Stirring Winds
Winds blowing through life6 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent imagery as you use the different types of winds to represent various stages of life. It looks like a great introduction to the anthology as is suggest more to come on the same subject.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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Excellent imagery as you use the different types of winds to represent various stages of life. It looks like a great introduction to the anthology as is suggest more to come on the same subject.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much for your comments and stars. Yes, I have several stories and poems posted on FanStory so far.
Comment from LIJ Red
I enjoy the prompt that refers you to a certain line on a given page in a book as a sentence to use in a story. An excellent poetic "book report", in my opinion.
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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I enjoy the prompt that refers you to a certain line on a given page in a book as a sentence to use in a story. An excellent poetic "book report", in my opinion.
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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The back story. I cast the deciding vote for the book's title. One of the other students took a picture of a Weeping Willow with its long branches blowing. Her camera phone wasn't capable of taking a picture good enough for the cover. By the time I got to the tree, the groundskeeper had trimmed about five feet off the branches. I took the picture anyway. It was good enough. I shared credit for the title and the cover's picture. It was the first book that had accepted something I had written.
Comment from Lulube
As we sit amongst the calm. Our mouth's hanging open, in awe. As our last wisp of breath passes through our lips. My fav. lines - Life`s gales hammered in experience, No better words could set that imagery. and - the drifts of time turn our hair to snow, without buying any dye. yes our bodies tell us that we are getting old, without that, I don't think we would be aware of the years piling up.
Love your metaphors throughout, your used a lot of descriptive types of wind quite creatively. enjoyed this one
lulube
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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As we sit amongst the calm. Our mouth's hanging open, in awe. As our last wisp of breath passes through our lips. My fav. lines - Life`s gales hammered in experience, No better words could set that imagery. and - the drifts of time turn our hair to snow, without buying any dye. yes our bodies tell us that we are getting old, without that, I don't think we would be aware of the years piling up.
Love your metaphors throughout, your used a lot of descriptive types of wind quite creatively. enjoyed this one
lulube
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you Lalube for your very complementary words and nice stars.
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welcome
lulube
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Thank you very much.
Comment from esacony
"A sweet gentle waft of mother's breath, the strong rhythmic beat of her heart, made us seek life with no wisp of death."
The author has drawn back the curtain and exposed his sense of life and nature, with indication his feelings were intensified by the presence of another.
'Steady swift breezes gave us knowledge, we learned our reading writing plus math, primary secondary college."
I interpret swift breezes as life's occurrences which in and of themselves create knowledge by experience. I sense the author's definition of learning was comprised of joy instead of tedium and again a shared experience.
"Labor's gusts paid for our sustenance, Love's zephyrs engendered family, Life's gales hammered in experience."
Finely illustrated definition of alternate phases of existence, subjecting soulmates to the laws of nature, Love and reproduction.
"The drifts of time turned our hair to snow, Our last breath is near - a subtle nudge, it's time for wind stirred stories we know."
How eloquent to consider stories as wind stirred, combining it with last breath described in the beginning as......"A sweet gentle waft of mother's breath."
Great job.
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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"A sweet gentle waft of mother's breath, the strong rhythmic beat of her heart, made us seek life with no wisp of death."
The author has drawn back the curtain and exposed his sense of life and nature, with indication his feelings were intensified by the presence of another.
'Steady swift breezes gave us knowledge, we learned our reading writing plus math, primary secondary college."
I interpret swift breezes as life's occurrences which in and of themselves create knowledge by experience. I sense the author's definition of learning was comprised of joy instead of tedium and again a shared experience.
"Labor's gusts paid for our sustenance, Love's zephyrs engendered family, Life's gales hammered in experience."
Finely illustrated definition of alternate phases of existence, subjecting soulmates to the laws of nature, Love and reproduction.
"The drifts of time turned our hair to snow, Our last breath is near - a subtle nudge, it's time for wind stirred stories we know."
How eloquent to consider stories as wind stirred, combining it with last breath described in the beginning as......"A sweet gentle waft of mother's breath."
Great job.
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Wow, what a nice review. Your interpretation is right on. Thank you very much.
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Wow, what a nice review. Your interpretation is right on. Thank you very much.
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You are very welcome.
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:)
Comment from Cybertron1986
I love the relation of life and nature here. I was caught at, "our hair to snow, Our last breath is near."
This provided a vivid and comparable description of how life starts and ends in the sorta way seasons come and go.
Beautifully done
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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I love the relation of life and nature here. I was caught at, "our hair to snow, Our last breath is near."
This provided a vivid and comparable description of how life starts and ends in the sorta way seasons come and go.
Beautifully done
Comment Written 20-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you very much for your stirring comments and bright stars Cyberton.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Henry, this is very poetic. You elude to life and death very sensitively in this well-written verse. I saw no errors, and this was very telling and had excellent word usage. It's thought-provoking as we tease out the meaning.
Labor's gusts paid for our sustenance
Love's zephyrs engendered family
Life's gales hammered in experience
I'll gladly give it a five-star rating. Lovey writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hello Henry, this is very poetic. You elude to life and death very sensitively in this well-written verse. I saw no errors, and this was very telling and had excellent word usage. It's thought-provoking as we tease out the meaning.
Labor's gusts paid for our sustenance
Love's zephyrs engendered family
Life's gales hammered in experience
I'll gladly give it a five-star rating. Lovey writing, Ana.
Comment Written 20-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Anastasia, I am glad you liked it. Thank you for your comments and rating.
