Lily Pond
Life on a lily pond17 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
The man made, decorative ponds many construct to adorn gardens in the landscaping of their homes cannot hold a candle to ponds found in nature.
A lily pad pond is like an alien world all its own. Lots of activity underway and a constant struggle for survival between amphibian and insect.
Good aabb rhyme scheme featuring some inventive slant rhyme pairings as well.
I enjoyed the read, Pam.
~Dean
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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The man made, decorative ponds many construct to adorn gardens in the landscaping of their homes cannot hold a candle to ponds found in nature.
A lily pad pond is like an alien world all its own. Lots of activity underway and a constant struggle for survival between amphibian and insect.
Good aabb rhyme scheme featuring some inventive slant rhyme pairings as well.
I enjoyed the read, Pam.
~Dean
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Hi Dean. Love your frog. Thank you for your delightful review and five star rating
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My pleasure, Pam.
Comment from William Ross
Nice, written in a sonnet style, about life on a lily pond and dragon flies and other life and action in the pond. Good rhyming and meter, Thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Nice, written in a sonnet style, about life on a lily pond and dragon flies and other life and action in the pond. Good rhyming and meter, Thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you William for your wonderful review and excellent rating
Comment from kiwijenny
Beautiful...I love the unusual rhyme choices...Ducks ...flux
Young.........tongue....suspect ........correct
Well penned ..at first glance a Lily pond is serene...but you show the busy lively eco bursting scene
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Beautiful...I love the unusual rhyme choices...Ducks ...flux
Young.........tongue....suspect ........correct
Well penned ..at first glance a Lily pond is serene...but you show the busy lively eco bursting scene
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you kiwijenny. I researched lily ponds for the painting I did which accompanies my poem. Lots of mosquitos for the dragonfly heroes. Hey! I?m a poet LOL. Thank you for your wonderful review and five star rating
Comment from apky
This is the evocation of spring time par excellence, Pam.
Your chose a current theme and brought it to the senses using profound words that inspire and invoke the reader. Yours powerful descriptions put the reader right in the centre of each single scene, each single being.
Excellent!
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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This is the evocation of spring time par excellence, Pam.
Your chose a current theme and brought it to the senses using profound words that inspire and invoke the reader. Yours powerful descriptions put the reader right in the centre of each single scene, each single being.
Excellent!
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you apky for your wonderful review and five star rating
Comment from meeshu
good one Pam. who else could write a sonnet about frogs and nail it. Shakespeare eat your heart out. nice work.......meeshu
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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good one Pam. who else could write a sonnet about frogs and nail it. Shakespeare eat your heart out. nice work.......meeshu
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you meeshu for your delightful review and five star rating I did not know it was a sonnet
Comment from karenina
Your theme is clever, your inspiration is clear, your descriptions are witty...
It feels like springtime and I'm ready as ever to enjoy these sights and sounds....especially the frog with red eyes ! Hope she finds food for her young!
I want to ensure I hear "ribbits" all summer long too! Delightful!
Karenina
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reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Your theme is clever, your inspiration is clear, your descriptions are witty...
It feels like springtime and I'm ready as ever to enjoy these sights and sounds....especially the frog with red eyes ! Hope she finds food for her young!
I want to ensure I hear "ribbits" all summer long too! Delightful!
Karenina
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Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you karenina for your suggestion. I will see what I can do. Thank you for your thoughtful review and excellent rating
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Really, sometimes I am guilty as charged at trying to be too helpful. (gulp)
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You helped me to improve it. I am happy that you mentioned it. It is now
A frog with red eyes needs food for young
Large insects will fall to long sticky tongue
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Yippee! Honest critique should never be personal and should always at least TRY to be helpful! I'm going to go change my review.....
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Change it to what? You already gave me five stars, I think
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I changed the comment...no need for anyone to know your rhyme wasn't always perfection! :)
Comment from Gloria ....
I used to keep koi in my pond and then found the whole job of keeping it clean tedious. I must admit I do enjoy watching them in public ponds though. A lovely verse Pam. Those frogs are fun. :)
Gloria
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reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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I used to keep koi in my pond and then found the whole job of keeping it clean tedious. I must admit I do enjoy watching them in public ponds though. A lovely verse Pam. Those frogs are fun. :)
Gloria
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Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you Gloria for your wonderful review and five star rating
