Comment from aanneee

Excellent

I have to admit I chuckled over this one, couldn't help it. The whole presentation absolutely perfect for the Perfect Husband...of course I did feel a little bit sorry for him. How convenient he has no family, that was a very good line...I'm still chuckling and I wish you luck in the Laughter writing prompt contest...Dinah

 Comment Written 29-May-2018

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reply by the author on 30-May-2018

I am so glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing. Love Jen,

Comment from bob cullen

Excellent

This sure fills the writing prompt requirement. It did produce laughter. And I would bet the old guy's smiling too. The rhyme was good and the images of this relationship are playing havoc with my mind. A fun poem

 Comment Written 29-May-2018

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reply by the author on 29-May-2018

Thanks. So pleazed you enjoyed it. Jen

Comment from Nanny 6

Good

Definitely go me at the end of the poem. Lol... And it was funny that after two years, the girl said it was going to last...it's just the beginning, sounds like the end will be soon, cuz he's 93. haha.

 Comment Written 28-May-2018

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reply by the author on 28-May-2018

Many thanks for your comments, much appreciated.

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Cheers, contestants;
-Just to question an issue unwanted your lines:
"We've been married now for two years and they said it wont'(WOULDN'T) {last} long"
Omit the word lasting the line and it should work out. That's only if you agree.
I'm not telling you anything I just see an opening here that grammar wise it could be correct?
-Good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one and your poem was really good.
Alex

 Comment Written 28-May-2018

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reply by the author on 28-May-2018

Thank you for your help Alex. I have ammended it.

reply by krys123 on 28-May-2018

I thought it may have been right but I wasn't sure. Very well and good luck I see you doing well.
Alex

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I guess two years is like forever if you happen to be in your nineties when you get married. Very cute poem. Not a word of it is true except the third and fourth lines.Oh, maybe she does take good care of him. I might give her that. I like your tongue in cheek style. And you did it all in rhyme. Good job.

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 28-May-2018

Many thanks for your comments.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear Mystery Poet,

This is a really fun poem on a situation that happens pretty frequently in this world I imagine. She says she's taking care of him... hope so!!

Notes, if I may:
1.) mansion and driving big, flash(y) cars

2.) they said it won(')t last long

Fun!! Good luck!

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 28-May-2018

Many thanks for your comments

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Dear Anonymous Poet;

Yes, two years of marriage when the groom was ninety-one on the wedding day is quite an accomplishment. I can only imagine how much she 'didn't' marry him for the inheritance.

Good luck to you in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 28-May-2018

Many thanks for your comments.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Yes this Laughter poem certainly raises a good hearty chuckle - the good life to be lived while taking care of this nonagenarian ...and a great visual to accompany

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Many thanks for the great review

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ha ha ha ...but I knew a woman who was sixteen when she married a civil war veteran in his seventies...but she said he was good to her.
Yikes yikes yikes
I would be afraid he'd cark it any minute....no ...wait....
God bless

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Many thanks for your review. Much appreciated.