Imprisoned
Shakespearean sonnet contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh wow! A sonnet that fits so perfectly my ideal -- your beautiful poem has made my night. XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Oh wow! A sonnet that fits so perfectly my ideal -- your beautiful poem has made my night. XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Dawn, thank you for the superb review and the six. I am so glad my sonnet resonated with you.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Thank you Eternal Muse
for posting your entry for Shakespearean Sonnet contest.
I enjoyed how you follow the proper format to express your thoughts into words.
EX. The seed of love, when planted in your heart,
will grow by leaps and bounds until mature.
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you Eternal Muse
for posting your entry for Shakespearean Sonnet contest.
I enjoyed how you follow the proper format to express your thoughts into words.
EX. The seed of love, when planted in your heart,
will grow by leaps and bounds until mature.
Gert
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Gert. I am so glad you liked this sonnet.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This deserves six-stars that I do not have. What a wonderful analysis of how love clamps on to you and will not let go. It's great when reciprocated but not when unrequited. Fantastic presentation and a great entry for the contest. You should win.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This deserves six-stars that I do not have. What a wonderful analysis of how love clamps on to you and will not let go. It's great when reciprocated but not when unrequited. Fantastic presentation and a great entry for the contest. You should win.
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from Carlos' girl
That is love. And would we have it any other way?!?
Great sonnet, so gripping word for word. The sky isn't always blue, but we may yet be looking at the stars...
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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That is love. And would we have it any other way?!?
Great sonnet, so gripping word for word. The sky isn't always blue, but we may yet be looking at the stars...
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the exceptional review and the honor of six stars. I am delighted that you liked my sonnet.
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The 6 stars were well deserved
Comment from Frank Colabella
I like this perspective on love, how you compared it to an unstoppable force that grows within you. I've always enjoyed structured poems like sonnets, and you expressed the form perfectly. The three quatrains build up the emotion, and the couplet solidifies the effect. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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I like this perspective on love, how you compared it to an unstoppable force that grows within you. I've always enjoyed structured poems like sonnets, and you expressed the form perfectly. The three quatrains build up the emotion, and the couplet solidifies the effect. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the great review. A sonnet is my favorite form. You excel in it yourself, judging by the one I recently read. I am glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from lyenochka
Perfectly structured and metered sonnet! And of course, what better theme than love to write a sonnet about? I smiled that you said that love "it eats your brain!" It does make humans do silly things.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Perfectly structured and metered sonnet! And of course, what better theme than love to write a sonnet about? I smiled that you said that love "it eats your brain!" It does make humans do silly things.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review. I am delighted that you enjoyed my sonnet.
Comment from Alchera
A perfect written Shakespearean sonnet throughout its three four lined rhymed stanzas and ending couplet. Its thematic subject about love strikes the poetess's heart once more as Cupid' s suffering darts of no return obliges her to damn Freud and his truth! Yes! The desire of true love is like exploding lava from Mt. Vesuvius which never ends destroying and devasting the loving forged-mind! Great work!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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A perfect written Shakespearean sonnet throughout its three four lined rhymed stanzas and ending couplet. Its thematic subject about love strikes the poetess's heart once more as Cupid' s suffering darts of no return obliges her to damn Freud and his truth! Yes! The desire of true love is like exploding lava from Mt. Vesuvius which never ends destroying and devasting the loving forged-mind! Great work!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for the great review.
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You are Always welcomed and blessings from Italy. Tony
Comment from Treischel
A well crafted romance poem written in a sublime Shakespearean Sonnet format. Your iambic pentameter was flawless. Rhyme choices were well considered. Liked the "seeds of love" metophor. A solid volta on line 9. Just a touch of the Elizabethan in "Alas." All in all, well done.
I wrote a book on sonnets, called Take Flight: The Sonnets, with 170 sonnets in 74 variations on the form. So I like Sonnets, and yours is good.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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A well crafted romance poem written in a sublime Shakespearean Sonnet format. Your iambic pentameter was flawless. Rhyme choices were well considered. Liked the "seeds of love" metophor. A solid volta on line 9. Just a touch of the Elizabethan in "Alas." All in all, well done.
I wrote a book on sonnets, called Take Flight: The Sonnets, with 170 sonnets in 74 variations on the form. So I like Sonnets, and yours is good.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much! I just returned to FanStory after being away for nearly 3 years. I appreciate your great review. A sonnet is my favorite form and I am glad you enjoyed it.
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Welcome back. I perused your portfolio and see you have a breath of talent. I saW YOUR Sonnet collection, Limericks, even a Crown of Heroic Sonnets. Looking forward for anything new you offer.
Comment from karenina
I know you eat, drink and breathe in sonnet form and so I am not surprised at all that the form is perfect in every way I can see....the photo, also is just perfect for your theme. I might have chosen a few different phrases here and there-for example instead of:
"cemented in your mind; and there's no cure."
I might have used the more grammatically correct :
"cemented in your mind without a cure"...
But I appreciate that poetic license allows for interplay of words we might not ordinarily see.
Certainly a five star effort! When do you ever offer less!?
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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I know you eat, drink and breathe in sonnet form and so I am not surprised at all that the form is perfect in every way I can see....the photo, also is just perfect for your theme. I might have chosen a few different phrases here and there-for example instead of:
"cemented in your mind; and there's no cure."
I might have used the more grammatically correct :
"cemented in your mind without a cure"...
But I appreciate that poetic license allows for interplay of words we might not ordinarily see.
Certainly a five star effort! When do you ever offer less!?
Karenina
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thanks, Karenina
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Anytime!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You fight, you try to quash it, by [but] in vain -
One small nit there.
Well done my friend. It looks like a sonnet reads like a sonnet. Sounds like a sonnet. You followed the rules, well done. Good Luck. Nancy
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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You fight, you try to quash it, by [but] in vain -
One small nit there.
Well done my friend. It looks like a sonnet reads like a sonnet. Sounds like a sonnet. You followed the rules, well done. Good Luck. Nancy
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you for the great review. I fixed it.
