My Brothers' Keeper
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Shower Delights"Rachel feels responsible for her brother.
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Comment from apky
Very erotic writing here, and you write this well, the way I like sensuality written. You use a lot of subtle but succinct language that leaves the reader to let the mind roam and conjure up! This is the best, excellent writing that I also do in this genre.
Flawlessly sensual.
>>He conveniently placed the sponge on the shelf that surrounded the shower and was used to house the body wash, shampoo and sponges. His hands went back to her, one hand finding her tiny nub of excitement and the other teasing her lips before inserting one, then two fingers. He could not resist nibbling on her ear and kissing the side of her neck. She was so wet and so close. Within seconds she exploded around his fingers. He could feel her tightening around his fingers in spasms of pleasure. She collapsed against him in contentment. She was spent, she was happy.<<
spot that was tingling, that was sensitive, that she really wanted him to get too(to).
He was kind enough to quickly dry her back and she in turned dried hers(his?).
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reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Very erotic writing here, and you write this well, the way I like sensuality written. You use a lot of subtle but succinct language that leaves the reader to let the mind roam and conjure up! This is the best, excellent writing that I also do in this genre.
Flawlessly sensual.
>>He conveniently placed the sponge on the shelf that surrounded the shower and was used to house the body wash, shampoo and sponges. His hands went back to her, one hand finding her tiny nub of excitement and the other teasing her lips before inserting one, then two fingers. He could not resist nibbling on her ear and kissing the side of her neck. She was so wet and so close. Within seconds she exploded around his fingers. He could feel her tightening around his fingers in spasms of pleasure. She collapsed against him in contentment. She was spent, she was happy.<<
spot that was tingling, that was sensitive, that she really wanted him to get too(to).
He was kind enough to quickly dry her back and she in turned dried hers(his?).
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Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I really appreciate your kind comments and I will fix those errors shortly.
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
Admittedly I haven't read the previous chapters but this one held my interest the whole time, it was worded well and had strong character writes, the reader enjoyed the read
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reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Admittedly I haven't read the previous chapters but this one held my interest the whole time, it was worded well and had strong character writes, the reader enjoyed the read
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Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing and for your kind comments.
