A Life In Your Pocket
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Fiery Red"A story in 100-word chapters
15 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute short story and I like the baby's name - Poppy. You used very good words and lovely art work with the cute picture of the adorable baby. love, teri
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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This is a very cute short story and I like the baby's name - Poppy. You used very good words and lovely art work with the cute picture of the adorable baby. love, teri
Comment Written 21-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thanks, Teri. I love that name too.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, Maria, a new mother too exhausted to name her own baby. This is a tightly written 100 word chapter about the mother's disconnection from Poppy and her father's growing connection with the child. This is a key scene in this emotionally intense chapter:
John tried to ignore the jibe and smiled good-naturedly. He wanted a peaceful life and he had learned the hard way that he must keep his opinions to himself.
One can't help but to feel sorry for the child and empathize with the mother who is unable to bond with her.
This is a compelling, blog like novel in small bites that satisfy.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Wow, Maria, a new mother too exhausted to name her own baby. This is a tightly written 100 word chapter about the mother's disconnection from Poppy and her father's growing connection with the child. This is a key scene in this emotionally intense chapter:
John tried to ignore the jibe and smiled good-naturedly. He wanted a peaceful life and he had learned the hard way that he must keep his opinions to himself.
One can't help but to feel sorry for the child and empathize with the mother who is unable to bond with her.
This is a compelling, blog like novel in small bites that satisfy.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 22-May-2018
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Thanks again for your constant support.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Maria;
Now, what is the matter with the name, 'Pat?' OR, is there some history about that name that we just aren't privy to yet? A deep, love for an old girlfriend? Or is it his mother's name?
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hi, Maria;
Now, what is the matter with the name, 'Pat?' OR, is there some history about that name that we just aren't privy to yet? A deep, love for an old girlfriend? Or is it his mother's name?
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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You guessed right as you already know!
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Ulla
Barb seems to be pretty tired and lethargic even. She doesn't appear to have many feelings for her newborn girl either. I wonder what will happen next. I really like the story, Maria Jose. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Barb seems to be pretty tired and lethargic even. She doesn't appear to have many feelings for her newborn girl either. I wonder what will happen next. I really like the story, Maria Jose. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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She has no feelings at all, I would say...
Thanks for reading.
Comment from aryr
It sound so frustrating for John, Maria. I could probably think quite easy on a word that totally describes Barb, that also begins with a 'b'. She didn't want a boy, she doesn't like flowery names. I am glad the baby finally has a name. Well done, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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It sound so frustrating for John, Maria. I could probably think quite easy on a word that totally describes Barb, that also begins with a 'b'. She didn't want a boy, she doesn't like flowery names. I am glad the baby finally has a name. Well done, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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I think the b-word is perfect for her. Thanks for reading.
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You are so very welcome Maria.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I think Poppy is an adorable name. I would expect her to like it as well, since it will be unique in every classroom. My daughter had to wonder if she was being called when the teacher said "Katy/ie" since there were so many of them in her class. :)
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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I think Poppy is an adorable name. I would expect her to like it as well, since it will be unique in every classroom. My daughter had to wonder if she was being called when the teacher said "Katy/ie" since there were so many of them in her class. :)
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Katie is pretty too, but my daughter is very happy with her name (she's called Iris) because there are very few people with the same name, especially here in Spain.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from misscookie
The baby is adorable is she you little angel now, if so what is her name?
Sometime I think men are very into themselves and puts the women need or wants aside thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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The baby is adorable is she you little angel now, if so what is her name?
Sometime I think men are very into themselves and puts the women need or wants aside thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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No, this is just a picture I found online.
And the story is pure fiction.
Thanks for reading, Cookie.
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Wow
Take care.
Cookie
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred word chapter about the new-born baby-girl who is now called Poppy by her father and no objection from her mother. She seems to detach her from her baby.
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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A very well-written hundred word chapter about the new-born baby-girl who is now called Poppy by her father and no objection from her mother. She seems to detach her from her baby.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Very detached indeed. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Hitcher
I can remember spending hours over a period of months going through names with my wife before the birth of our first child. We chose Sera. Sad that he basically didn't have an opinion or preference, those fractures visible again : )
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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I can remember spending hours over a period of months going through names with my wife before the birth of our first child. We chose Sera. Sad that he basically didn't have an opinion or preference, those fractures visible again : )
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Sera is a lovely name...
Yes, it's quite sad. But it was Barb who didn't have a preference, not John.
Thanks for your review.
Comment from damommy
I like that name.
He needs to take Poppy and run like the wind away from this crazy woman, or else their lives will be full of misery. I suspect that's coming in the story.
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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I like that name.
He needs to take Poppy and run like the wind away from this crazy woman, or else their lives will be full of misery. I suspect that's coming in the story.
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Not exactly, but you're on the right track. Thanks for reading, Yvonne.
