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He Chose Her

Sometimes a past does more than haunt the groom.

7 total reviews 
Comment from aanneee
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This is very short, as required and to the point, it really is a full story in so few words and cleverly stated and this here "She eased the pistol from her purse." unfortunately, makes for a great ending...thanks for the read and good luck with this one...Dinah

 Comment Written 23-May-2018

reply by the author on 23-May-2018
    Thank you so much, Dinah. I appreciate the review and stars.
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Beck;

Ominous use of the few words for this story. I can only imagine what will happen. Will it be as they are coming down the aisle or at the reception? The 'other' woman story isn't usually told in this short Dribble Flash Fiction tale, but you did a great job.

Good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 22-May-2018

reply by the author on 22-May-2018
    Patty, thank you so much for the encouragement and the lovely 6-stars. I appreciate both more than you can know!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Congratulations on writing a novel in so few words! The whole story comes out as clear as day, money wins almost every time. This is a wonderful dribble fiction story for the contest. Now, will she shoot? Yes, I thought so. LOL Good luck! :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 22-May-2018

reply by the author on 22-May-2018
    Thanks, Sandra! I'm glad you liked it. There are so many ways to end this, isn't there. Grin.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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Whoever knew that those 5 words could mean so much. You've done it again. You've written a whole story with setting, and character and a plot created by the latter. I caught a lot of hissing in your s's alliteration. Perfect for the seething, and the sneaky snake. Very clever. The last sentence is the best. Well written

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

reply by the author on 22-May-2018
    Very nice comments. You always manage to give thoughtful reviews.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
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Hello, well this flash fiction leaves a lot to the imagination at the end, but I'd put my money on her pulling the trigger, LOL. I noticed no errors and it held my attention throughout. Nothing to fix and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

reply by the author on 22-May-2018
    Thank you so much for your comments and stars. Both are appreciated.
Comment from Breanna Clark
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I want to know if she shoots the groom? The bride? Herself? And that's exactly what your crime fiction story is supposed to do; leave the reader wanting more. And you managed to do so in 50 words. I'm impressed. Very well done.

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

reply by the author on 21-May-2018
    That you very much for your encouragement and six-star rating. Both are very much appreciated!
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

Nice work with this little one. You managed to get some strong emotion into it and the last line sells it.

Good job
GMG

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

reply by the author on 21-May-2018
    Hee hee. Thanks, my friend.