Homeless
A homeless man on a bench in free verse21 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Pam, I always wonder what they were doing before they got to this point in their lives...what caused them to fall apart inside???...I have alcoholics in my family...but it always seemed like something tragic happened...my brother the war...my sister...raped...it's so sad...your story is very well told...and your picture says it all...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
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Hi Pam, I always wonder what they were doing before they got to this point in their lives...what caused them to fall apart inside???...I have alcoholics in my family...but it always seemed like something tragic happened...my brother the war...my sister...raped...it's so sad...your story is very well told...and your picture says it all...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
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Wow. Your family has real tradegy. Thank goodness nobody in my family has a problem with addiction. One sister is a highly functioning alcoholic. One brother has been sober over thirty years. Thank you for your lovely review and excellent rating
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Hi Pam...my sister has been sober about 28 years the last I heard...she is goes to AA...that is wonderful about your brother...you are so very welcome...love xxoo
Comment from Old Soldier
I liked this until the end. I thought you would remind us of how unfortunate some people are due to no intended fault of their own; lose of job death of spouse. We put them all in one group homeless = drugs and alcohol. Thanks sharing and keep writing
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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I liked this until the end. I thought you would remind us of how unfortunate some people are due to no intended fault of their own; lose of job death of spouse. We put them all in one group homeless = drugs and alcohol. Thanks sharing and keep writing
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you Old Soldier for your thoughtful review and excellent rating I was trying to portray the tragic hopelessness of alcohol addiction.
Comment from hifein
so much homelessness -- often alcohol and/mental illness induced -- but also affecting scores of families. the homeless, the invisible. you have noticed and written this poignant poetic description.
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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so much homelessness -- often alcohol and/mental illness induced -- but also affecting scores of families. the homeless, the invisible. you have noticed and written this poignant poetic description.
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you hifein for your lovely review and five star rating
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a raw, unapologetic and very real portrayal of a man who has, quite literally, hit rock bottom.
The saddest part about this is that we, as one of the wealthiest nations in the world, often overlook people like this as if they're not even there.
Too busy, too self-important and too blind to care.
Sad but true, nonetheless.
Nice writing, Pam.
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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This is a raw, unapologetic and very real portrayal of a man who has, quite literally, hit rock bottom.
The saddest part about this is that we, as one of the wealthiest nations in the world, often overlook people like this as if they're not even there.
Too busy, too self-important and too blind to care.
Sad but true, nonetheless.
Nice writing, Pam.
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you Dean for your lovely review and five star rating
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You're welcome.
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent social commentary, Pam. Alcoholism is a dreadful disease and can certainly land those afflicted on homeless street.
A few good turns of phrases in your poem, I quite enjoyed the wind kidnapping the hat, but I'm sure this poor man wasn't too thrilled.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Excellent social commentary, Pam. Alcoholism is a dreadful disease and can certainly land those afflicted on homeless street.
A few good turns of phrases in your poem, I quite enjoyed the wind kidnapping the hat, but I'm sure this poor man wasn't too thrilled.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thank you Gloria for your lovely review and five star rating
Comment from karenina
OH. Well. I'm not sure how I feel about this poem. It is well written and certainly deserving of five stars in writing...but the theme? I am sure some of those the Salvation Army helps are winos (a pejorative term I don't care for)---but I would argue the greater percentage are not. That, however is not the point. You may not have meant to present it this way, but there is an undertone of more judgement and less compassion than I would be comfortable with. The final two lines drum that home. Every poet has their right to write.... And you are entitled, of course, to your opinion.
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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OH. Well. I'm not sure how I feel about this poem. It is well written and certainly deserving of five stars in writing...but the theme? I am sure some of those the Salvation Army helps are winos (a pejorative term I don't care for)---but I would argue the greater percentage are not. That, however is not the point. You may not have meant to present it this way, but there is an undertone of more judgement and less compassion than I would be comfortable with. The final two lines drum that home. Every poet has their right to write.... And you are entitled, of course, to your opinion.
Karenina
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you karenina for your heartfelt review and five star rating. Maybe I should just call it homeless and keep the last part?
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I think you should be honest to your poetic voice. If this is what you felt, leave it. I can deal with my differing opinion! (smile)
Comment from kiwijenny
Aw so so sad.
Great way you describe him,,,red pool soaks the top of his boots.
His hat used to count quarters,,
Last lines tell it all
He is thinking about scoring another bottle of wine
God bless
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Aw so so sad.
Great way you describe him,,,red pool soaks the top of his boots.
His hat used to count quarters,,
Last lines tell it all
He is thinking about scoring another bottle of wine
God bless
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you kiwijenny for your lovely review and excellent rating
Comment from Boogienights
This poem makes me sad because I hate seeing anyone in pain,or unable to break an addiction that is slowly ruining their life. I have taught my children the importance of not judging and trying to help whenever we can, but sometimes it's hard to know what to do. Your picture drives the point home. Thanks for sharing this and for the notes.
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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This poem makes me sad because I hate seeing anyone in pain,or unable to break an addiction that is slowly ruining their life. I have taught my children the importance of not judging and trying to help whenever we can, but sometimes it's hard to know what to do. Your picture drives the point home. Thanks for sharing this and for the notes.
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Hi not sure why it did not save my reply from before. But Thank you for your wonderful review and five star rating
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem about the sadness of so many people that seem to have not other choice than living on the streets and their only wish is another bottle of wine to keep them going.
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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A very well-written free verse poem about the sadness of so many people that seem to have not other choice than living on the streets and their only wish is another bottle of wine to keep them going.
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you Sandra for your wonderful review and five star rating
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Pamusart
Your free verse along with sorrow and making me stop to feel compassion for these homeless folks. I like how you drew my attention of how this man ended up being a wino
Gert
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Hello Pamusart
Your free verse along with sorrow and making me stop to feel compassion for these homeless folks. I like how you drew my attention of how this man ended up being a wino
Gert
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you Gert for your wonderful review and excellent rating
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You are welcome
Gert
