Granny's Revenge
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Comment from Ric Myworld
The old girl is staying busy, knocking them off three at a time now. Is it revenge? Or is she just plain mean? I'm beginning to wonder for sure. Thanks for sharing :-)
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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The old girl is staying busy, knocking them off three at a time now. Is it revenge? Or is she just plain mean? I'm beginning to wonder for sure. Thanks for sharing :-)
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your nice review. Granny was on a role for sure strictly for revenge. Thank goodness she wears out quick otherwise she probably would've killed a lot more.
Thank you again for all your support and your kind review, it means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from apky
That nurse is getting too nosy for my comfort. I wanted to scream at her to leave granny in peace. There is a lot of tension in this chapter from the very beginning and throughout to the end. Every step ahead there were tense moments whether for the police, the victims or for dear Matilda.
Excellent job.
You can do this(,) old gal.
Boss(,) I found a group that says they saw the couple leave.
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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That nurse is getting too nosy for my comfort. I wanted to scream at her to leave granny in peace. There is a lot of tension in this chapter from the very beginning and throughout to the end. Every step ahead there were tense moments whether for the police, the victims or for dear Matilda.
Excellent job.
You can do this(,) old gal.
Boss(,) I found a group that says they saw the couple leave.
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your exceptional review and all your kind words I'm very honored. The nurse is definitely a thorn in Matilda's side, at least for now, lol.
Thank you again for your exceptional review all your help, support, and friendship, it means so much to me, take care.
Comment from royowen
So, Matilda's cane is seen, Nancy notices that the cane ids in two pieces, snaps the two together, smells a salad smell, the cane is wet, wonders... She's still on her killing rampage, and our detective gang are still investigating. A very clever and resourceful killer is still on her madhouse rampage, clever plot. Good job, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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So, Matilda's cane is seen, Nancy notices that the cane ids in two pieces, snaps the two together, smells a salad smell, the cane is wet, wonders... She's still on her killing rampage, and our detective gang are still investigating. A very clever and resourceful killer is still on her madhouse rampage, clever plot. Good job, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review I'm glad you're enjoying this peculiar tale. The detectives have their work cut out for them since the killer is one they're least likely to suspect.
Thank you so much for all your support it means a great deal to me, take care.
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Well done
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So Granny failed to finish off one of her victims and left him in ICU. Will she go to his room to kill him or risk that he can identify her?
I like using ice to make bullets... very clever. :)
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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So Granny failed to finish off one of her victims and left him in ICU. Will she go to his room to kill him or risk that he can identify her?
I like using ice to make bullets... very clever. :)
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. The ice bullets is a combined idea. My daughter told a friend what I write, she came up with the ice idea, I added the shape, the gun, target area how to keep them solid longer. The research I guess lol.
Granny is a brave old gal so she might pay him a visit, lol.
Thank you so much for all your support it means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Misty
Your chapter definitely deserves five star5(s) You have to me done well with who the victims are of Granny revenge and how you are describing what the purpose of why she is so angry
Gert
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Hello Misty
Your chapter definitely deserves five star5(s) You have to me done well with who the victims are of Granny revenge and how you are describing what the purpose of why she is so angry
Gert
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review and your encouragement. I'm so glad you're enjoying this odd little story. Odd in the sense that most serial killers start at 27 and are typically white males. In my fictitious world, they can be any age, race or gender, lol. I like to keep it different, unusual something outside the box way outside the box, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship, they mean the world to me, take care.
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You are welcome Misty.
Gert
Comment from giraffmang
hi there,
The granny sure has some strength and stamina. it is amazing how she's never seen, especially as she seems to hobble about!
The bar door opens three large shadows staggers to the patio. - this is a run on sentence. I would suggest adding in 'and' after opens. Also it should be staggers rather than staggers.
Joe its Kirk; Sharon - it's.
with a rod that's approximately thirty inches in diameter - mught want to rethink this description. The diameter would be the cross section of the cane which I doubt is three feet across.
She says the weapon is a solid piece because of the depth of his wounds." - how could it be solid if it's got an 'ice gun' inside it?
"Kirk?" She asks, glancing - she asks.
jewelry - jewellery.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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hi there,
The granny sure has some strength and stamina. it is amazing how she's never seen, especially as she seems to hobble about!
The bar door opens three large shadows staggers to the patio. - this is a run on sentence. I would suggest adding in 'and' after opens. Also it should be staggers rather than staggers.
Joe its Kirk; Sharon - it's.
with a rod that's approximately thirty inches in diameter - mught want to rethink this description. The diameter would be the cross section of the cane which I doubt is three feet across.
She says the weapon is a solid piece because of the depth of his wounds." - how could it be solid if it's got an 'ice gun' inside it?
"Kirk?" She asks, glancing - she asks.
jewelry - jewellery.
All the best
G
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thank you for your very helpful review. The cane thing I wrote height and not diameter. Can you please explain what you meant about staggers rather than staggers. Both of the Jewelry spellings are right depending on where you live. You taught me something today, thanks.
Thank you again for all your help, support a really do appreciate it, take care.
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Yeah that's a typo stagger rather than staggers.
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I caught that mistake trying to figure out what you meant, lol.
