Hidden Monster
He never understood he was a monster7 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the A Monster writing prompt.
Your story within your verse describes the monster all too well.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the A Monster writing prompt.
Your story within your verse describes the monster all too well.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Thank you so much. Writing this lifted my spirits.
Comment from Gloria ....
Hey Judy! Excellent post with a strong opening of the child molester having no idea he was a monster. There's a lot of truth in those words, many, many times folks aren't aware of what they do, and the harm they cause.
Your alternative spelling of innocence works beautifully here to also express purity through the flower, in addition to virginity.
One typo
unresistant to his persuits (pursuits)
Excellent from start to finish and I wish you all good luck in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Hey Judy! Excellent post with a strong opening of the child molester having no idea he was a monster. There's a lot of truth in those words, many, many times folks aren't aware of what they do, and the harm they cause.
Your alternative spelling of innocence works beautifully here to also express purity through the flower, in addition to virginity.
One typo
unresistant to his persuits (pursuits)
Excellent from start to finish and I wish you all good luck in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Unfortunately, I forgot to release it from Preview until after the voting. Oh well live and learn.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is a tragic story that occurs far too often. You hit the nail on the head with your entry in the Monster contest. This is the worse kind of monster. One that walks through the world unseen.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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This is a tragic story that occurs far too often. You hit the nail on the head with your entry in the Monster contest. This is the worse kind of monster. One that walks through the world unseen.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Unfortunately, I forgot to release it from Preview until after the voting. Oh well live and learn.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Very interesting poem. I was totally engaged with every word. Sickeningly, your poem is probably true. These monsters probably do rationalize that they are normal. I believe you do a great job of capturing the mindset of those demented men.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Very interesting poem. I was totally engaged with every word. Sickeningly, your poem is probably true. These monsters probably do rationalize that they are normal. I believe you do a great job of capturing the mindset of those demented men.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Unfortunately, I forgot to release it from Preview until after the voting. Oh well live and learn.
Comment from LaFrance
You created a very Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde symbolic poem. I knew from the title and graphic your poem was going to be hardline. Each linear line descripted the hidden monster's agenda. Your was a very strong and powerful poem, very well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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You created a very Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde symbolic poem. I knew from the title and graphic your poem was going to be hardline. Each linear line descripted the hidden monster's agenda. Your was a very strong and powerful poem, very well done.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Unfortunately, I forgot to release it from Preview until after the voting. Oh well live and learn.
Comment from kahpot
An excellent read and poem on a very true and too often sadness for the very young especially when they are made feel it is or was all their doing, very well written, and good luck in your competition****kahpot
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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An excellent read and poem on a very true and too often sadness for the very young especially when they are made feel it is or was all their doing, very well written, and good luck in your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018
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Unfortunately, I forgot to release it from Preview until after the voting. Oh well live and learn.
Comment from JC Viper
What a powerful poem. But very true some monsters don't realize they are monsters. They do make the victim feel they are to blame even tho they are not.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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What a powerful poem. But very true some monsters don't realize they are monsters. They do make the victim feel they are to blame even tho they are not.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2018
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Thank you, So sad but true these inncocents who have to face the world sometimes believing they are the bad ones. I appreciate your words.
