Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about what we see in the mirror. Sometimes it is better to see ourselves in fragments instead of the whole image to only look at the pieces we like more about ourselves.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018

Hi Sandra, Thanks for you review and yes at times fragments is all we see, A bit of a challenge to do this one but I enjoyed writing it Cheers Christine

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, Chrissy, :)

Good poem, and great picture that illustrates it. I wish you all the luck in the competition.

Have a great weekend. :)

Nome :)

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018

Hi Nome, Thank for looking in at my shattered image, got a couple of votes so that is OK fun to enter. Cheers Christine

Comment from B. Bates

Excellent

This is a very impressive aspect on shattered vanity and self esteem. I'm assuming the character literally shattered a mirror but it's reflecting something else that has been shattered inside. If the goal is to express wounded pride, then well done.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018

Hi B bates, Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem for this contest, maybe one has to look within to see what is missing. Purely a poem I am happy within and love to challenge myself by writing different things Cheers Christine

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with the contest prompt. Good job with the rhymes & smooth flow of lines as well as pairing your poem with a super picture. Your message comes through loud & clear--be yourself & if you are not then try to find the reason & change. Best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Hi Jan Thank you exactly I try to always be myself frankly what you see is what you get good bad or ugly LOL so this was written purely for the contest although I do like makeup and hair dye Ha Ha Cheers

reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Hi Jan Thank you exactly I try to always be myself frankly what you see is what you get good bad or ugly LOL so this was written purely for the contest although I do like makeup and hair dye Ha Ha Cheers

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

nicely done on the mirror contest, I don't like looking in the mirror or having my picture taken, something creepy about both. good rhyming and meter.Good luck and have a wonderful day

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Hi William Thank you for your review I am pleased to jave your comments and rating No I have a few family members woh hate their picture taken not sure why. Cheers

Comment from JDRBAR

Good

lay broken pieces at my feet,
poetic license aside, I feel it would read better by inserting "in" after lay

Are you reflecting on yourself, or pleading with a lost love to take another look at your inner beauty? It's unclear.

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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Hi JDRBAR, Thank you, fo reading my poem and no a reflection of one who finally realizes that creating an outer self with makeup and vanity does not bring true inner happines. Cheers

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What a wonderful poem about images, mirrors and what they portray and cannot hide, an excellent entry, very well done and good luck in your competition****kahpot

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Hi kahpot, Many thanks for reading my poem and for ypur good luck wishes Cheers to you

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Dear Anonymous Poet;

A very interesting take on this challenge. You speak to so many kinds of vanity within the lines of your poem. Well done and I wish you luck in the contest,


~patty~

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

Hi Patty, Thanks very much for your review and yes vanity has many forms and I am pleased to have your comments and luck wishes Cheers

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hi, nice take for this mirror poetry idea, I think it's going to prompt some really reflective imagery and ideas. I like it, and I like yours, lots of great images, especially fresh-faced/no makeup, idea, you don't see that reference in poetry a lot. Great soul searching and I saw no errors. I liked it just as it is, thanks, it's very good, Ana.

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Hi Ana, thank you for your review and wec wait and see how this one goes in the polls Win lose or draw I just love the challenge of thinking up a poem Cheers

Comment from ggdad

Exceptional

Beautiful; I love it. She finds herself, finally, after false starts and perhaps, false friends. (The picture suggests "she" rather than "he".) This is not a criticism, just a suggestion. The line "I may see what I have lost," could be changed to "I may see just what I have lost," to keep the syllable count the same throughout. Outstanding!

 Comment Written 31-May-2018

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reply by the author on 31-May-2018

Hi ggdad, Oh wow Thank you so much for your wonderful review I am glad that I wrote this, this morning and also for your suggestion .I have gone with with 'will I then see what I have lost, 8 syllables so Cheers for picking that line up and I am stoked you didnt take off a star and gave me an outstanding review Many Thanks again

reply by ggdad on 31-May-2018

Great! Glad you are happy with the review. Keep it up.

reply by ggdad on 02-Jun-2018

I really loved it.