet and do such a grand job. I liked the sentiment that nature meant the plant to grow to seed and then regenerate. Best wishes, Giddy
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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Hi, Tony, you make me feel so guilty because I always think of that when I've got cut flowers. Shakespearean sonnets are my favourite of all and this one is lovely, too. Only you could write a Shakespearean sonnet about a bouquet and do such a grand job. I liked the sentiment that nature meant the plant to grow to seed and then regenerate. Best wishes, Giddy
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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Very many thanks, Giddy, for your kind words and for the six stars. As much as I like flowers around the house, they wither so quickly - and always look better in the garden. Much appreciated.
Comment from country ranch writer
Catch 22 you can't have it both ways. If you cut a flower it can no longer bloom! It must stay whole in order to reproduce and continue with its cycle of life!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Catch 22 you can't have it both ways. If you cut a flower it can no longer bloom! It must stay whole in order to reproduce and continue with its cycle of life!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Many thanks, CRW, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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Smiles
Comment from Air Spirit
Your poem resonates with me... I always am torn when I cut flowers to capture their essence, but in so doing, I contribute to its unwise demise... their essence and beauty is impossible to jail or confine -- but it is a life sentence when we clip their proverbial 'wings' and sentence it to 'house arrest.' Being such a nature lover, I cry at the abuse and misuse of Mother Earth and all of her 'children' -- trees, flowers, fields of long grasses.... it doesn't matter, for all that the 'Mother' has to offer captivates me... so I appreciate your sensitivity and appreciation of same... You say it perfectly in "...If angels' wings are clipped, they cease to fly..." and "...for nature's precious cycle is destroyed
when youth alone is plucked, to sate our greed..." these words personify and reflect your innate respect and appreciation of the beauty earth offers us... and she is deserving of our most respectful and loving care... Exceptional!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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Your poem resonates with me... I always am torn when I cut flowers to capture their essence, but in so doing, I contribute to its unwise demise... their essence and beauty is impossible to jail or confine -- but it is a life sentence when we clip their proverbial 'wings' and sentence it to 'house arrest.' Being such a nature lover, I cry at the abuse and misuse of Mother Earth and all of her 'children' -- trees, flowers, fields of long grasses.... it doesn't matter, for all that the 'Mother' has to offer captivates me... so I appreciate your sensitivity and appreciation of same... You say it perfectly in "...If angels' wings are clipped, they cease to fly..." and "...for nature's precious cycle is destroyed
when youth alone is plucked, to sate our greed..." these words personify and reflect your innate respect and appreciation of the beauty earth offers us... and she is deserving of our most respectful and loving care... Exceptional!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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Very many thanks for this fine review and comments. Much appreciated, as are the six stars. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rama devi
What murders we commit with secateurs
to captivate our objects of desire.
What a marvelous opening! Superb personification. Superb phonetics in phrasing.
Excellent flow, rhyming, imagery and message. Relevant and timely.
SPECIFIC NOTES:
Suggestion:
When blooms are cut(,) an inner death occurs;
Outstanding rhymes in this stanza, as well as alliteraiton of F and C and consonance of L and S:
If angels' wings are clipped, they cease to fly;
our flowers, too, will wilt and colours fade,
when severed from the roots they're nourished by.
That kind of love is just a masquerade.
Outstanding volta stanza with strong message, especially this line:
for nature's precious cycle is destroyed
when youth alone is plucked, to sate our greed.
Potent closing note in the last line of the couplet, but the cliche phrase of 'more to love than meets the eye' weakens the couplet just a bit.
Almost a six. Bravo.
Loved it.
Fine presentation to match the poem and its title.
Superb message!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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What murders we commit with secateurs
to captivate our objects of desire.
What a marvelous opening! Superb personification. Superb phonetics in phrasing.
Excellent flow, rhyming, imagery and message. Relevant and timely.
SPECIFIC NOTES:
Suggestion:
When blooms are cut(,) an inner death occurs;
Outstanding rhymes in this stanza, as well as alliteraiton of F and C and consonance of L and S:
If angels' wings are clipped, they cease to fly;
our flowers, too, will wilt and colours fade,
when severed from the roots they're nourished by.
That kind of love is just a masquerade.
Outstanding volta stanza with strong message, especially this line:
for nature's precious cycle is destroyed
when youth alone is plucked, to sate our greed.
Potent closing note in the last line of the couplet, but the cliche phrase of 'more to love than meets the eye' weakens the couplet just a bit.
Almost a six. Bravo.
Loved it.
Fine presentation to match the poem and its title.
Superb message!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2018
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Many thanks, RD. I'll have to see if I can find a better way of expressing the couplet! All the best, Tony
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