The Whippoorwill
Alliterisen poem for Potlatch27 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Okay, alright, I am adding this to my bookcase - another poetry form I don't know but will learn, thanks to your wonderful notes. As for the poem itself? Beautiful, Yvonne. I especially love the alliteration of "whistling whippoorwill". :)
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
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Okay, alright, I am adding this to my bookcase - another poetry form I don't know but will learn, thanks to your wonderful notes. As for the poem itself? Beautiful, Yvonne. I especially love the alliteration of "whistling whippoorwill". :)
Comment Written 23-May-2018
reply by the author on 23-May-2018
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You are so kind, Dawn. I'm happy you enjoyed it that much. If you keep one, you'll give me the big head. lol
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:)))
Comment from Artasylum
Likely story... I suspect that "sedate" may be kind for lazy that girl of his. This image is stunningly, beautiful. I love Whippoorwills... thanks for the post. yours, diana
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Likely story... I suspect that "sedate" may be kind for lazy that girl of his. This image is stunningly, beautiful. I love Whippoorwills... thanks for the post. yours, diana
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I love to hear whippoorwills at night. Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Air Spirit
What a lovely and lyrical poem.... the sentiment is sweet, melancholy and appreciative... I loved the sentence "...Each night time brought him nearer,
the panes provided him a mirror..." because it seems as if the little whippoorwill is so joyous and full of life, that seeing his 'handsome' self in the window pane, adds to his enjoyment, and he can see the glorious reflection of his image... and can see what all of lucky souls who are graced by his presence have the opportunity to see! Delightful!
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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What a lovely and lyrical poem.... the sentiment is sweet, melancholy and appreciative... I loved the sentence "...Each night time brought him nearer,
the panes provided him a mirror..." because it seems as if the little whippoorwill is so joyous and full of life, that seeing his 'handsome' self in the window pane, adds to his enjoyment, and he can see the glorious reflection of his image... and can see what all of lucky souls who are graced by his presence have the opportunity to see! Delightful!
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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We used to have a whippoorwill every night. Each night, he would get closer to the house. I expected to find him on my bedpost any time. lol
Thank you for a lovely review.
Comment from mvbrooks
I loved the personification of the bird and his unseen mate who is not a social or vibrant in character for she "seemingly is too sedate
to answer with an ardent trill" Fun read that evoked a smile.
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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I loved the personification of the bird and his unseen mate who is not a social or vibrant in character for she "seemingly is too sedate
to answer with an ardent trill" Fun read that evoked a smile.
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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I'm glad I could make you smile. Thank you so much.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Hi there, This is an adorable poem on the little birds, I thought it was cute you didn't meet his mate, lol A nice potlatch, I like the style. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Hi there, This is an adorable poem on the little birds, I thought it was cute you didn't meet his mate, lol A nice potlatch, I like the style. ~Kerry
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you. I'm so glad you do. It was fun to write. We used to have a whippoorwill that got closer each night. I expected to find him on the bedpost any time. lol
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lol, that would be something:)) Have a nice day!
Comment from Boogienights
Love this great poem about one of my favorite birds. They are not the prettiest bird in the world but I love the sounds that they make when they talk together. I loved the formatting and the color you used. Thanks for sharing and for the reminder about spring and summers.
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Love this great poem about one of my favorite birds. They are not the prettiest bird in the world but I love the sounds that they make when they talk together. I loved the formatting and the color you used. Thanks for sharing and for the reminder about spring and summers.
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you so much. I love them, too. We used to have one that came closer every night. I expected to find him on the bedpost any time. lol
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a cutie this little bird is--great picture. Your words read well with great rhymes, & a super little story. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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What a cutie this little bird is--great picture. Your words read well with great rhymes, & a super little story. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thanks for reviewing, and for keeping Potlatch going. You do a great job!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Yvonne,
This is a lovely poem of the whippoorwill
that is very nicely rhymed and reads smoothly.
I'm not sure if the alliterated words
must be consecutive or not,
but I like your poem exactly as it is.
I've never seen a whippoorwill in nature
they seem to be quite elusive.
Love the pale green presentation.
I hope you are well, my friend
Excellent
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Hello Yvonne,
This is a lovely poem of the whippoorwill
that is very nicely rhymed and reads smoothly.
I'm not sure if the alliterated words
must be consecutive or not,
but I like your poem exactly as it is.
I've never seen a whippoorwill in nature
they seem to be quite elusive.
Love the pale green presentation.
I hope you are well, my friend
Excellent
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you so much. Yes, I am doing okay after losing my mother May 4. She was 96.
We used to live in the woods, and every night, a whippoorwill would come closer to the house. I expected to see him on the bed post any time.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-A good poem using effective
rhyme, meter, and observation of the whippoorwill.
-It is interesting how birds will look
at a reflection and think it is one of them.
-I liked your poem very much.
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-A good poem using effective
rhyme, meter, and observation of the whippoorwill.
-It is interesting how birds will look
at a reflection and think it is one of them.
-I liked your poem very much.
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you. I'm so glad you like it. Whippoorwills are sort of plain birds, but they have lovely voices.
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You are welcome. They do have a nice sound, but I have never seen one!
Comment from judiverse
One of the things I love about spring--opening the door in the morning and hearing the birds sing. Beautifully done, and you did a great job of bringing in the alliteration in each line. I especially like seemingly sedate. The female birds are just less flamboyant. Maybe they'd like to do some strutting too. Do you suppose he likes the window so he can see the reflection of his handsome self? Excellent rhyme.
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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One of the things I love about spring--opening the door in the morning and hearing the birds sing. Beautifully done, and you did a great job of bringing in the alliteration in each line. I especially like seemingly sedate. The female birds are just less flamboyant. Maybe they'd like to do some strutting too. Do you suppose he likes the window so he can see the reflection of his handsome self? Excellent rhyme.
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you for the great review. I imagine he fancies his image in the glass. I have a cardinal that loves to look in my passenger side rear view mirror when my car is home. lol
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Oh, the vanity of those males. judi
