Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

These types of tragic events makes a person wonder about the meaning of it all. Something so benign as photographing nature takes a bad turn. Your friend's desire to keep you from hearing of the event was a remarkable feat. I'm sorry for your loss. I wonder if we ever get over these things. There is just one thing I suggest changing and that is "in tact" to "intact." Marilyn

 Comment Written 14-May-2018

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reply by the author on 14-May-2018

The truth is when we step one foot onto the ground in the morning all bets are off. So live each day as if our last. Thanks for the intact correction. did it. yours, dian

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is so beautiful and moving, I'm so sorry for your loss. I agree with what you say about parents dying after their children. It's a scary thought.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-May-2018

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reply by the author on 14-May-2018

Hello Maria Jose Garcia,
Thanks for you wonderful review and your surprisingg and welcome review. yours, diana

Comment from F Scott Hafner

Exceptional

It is time you adopt the conventional spelling of the word that so haunts you. Bring that day into this modern world perspective. You have known too much pain, give it a rest - FriYAY!

 Comment Written 14-May-2018

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reply by the author on 14-May-2018

Thanks elf... point taken kiddo. I'll cheer up! Oliver Twist has nothing on me. I'm over it already Elf. Yours, diana

reply by F Scott Hafner on 14-May-2018

Was trying to add some humor against a difficult memory. Hit save by mistake. As I write a lot never sent, this probably would have been erased. As writers do, you have written about a few life changing things of late. Seems you have more than your fair share. But I may have said earlier, it takes a lot of pounding to make a samurai sword. The character resonates most with me is the artful dodger.

reply by the author on 14-May-2018

well Elf... I think I have the sensei's sword. Always a pleasure Elf. yours, diana

reply by F Scott Hafner on 14-May-2018

reply by F Scott Hafner on 14-May-2018

👍 and to quash hurtful rumors, Elf is not short for Elvis🤭

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for your courage to retell this tragic story. I hope that creating the poem has healing effects. The free verse with bits of rhyme is an effective vehicle. Warm regards- Joan

 Comment Written 14-May-2018

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reply by the author on 14-May-2018

Thanks so much Joan... I was once told by a poet of your stature... "in order to write, slash your lets and let them bleed onto the page." That is dramatic granted. But, I always hear that in my head. yours, diana

reply by Joan E. on 14-May-2018

Thank you for your compliment and for sharing your vivid inspiration. Keep up the splendid work- Joan

Comment from Phillip C Kuhn

Excellent

an amazing read, such compelling storytelling in poetry form, it conveys so much emotion and everything is so vivid, good work.

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 Comment Written 14-May-2018

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reply by the author on 14-May-2018

Thanks so much Phillip... your thought and word about this poem is humbling. yours, diana