Pity Party
Feeling sorry for yourself?39 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is really good. I like the feelings and emotions that this poem conveys. You've done a fine job sharing with the reader a colorful way to describe self pity. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written poem. Well done Boogienights!
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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This is really good. I like the feelings and emotions that this poem conveys. You've done a fine job sharing with the reader a colorful way to describe self pity. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written poem. Well done Boogienights!
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you so much for this great review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Old Soldier
This is very good. I like the rhythm and structure. And this is something that's speaks for others. People can identify themselves here. I do think that the abstract objects stand better without the human elements. The human elements woman and orphan are true to life and black and white. The painting and books gives us colors. I hope that makes sense Thanks
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This is very good. I like the rhythm and structure. And this is something that's speaks for others. People can identify themselves here. I do think that the abstract objects stand better without the human elements. The human elements woman and orphan are true to life and black and white. The painting and books gives us colors. I hope that makes sense Thanks
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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It makes perfect sense, I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review and for the six stars.
Comment from meeshu
this is really great, boogie. a message mysterious and whimsical. I am curious about the form, is it original? variable rhyme, verses of 8 or10 lines and repeated lines. very interesting.......meeshu
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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this is really great, boogie. a message mysterious and whimsical. I am curious about the form, is it original? variable rhyme, verses of 8 or10 lines and repeated lines. very interesting.......meeshu
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you so much. I really don't pay much attention to form or structure, I just kind of write what I feel. Thanks again for reading. :)
Comment from robina1978
A lovely picture that complements your poem very well. Your poem goes through all kind of stages. Paint, music, book, an orphan, a woman at the end of a rope And finally death ghostlike. I loved it a lot, can just give you a virtual six.
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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A lovely picture that complements your poem very well. Your poem goes through all kind of stages. Paint, music, book, an orphan, a woman at the end of a rope And finally death ghostlike. I loved it a lot, can just give you a virtual six.
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you so much for this excellent review, It's most appreciated.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem feeling sorry for yourself and make a fuss of what we can be when we finally die, where will we haunt aqt the graveyard or the mansion on the hill.
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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A very well-written free verse poem feeling sorry for yourself and make a fuss of what we can be when we finally die, where will we haunt aqt the graveyard or the mansion on the hill.
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you for this great review, it means a lot coming from someone whose work I admire.
Comment from kiwijenny
Hmmm this is a thought provoking poem...I might be a knife..dull so can't cut..
I might be a candle without a wick....would that make me wicked?
Beautiful art..paint on that smile and fake it til you make it
Lol
God bless
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Hmmm this is a thought provoking poem...I might be a knife..dull so can't cut..
I might be a candle without a wick....would that make me wicked?
Beautiful art..paint on that smile and fake it til you make it
Lol
God bless
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Hahaha...that's great. Thank you so much.
Comment from Air Spirit
Simply outstanding!! It is beautifully and so descriptively written... the rhyming is free flowing and rhythmic.. I love the way you start off each stanza with a theme, and neatly wrap up the stanza repeating the same first line.. very effective and it really drives the point home... this theme is a reoccuring one in sobriety... when sobriety hangs on a thread and we enter the danger zone, we usually start off with a 'pity party'... to give us justification to use... but no thank you -- I think the first and opening stanza is my favorite -- largely because it is about music.. which is another favorite form of communicating for me... you paint a picture with your words, and the picture you show is timeless.. as there will always be a 'pity party' going on somewhere.. Exceptional message and exceptionally and creatively written!
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Simply outstanding!! It is beautifully and so descriptively written... the rhyming is free flowing and rhythmic.. I love the way you start off each stanza with a theme, and neatly wrap up the stanza repeating the same first line.. very effective and it really drives the point home... this theme is a reoccuring one in sobriety... when sobriety hangs on a thread and we enter the danger zone, we usually start off with a 'pity party'... to give us justification to use... but no thank you -- I think the first and opening stanza is my favorite -- largely because it is about music.. which is another favorite form of communicating for me... you paint a picture with your words, and the picture you show is timeless.. as there will always be a 'pity party' going on somewhere.. Exceptional message and exceptionally and creatively written!
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you so much for the six stars, and for such an excellent review.
I really appreciate you reading my poem.
Comment from royowen
"If I were" at the beginning of each stanza is a provocative line that looks to the downside of existence in whatever gender type, child or form, the writer wouldn't be up to scratch, I guess that's why it's called "Pity Party". But beautifully written in rhyming verse, it flows nicely, high in descriptive imagery and a smooth delivery, well done, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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"If I were" at the beginning of each stanza is a provocative line that looks to the downside of existence in whatever gender type, child or form, the writer wouldn't be up to scratch, I guess that's why it's called "Pity Party". But beautifully written in rhyming verse, it flows nicely, high in descriptive imagery and a smooth delivery, well done, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you for such a wonderful review!
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Well done
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks state and status of pity show if the poet were a woman or used book page, life depends upon situation and affairs created or influenced by environment, people, things, all uncontrollable; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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This speaks state and status of pity show if the poet were a woman or used book page, life depends upon situation and affairs created or influenced by environment, people, things, all uncontrollable; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thanks again for reviewing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A clever write with some emotion here as we indulge in self pity at times, you describe it well and 'it's my party and I'll cry if I want to!', well written, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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A clever write with some emotion here as we indulge in self pity at times, you describe it well and 'it's my party and I'll cry if I want to!', well written, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thanks so much for reading my poem, and for the great review.
