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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from Writingfundimension
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Hi, Barbara

I like how you explained the different aspects of Judaism. In a few short paragraphs, it feels like you've given a good over-all perspective. Anderson is getting a good idea of what his life would be like married into a conservative Jewish family.

Very well done!

:) Bev

 Comment Written 17-May-2018


reply by the author on 19-May-2018
    Thank you for the kind review. I doubt Anderson is too worried. LOL
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Barb here is a virtual six rating for this chapter
How clever and talented you are to be able to write three different conversations between the two families.
Gert

 Comment Written 17-May-2018


reply by the author on 19-May-2018
    Thank you very much for the virtual six. I appreciate all reveiws.
Comment from Rasmine
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Hello, Barbara, :)

Good chapter. I thought the misunderstanding of what Shana said was hilarious!

Happy Belated Mother's Day to you too. I'm a cat mother, but... I guess that is a mother in a way.

Take care,
Nome

 Comment Written 17-May-2018


reply by the author on 19-May-2018
    It's a Mother is a huge way. We have two cats and they are fun but interesting.
Comment from kathleenspalding
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LOL, poor Shana (at the end)! Cute chapter has a little of everything, with some interesting info in the beginning, and also moves the story along. I saw no errors and only have a couple minor suggestions -

"I agree." Susan set her fork next to her plate. "Are you going to sell the penthouse?" - "... penthouse[[, Anderson]]?" (to let us know who she's talking to?)

"That being said, Dad, I was hoping [[you had - you'd have some?]] suggestions."

How many bedrooms[[, - delete comma]] do you think...

Well done!

 Comment Written 16-May-2018


reply by the author on 19-May-2018
    Thank you for the help. I will check each area.
reply by kathleenspalding on 19-May-2018
    You're welcome.
Comment from meeshu
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a very good segment in your story, Barbara. your character's discussion of Judaism was interesting and accurate but gave Orthodoxy short shrift. not intended as a pun.........meeshu

 Comment Written 16-May-2018


reply by the author on 16-May-2018
    Thank you for the kind review. I didn't want to spend too much time discussing Judaism. I was afraid I'd loose readers.
Comment from ciliverde
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I like the fact that you had some explanation of the Jewish faith in your story, it's interesting to me and not something I know very much about. Your story is flowing well, Shana is certainly kind of an innocent but she is an engaging character.
Carol

 Comment Written 14-May-2018


reply by the author on 15-May-2018
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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hey, barbara:

I know I'm jumping into this really, really late, but now that I'm back and
trying to carve out at least an hour a day for fanstory, I wanted to be sure
to support my favorite writers. I love the Mother's Day card, also. You are
right - it is a very complex job.

love,
jan

 Comment Written 14-May-2018


reply by the author on 15-May-2018
    I am so glad you're back. I hope you're not too lost in my post. If you have questions, please ask.
Comment from Artasylum
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I know from jews barbara... I am a shiksa married to a jewish man 21 years now... I've been fully indoctrinated. This was especially fun for me to read. thanks. diana

 Comment Written 14-May-2018


reply by the author on 14-May-2018
    Thank you for the insight. I appreciate it.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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"It should take care of the security guards. It has a guest house and a foreman's house." Zachery tapped his fork. "Shana wouldn't have to share a room." He grinned. I love the humour you add to your dramatic works Barbara, you are very talented and I always enjoy your skillful work well done as always love and regards Meiax

 Comment Written 14-May-2018


reply by the author on 14-May-2018
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Sasha
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Zachery is definitely a thorn in Anderson's side and enjoys it too. Thanks for the background information, it helps to keep everything clear. Nice work with this chapter and as always, I look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 14-May-2018


reply by the author on 14-May-2018
    Drew an Zack are normal brothers. LOL Thank you for the kind review.