Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Good humor displayed in this well crafted story that also contains a delightfully happy ending. Why is passing gas so funny? Only humans can answer that one. Something to do with the twisted psyche of man, no doubt.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018

I have two very twisted brothers who view it as a national pass time. More play on words. =} Thank you for the review and stars. Have good weekend. Rox

Comment from Thesis

Excellent

You continued the humor in the second part, which seemed quite natural. I liked the verbal banter and the fact that finally the situation played out without anyone being suffocated. Good story, great ending.

 Comment Written 28-May-2018

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reply by the author on 28-May-2018

Thanks so much =}

Comment from aanneee

Excellent

I do so love a happy ending and I thank you for it...just a delightfully funny story, except that was not known until the end of this second part and that made it all the more special. Thank you so much for this bit of fun...Dinah

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 28-May-2018

Thank you Dinah

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

Good conclusion to this story, Roxanna. I enjoyed it! I found a lot of run-on/ comma splices in your work. I noted an example of this below.

By now, things were feeling like hot lava and I gripped the side of the seat to keep from screaming, my eyes watered.--You have three complete sentences. The first ends with lava. Place a comma before your conjunction and(that is a run on sentence). Your second sentence ends with screaming. The comma place between two sentences is a comma splice. Either place a period or semi-colon after screaming and delete the comma.

I hope you find this helpful.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thank you so much for the review and helps. I am very bad at the grammar thing it seems. =} I get so confused as to comma or not to comma. Thanks so much again.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Rox;
This story is so sweet and incredibly funny. You would have to know how farts are viewed in my family to understand. Let's put it this way, my daughter put a cup in the Christmas White Elephant exchange that read. 'I didn't fart; that was my a$$ blowing you a kiss!'

There are many more embarrassing stories, mostly about me, that I may, or may not, share at another time.

The issues I outlined in my review of the first part of the story still show up, but I think if you study grammar and style rules, you will overcome them.

~patty~

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thank you for the great review. I know I drive everyone crazy with my grammar and tenses. I never used to have so much trouble. ={ My brain is dissolving I think. Thanks so much for all the helps. =}

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Hi Roxanna,
A very funny tale to tell although I'm sure not for the lady at the time.
I really liked the smooth transition from chapter one and the consistency of the story.
I have to admit I had a giggle too but then I crossed my fingers behind my back
and whispered 'sorry.' Does that count?

 Comment Written 27-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thank you for the great review and stars. =} Rox

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ha ha ha ah...a wonderful guy with a weak sense of smell...perfect line...perfect guy
I liked this very much and chortled, then laughed out loud
Well penned funny
God bless

 Comment Written 26-May-2018

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reply by the author on 27-May-2018

Thanks so much. Rox =}

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Congratulations Rox. I think you were very brave just to tell, I'm wondering if you didn't get a mild case of food poisoning, I had something something similar to yours many years, can't remember what I ate, but had a similar reaction to yours, and the smell. But that was the only time, thanks for the confession, perhaps your now husband had a death wish, heh heh, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 26-May-2018

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reply by the author on 26-May-2018

Hi Roy, this was fiction. I am most grateful to say this had never happened to me and I hope with the grace of the Lord it never does. =} Thanks for the stars. Rox

reply by royowen on 27-May-2018

Excellent job, you had me fooled Rox. Heh heh.

Comment from patcelaw

Exceptional

Rox, this is a side splitter of a story, I laughed so hard I almost got tears in my eyes, which I do when I laugh hard.

I didn't want to be responsible (for) a death.
He laughed. "I have(n't) laughed this hard in years."
massaged my ankle, which made i(f)t feel surprisingly better
Patricia

 Comment Written 26-May-2018

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reply by the author on 26-May-2018

I'm so glad you found it funny. Not all think it so. =} Thanks for the great review and the helps. Rox

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Yep, the guy was a keeper. I can remember my brother and his friends letting farts and lighting them up with a lighter and thinking it was funny. Men are weird. This was a funny story and I can imagine how humiliated she was. All's well that ends well. Good job dear. Nancy

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 Comment Written 26-May-2018

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reply by the author on 26-May-2018

Thank you Nancy. My brother counting farting as a national pass time. ={ It wasn't always so funny. Thanks again. Rox