I Was Scared
The first time meeting someone can be scary.5 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Beck;
Great use of the allotted word count to build the two characters in the story. We know the little girl was raised by straight-laced women who didn't believe in lipstick or the life of an old maid.
The woman described came to life for me. I could see her in my mind.
Great job and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
Hi, Beck;
Great use of the allotted word count to build the two characters in the story. We know the little girl was raised by straight-laced women who didn't believe in lipstick or the life of an old maid.
The woman described came to life for me. I could see her in my mind.
Great job and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 25-May-2018
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
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Thanks as always, Patty.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Great work with the dialect which adds to some of the humor. I especially like the line:"she was probably goin' straight down to you-know-where" I love stories with the perspective of a child. You have captured the who picture here in 100 words. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
Great work with the dialect which adds to some of the humor. I especially like the line:"she was probably goin' straight down to you-know-where" I love stories with the perspective of a child. You have captured the who picture here in 100 words. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 25-May-2018
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
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Thank you, Liz. I think I have an overly developed child. Grin.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
How cute, a little girl sizing up her teacher. First impressions don't look too promising, but she'll come to like the teacher, who will not be so scary in a few weeks. :)
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
How cute, a little girl sizing up her teacher. First impressions don't look too promising, but she'll come to like the teacher, who will not be so scary in a few weeks. :)
Comment Written 24-May-2018
reply by the author on 25-May-2018
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Thank you for the comments and stars. I appreciate them both.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Beck, this is a very good 100-word flash fiction for the contest and best of luck with this entry. I liked the descriptions of Grammy, you created her to be quite a character. I found this funny and entertaining and have no suggestions for improvement and saw no errors.
Thanks for sharing your writing, which I would recommend to other readers for review, Ana.
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
Hello Beck, this is a very good 100-word flash fiction for the contest and best of luck with this entry. I liked the descriptions of Grammy, you created her to be quite a character. I found this funny and entertaining and have no suggestions for improvement and saw no errors.
Thanks for sharing your writing, which I would recommend to other readers for review, Ana.
Comment Written 24-May-2018
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
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Thanks as always for your encouragement.
Comment from meeshu
very good little story Beck. you have really put the reader inside the mind of a little child, with all of the trepidations........good work........meeshu
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
very good little story Beck. you have really put the reader inside the mind of a little child, with all of the trepidations........good work........meeshu
Comment Written 24-May-2018
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
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Thank you very much, meeshu, for your comments and stars. I appreciate them.