Never the Same Again!
my try at a minute poem23 total reviews
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS 6******What a nice testament to faith and how we, as a people should practice our beliefs more by trusting and believing in God That He will protect us and see us through our struggles. Very inspirational! WELL DONE. liberty justice
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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SIX STARS 6******What a nice testament to faith and how we, as a people should practice our beliefs more by trusting and believing in God That He will protect us and see us through our struggles. Very inspirational! WELL DONE. liberty justice
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Thank you so much my friend for the lovely review, comments and pretty six stars! May God bless you today and always! Teri
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Teri. This is a nice faith Minute poem with good rhyming. In the second stanza, third line, there are only three syllables. "Ordeal" is a two-syllable word, not three. You can look it up on-line. Doesn't matter how you may pronounce it. Many people say "or-de-al," but is is "or-deal." Should be an easy fix. I hope this helps. Marilyn
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hi Teri. This is a nice faith Minute poem with good rhyming. In the second stanza, third line, there are only three syllables. "Ordeal" is a two-syllable word, not three. You can look it up on-line. Doesn't matter how you may pronounce it. Many people say "or-de-al," but is is "or-deal." Should be an easy fix. I hope this helps. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Thank you Marilyn for the lovely review, comment and help! love, Teri
Comment from lyenochka
Good one, Teri! I love how you always find a way to praise Jesus in your poems! There was one line that needed one more syllable:
"big ordeal " is only 3 syllables and needs four.
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Good one, Teri! I love how you always find a way to praise Jesus in your poems! There was one line that needed one more syllable:
"big ordeal " is only 3 syllables and needs four.
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Thank you my friend for the lovely review and comments. Thanks for the help! love, Teri
Comment from Gert sherwood
Don't say Never aging Teri you will write a minute poem, what you said about Jesus helping us through the difficult times in our lives is so true. You and I both know it
Gert
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Don't say Never aging Teri you will write a minute poem, what you said about Jesus helping us through the difficult times in our lives is so true. You and I both know it
Gert
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Thank you so much Gert for the lovely review and comments! love, Teri
Comment from Sherman541
I do believe and trust but it is hard sometimes. Beautiful picture - beautiful poem - sorry I have not been on to hard to deal with getting harder feel like I am dying . Love Sarah
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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I do believe and trust but it is hard sometimes. Beautiful picture - beautiful poem - sorry I have not been on to hard to deal with getting harder feel like I am dying . Love Sarah
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Thank you Sarah for the lovely review and imagery. Please hang in there my friend! prayers for you! love, Teri
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you are so welcome and I am trying hard :)
Comment from CD Richards
No need to request kindness, Teri - your minute poem is faultless. There is one line I read as only three syllables - "big ordeal", but that's just a local pronunciation thing. I can picture in my mind the way you'd say it, and it's definitely four :)
A great entry, and not just for a first time. Best of luck with it - Craig
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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No need to request kindness, Teri - your minute poem is faultless. There is one line I read as only three syllables - "big ordeal", but that's just a local pronunciation thing. I can picture in my mind the way you'd say it, and it's definitely four :)
A great entry, and not just for a first time. Best of luck with it - Craig
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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lol Thank you Craig for the very nice review and comments. I appreciate you hearing my voice in the words! Blessings, Teri
Comment from patcelaw
Fora first attempt at the format I would say you did well. It is nice seeing you attempt new formats. Many blessings for a wonderful weekend. Patricia
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Fora first attempt at the format I would say you did well. It is nice seeing you attempt new formats. Many blessings for a wonderful weekend. Patricia
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you my friend. I have to be in the mood to try anything different these days! love, Teri
Comment from karenina
I"m always kind I think. I noticed in THIS Minute Form Contest the traditional aabb/ccdd/eeff form is not needed, but the meter is. It would be nice if that were noted as I fear some will automatically assume the traditional rhyme scheme was required. The poem is lovely, the final lines of each stanza do not rhyme but flow beautifully--and I assume, then, they would meet the rather unusual rules for the contest. I wish you good luck!
Karenina
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reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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I"m always kind I think. I noticed in THIS Minute Form Contest the traditional aabb/ccdd/eeff form is not needed, but the meter is. It would be nice if that were noted as I fear some will automatically assume the traditional rhyme scheme was required. The poem is lovely, the final lines of each stanza do not rhyme but flow beautifully--and I assume, then, they would meet the rather unusual rules for the contest. I wish you good luck!
Karenina
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Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you my friend for the lovely review and comments. I did go back in and rhyme them. I was told they needed to rhyme. Who knows! lol love, Teri
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See? This is what happens when one posts a contests regarding a traditional form and then adds BUT you don't have to do this or that....it gets very confusing! I'm glad if they had to be rhymed, you did so...it is disappointing to join a contest and find out you have been eliminated for something such as that! :)
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It's o.k. my friend. I don't usually win anything, but I love trying. It helps my mind for the MS to stay active! love, Teri
Comment from Poetic Friend
Great poem for your first minute poem, Teri. It is pack with imagery, especially the first sentence.
The lack of punctuation works well to convey your message of God's blessings. The poem is quite inspirational.
Good luck, my friend.
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Great poem for your first minute poem, Teri. It is pack with imagery, especially the first sentence.
The lack of punctuation works well to convey your message of God's blessings. The poem is quite inspirational.
Good luck, my friend.
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you for the lovely review and comments! love, Teri
Comment from royowen
Well done Teri, a great attempt to write a minute poem,, however, there is no rhyme and there is supposed to be, dear girl. The rhyme scheme is aabb ccdd eeff, do you want me to help, I have an entry in the contest, have a look at that if you wish, good luck, blessings, Riy
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Well done Teri, a great attempt to write a minute poem,, however, there is no rhyme and there is supposed to be, dear girl. The rhyme scheme is aabb ccdd eeff, do you want me to help, I have an entry in the contest, have a look at that if you wish, good luck, blessings, Riy
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thanks my friend. I have no clue how to make this rhyme and say what I want it to say. If you have time I would appreciate your help, but it is not necessary. I just enjoyed trying to write it. Thank you my friend! Blessings, Teri
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I'm out for the day, can I try tommorrow?
